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Tales of our Times

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Collection of short stories

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Comment from Bill Schott
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This fifty-word story, Tuesday, has the proper word count and leaves me considering that between Matty's medications and the local beer, he is feeling pretty good.

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2023


reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
    Thanks for reading zanya
Comment from Lisasview
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Had a bit of an issue trying to figure out what happened at the end... A metal hand... so a robot?
and wasn't Matty afraid... I mean he said What the Heck...
Anyway, just food for thought...
Lisasview, new to this site

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2023


reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
    Thanks for reading zanya
Comment from Wendy G
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That might be the reality sooner than we think. This is a well written story with a good twist at the end. Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2023


reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
    Great reveiw- looks like we're heading that way!!!zanya
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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Is this a view into the future when we make friends with robots who are the only things that are prepared to spend time with us and listen to our woes? A poignant write, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2023


reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
    What an interesting comment! Scary prospect, isn't it ? zanya
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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Interesting entry for the 50 Word Flash Fiction writing prompt contest. I don't understand it.

You kept it short as you were supposed to . . Good luck in the contest.

Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2023


reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
    Thanks for reading and reviewing. Those Bots may be closer than we think!! zanya
Comment from Paul Manton
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A very successful mystery in 50 words.
For me this is really enigmatic - but unlike many Brits, I have my 'repeat prescription' (meds) delivered to my door too.
The question here is, just who (or what) is delivering Matty's meds this Tuesday. Far as I remember none of my pharmacists, or their drivers, possess metal hands. So are we in a scifi future here, where the meds are roboticaly delivered? Has California got that far yet - maybe in Japan?
But here it looks like you have an android delivery service, which makes the final line both incongruous and hilariously funny.
Matty is fazed by nothing. The old codger!
Loved it.
Paul

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2023


reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
    The old codger! Love it -great reveiw ! zanya
reply by Paul Manton on 10-Jul-2023
    You're welcome.
    Thanks from another old codger.
    Paul
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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A robot I assume:) Fun, unpredictable and neatly contained in your well written 50 word flash. This is a difficult exercise and I think you achieve it well. The last 4 lines very cleverly and evocatively done. Thanks for sharing. Good luck! Debbie

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2023


reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
    Great reveiw zanya
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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A robot I assume:) Fun, unpredictable and neatly contained in your well written 50 word flash. This is a difficult exercise and I think you achieve it well. The last 4 lines very cleverly and evocatively done. Thanks for sharing. Good luck! Debbie

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2023


reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
    Thanks for sharing zanya
Comment from JSD
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Excellent concise writing to satisfy the demands of the prompt but you have managed to describe a dystopian scenario with real skill. Your evocation of tone and atmosphere at the end is excellent.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2023


reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
    Superb review zanya