Guided by Faith
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Comment from JT traveller
That is another fantastic write. Building tension by introducing some jealousy. The conversations bring the characters to life--an interesting wholesome story. Jacqueline
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2023
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That is another fantastic write. Building tension by introducing some jealousy. The conversations bring the characters to life--an interesting wholesome story. Jacqueline
Comment Written 18-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from rama devi
It's always easy to dive in to your stories even without reading previous chapters because your writing style is easy to read and flows with great dialog-driven pacing. Your characters sounds nice.
I noted a few spag suggestions:
*from previous:
Lifting up a moon(-)shaped night-light,
* and apricot Danish ready(,) and she delivered them to their table.
*"It's for Emma. I know she loves fruit(,) and it's expensive. She's so nice(,) I thought I'd help a little."
*Seth's eyes met hers(,) and he nodded.
*At the end of the story, Emma and the children discussed (how) even though they all look differently they're all special, just like Elmer.
*Chuckling(,) Carl said, "I don't believe that any more than Jake does.
*But in a few months(,) there'll be eight years between us.
Sorry I can't keep up more often--less active here than usual.
Blessings,
rd
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2023
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It's always easy to dive in to your stories even without reading previous chapters because your writing style is easy to read and flows with great dialog-driven pacing. Your characters sounds nice.
I noted a few spag suggestions:
*from previous:
Lifting up a moon(-)shaped night-light,
* and apricot Danish ready(,) and she delivered them to their table.
*"It's for Emma. I know she loves fruit(,) and it's expensive. She's so nice(,) I thought I'd help a little."
*Seth's eyes met hers(,) and he nodded.
*At the end of the story, Emma and the children discussed (how) even though they all look differently they're all special, just like Elmer.
*Chuckling(,) Carl said, "I don't believe that any more than Jake does.
*But in a few months(,) there'll be eight years between us.
Sorry I can't keep up more often--less active here than usual.
Blessings,
rd
Comment Written 18-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2023
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Commas are a downfall for me. I tend to fall into the when in doubt leave them out category. LOL Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
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:-))) Most welcome, dear.
Comment from royowen
I'm wondering what's wrong with Emma's birth mother. I can see your teaching of children is influencing your writing, and why shouldn't it, you've been doing it for awhile.another great episode Barbara, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2023
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I'm wondering what's wrong with Emma's birth mother. I can see your teaching of children is influencing your writing, and why shouldn't it, you've been doing it for awhile.another great episode Barbara, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 18-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Most welcome
Comment from Ben Colder
It is a bit long, but I suppose you felt it needed it. I can see your years of teaching unfolding in this write. You know much about children reading classes. Good one, Barb.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2023
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It is a bit long, but I suppose you felt it needed it. I can see your years of teaching unfolding in this write. You know much about children reading classes. Good one, Barb.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. I thought about breaking it up then the only real place to do it would've given me a long one and then a really short one.
Comment from Teri7
Barbara, I am so happy to see I have six stars to give you for this great chapter. You used great descriptive words and very good dialogue. I love the video you used too! That is really cute! love and blessings, Teri
I forgot to tell you I love Elmer!!!
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2023
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Barbara, I am so happy to see I have six stars to give you for this great chapter. You used great descriptive words and very good dialogue. I love the video you used too! That is really cute! love and blessings, Teri
I forgot to tell you I love Elmer!!!
Comment Written 18-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, this was another great chapter to the story. Seth can't see it yet, but of course he's smitten sister or no sister.
I'm loved that Cupid sand New York is New York, all right. Can't wait to go back. Ulla xx
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2023
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Hi Barbara, this was another great chapter to the story. Seth can't see it yet, but of course he's smitten sister or no sister.
I'm loved that Cupid sand New York is New York, all right. Can't wait to go back. Ulla xx
Comment Written 18-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from judiverse
That police officer in the video had some good moves! Although Peggy is motivated by her jealousy of Emma, I've got to agree with her that the sidewalk isn't a good place for this activity. It's great that Emma wants to encourage the children to readl but she could have found a better place. Seth also mentions the safety concerns, that officers may have to leave the spot to cover more serious matters, possibly criminal activity. Emma's young and didn't think the project through very clearly. True, the library should have offered a summer reading program. Most cities do. I was wondering, is Peggy, and assistant librarian, the boss of the librarian? Peggy is the one making most of the fuss. Oh, I'm eager to learn what's so terrible about Emma's birth mother. I hope they find out who's been stalking Emma. I'm beginning to wonder if it has something to do with her birth mother. It looks like Ace may be a matchmaker. What a dog! I understand Seth's concerns about the age difference between him and Emma. judi
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2023
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That police officer in the video had some good moves! Although Peggy is motivated by her jealousy of Emma, I've got to agree with her that the sidewalk isn't a good place for this activity. It's great that Emma wants to encourage the children to readl but she could have found a better place. Seth also mentions the safety concerns, that officers may have to leave the spot to cover more serious matters, possibly criminal activity. Emma's young and didn't think the project through very clearly. True, the library should have offered a summer reading program. Most cities do. I was wondering, is Peggy, and assistant librarian, the boss of the librarian? Peggy is the one making most of the fuss. Oh, I'm eager to learn what's so terrible about Emma's birth mother. I hope they find out who's been stalking Emma. I'm beginning to wonder if it has something to do with her birth mother. It looks like Ace may be a matchmaker. What a dog! I understand Seth's concerns about the age difference between him and Emma. judi
Comment Written 18-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2023
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Thank you for the wonderful encouragment.
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You're very welcome. I can't help commenting on the behavior of the characters. That must mean you're doing a great job of describing them and their behavior. judi
Comment from Paul McFarland
This is a really good chapter, Barb. I'm sure that everybody is anxious to see Seth and Emma get together. Don't drag this out too long. What's going to happen to Peggy?
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2023
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This is a really good chapter, Barb. I'm sure that everybody is anxious to see Seth and Emma get together. Don't drag this out too long. What's going to happen to Peggy?
Comment Written 18-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2023
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It's not as long as it seems, but I only post once a week so it seems forever. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. I was so interested in reading that I was disappointed when the chapter ended. The romantic plot thickens, not one love triangle but two. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2023
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This is another excellent chapter. I was so interested in reading that I was disappointed when the chapter ended. The romantic plot thickens, not one love triangle but two. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from nomi338
It is a shame that we can't just blink someone stupid, petty and jealous into another dimension. Peggy Barton will do all that she can to try and get someone who is clearly not meant for her, does not want her, and who will never be hers.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2023
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It is a shame that we can't just blink someone stupid, petty and jealous into another dimension. Peggy Barton will do all that she can to try and get someone who is clearly not meant for her, does not want her, and who will never be hers.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2023
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Peggy just refuses to get the message. I can't wait to see how Seth solves this problem. Thank you for sharing.
