Comment from Melodie Michelle

Excellent

Excellent narrative story indeed as well as being well written and thought out! It captured my attention until the very end!

Thanks for sharing and may God bless you and your family!

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2023

Thanks Ms. Michelle. I am doing my best to bring out difficulties of individuals affected by nature's acts and society's lack of understanding about it. The character is fictitious but it is based on a living person I came to observer in the street of Hollywood.I appreciate your comments and many thanks for the rating. Please read all chapters if you ca. All the best.
Arun

reply by Melodie Michelle on 07-Jun-2023

;-)

reply by the author on 07-Jun-2023

Thanks. Please read from chapter 1.
Arun

Comment from prettybluebirds

Excellent

You should use an em dash between me and man instead of a hyphen. In the second paragraph, you left out the word I before was. Further down, You have pitched dark where it should say pitch dark. In the last paragraph, Trusty should be Trustee. It is the proper word for trustee of an estate. The story is interesting and well-thought-out.

 Comment Written 03-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 03-Jun-2023

Thanks for valuable edits. The way my language skills are going down with age, I wonder if I will be able to write anything in the English language and self correct features fail to correct the gramatik errors. I will correct the errors at once. Appreciate your ratings.

reply by the author on 03-Jun-2023

The FS software does not allow use of em dash or other symbols. In the original draft I have em dash that gets replaced by strange symbols like ???* etc.

reply by prettybluebirds on 05-Jun-2023

Replace it on FanStory with three hyphens linked together. That is how I solved the problem. Good luck.

reply by the author on 05-Jun-2023

I will try that. Thanks. All the best.