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Red Skeletons

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Haunting Poetry for the Darkness in us all

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Comment from Liz O'Neill
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This is one of the tactics of crazy making they use. They tell me something about themselves. Then they spend time telling you an entirely new fact about themself. We would get to know what they're really up to if we combined notes. A perfect description: "Smudged and Blurred" There ismuch more,but this is enough

 Comment Written 07-Jun-2023

reply by the author on 08-Jun-2023
    Thank you so much.
reply by Liz O'Neill on 09-Jun-2023
    You're welcome
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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A destructive relationship I assume that crosses boundaries and leaves you feeling that there is nothing left but to bury the damage caused and move on. Just my opinion. Thanks for sharing this passion-filled verse. Good luck! Debbie

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2023

reply by the author on 05-Jun-2023
    It is destructive. I am having family issues with a cousin who thinks he is better than everyone else. 45 years old and his way to have a conversation is "I'm better than you ha, ha, ha." It is hard to have adult conversations with someone who acts like a child. Lucky for him I get it all out in my writing so I don't have to go to jail.
Comment from Eleri
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This is a very dramatic poem that sticks to the 3-6-9 rules well. I admit that I don't quite understand all of it but then that is me and not your writing. The last verse seems slightly disconnected from the other two for me but I am sure others will enjoy and understand it better than I do.
Good luck in the competition
Eleri

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2023

reply by the author on 05-Jun-2023
    Thank you for taking the time to read and review.
Comment from patcelaw
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If we are to have friends and influence people then we must be done with it chaos that we create. I enjoyed this poem very much.have a blessed evening. Patricia

 Comment Written 31-May-2023

reply by the author on 05-Jun-2023
    Thank you.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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Jealousy and greed can cause disruption in lives and the lines are blurred when others cross them, a poignant write for the contest, much enjoyed, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 31-May-2023

reply by the author on 05-Jun-2023
    Thank you so much.
Comment from Goodadvicechan
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The picture is about devils. They do harm more than anything good.

I may be wrong.

This poem leads me to think of our messy political situation as you say on the poem: " Bathed in hate
You are consumed by greed."

Thanks for sharing

 Comment Written 31-May-2023

reply by the author on 05-Jun-2023
    That was not my intention, but you are right the political system is bathed in greed.