Silentious Sex
Was it her sensual smile?22 total reviews
Comment from Mary Vigasin
John, This is an intriguing poem. It paints dark images, violence and a love that consumes both parties. Beautiful is a hard word to use, but how about stunning, profound, and brutal? So many women get trapped in a harmful relationship; they do not have the strength to walk away or love the guy regardless of how they are treated.
Best wishes,
Mary
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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John, This is an intriguing poem. It paints dark images, violence and a love that consumes both parties. Beautiful is a hard word to use, but how about stunning, profound, and brutal? So many women get trapped in a harmful relationship; they do not have the strength to walk away or love the guy regardless of how they are treated.
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment Written 26-May-2023
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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Mary, thank you so much for the great review. It's always an honor to have your reviews. Thank you for the six!
Comment from jake cosmos aller
a very dark and moving poem filled with dark images, and thoughts about love, madness, gangs, violence and the lure of the dark side of life that overwhelms us at time
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a very dark and moving poem filled with dark images, and thoughts about love, madness, gangs, violence and the lure of the dark side of life that overwhelms us at time
Comment Written 26-May-2023
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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Thank you, Jake!
Comment from royowen
I must admit this sounds more a flash fiction John, I was surprised at the ending, you snuck up on me, but you write what you write, it's not your fault. Beautifully written, we sometimes don't know what will read it's head, well done, good job my friend, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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I must admit this sounds more a flash fiction John, I was surprised at the ending, you snuck up on me, but you write what you write, it's not your fault. Beautifully written, we sometimes don't know what will read it's head, well done, good job my friend, blessings Roy
Comment Written 26-May-2023
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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Thank you, Roy, for the charitable review. It is always nice to hear your comments. Perhaps a bit to dark?
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Bless you
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, interesting poem, pretty dark but I understand, I get into that mood sometimes. The ending was a little confusing.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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Hello, interesting poem, pretty dark but I understand, I get into that mood sometimes. The ending was a little confusing.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 26-May-2023
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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Thank you for your review, GBR!
Comment from karenina
For all the women in this world who believe if they love "him" enough and believe enough there will be some extreme unction from the Holy Spirit and miracles will happen. This is as dark as a moonless sky, John--but profound in the depth of emotion and the ultimately inevitable ending. You've done it again, my friend. Gooseflesh. Sorrow. A nod to your writing prowess!
Karenina
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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For all the women in this world who believe if they love "him" enough and believe enough there will be some extreme unction from the Holy Spirit and miracles will happen. This is as dark as a moonless sky, John--but profound in the depth of emotion and the ultimately inevitable ending. You've done it again, my friend. Gooseflesh. Sorrow. A nod to your writing prowess!
Karenina
Comment Written 26-May-2023
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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Karenina! Thank you so much for the six! I'm not sure if most have accepted the obscurity of this piece, but I guess if one doesn't want to see through the darkness one won't see the light. Thanks again my friend! I pray all is well with you!
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Loved this. You are a master, my friend!
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Well, he warned her with "find someone new" and "it wall all I knew". And the reference to him as satan.
I'm not sure I understand it all, but enough to know that he was never going to change and she seemed to bring out the devil in him, even as she tried to save him.
I think I can post a review and come back and change the rating; if so, I'll be back on Sunday to update this to six stars.
This is really your thing, John!
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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Well, he warned her with "find someone new" and "it wall all I knew". And the reference to him as satan.
I'm not sure I understand it all, but enough to know that he was never going to change and she seemed to bring out the devil in him, even as she tried to save him.
I think I can post a review and come back and change the rating; if so, I'll be back on Sunday to update this to six stars.
This is really your thing, John!
Comment Written 26-May-2023
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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Thank you, Pam! It's always great to read your encouraging words. I struggle with the dark sides far as writing goes and try not to let it consume me. But, once in a great while it rears its devilish head. Thanks again, Pam
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I enjoy writing, reading, and watching dark occasionally myself. People are often surprised by that. I'm trying to balance my joy:-)
Comment from nomi338
Oh. You went there. I was afraid you would. My mind screamed out a silent no, don't, but you took me to that place I did not wish to visit. Like watching a horror movie with a familiar plot. You just know that at any moment the monster is going to appear. You know it , but you still react as if you did not. Dark? Yes. Real? Too much so.
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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Oh. You went there. I was afraid you would. My mind screamed out a silent no, don't, but you took me to that place I did not wish to visit. Like watching a horror movie with a familiar plot. You just know that at any moment the monster is going to appear. You know it , but you still react as if you did not. Dark? Yes. Real? Too much so.
Comment Written 26-May-2023
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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Ha! nomi! Thank you so much for the great review. I'm always honored when you stop by to review my work. Thank you again!
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You are most welcome. I often search for certain writers especially because I know I am not going to be disappointed. Thank you for another great post.
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Thank you, nomi
Comment from Shirley McLain
Hi John, I liked your poem at least until I read the last line. I'm not sure I understood it. Did he kill her, because he was the devil's servant? You'll have to explain it to my thick head. Have a great afternoon. Shirley
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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Hi John, I liked your poem at least until I read the last line. I'm not sure I understood it. Did he kill her, because he was the devil's servant? You'll have to explain it to my thick head. Have a great afternoon. Shirley
Comment Written 26-May-2023
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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Yes, Shirley he killed her in the end! It was a dark piece and perhaps a bit too deep! I'm happy you liked it!
Comment from GWHARGIS
Sorry, John, but I'm out of sixes. This was one of those poetic stories that rivaled Cat on a Hot Tin Roof. It had the seduction, the brooding backstop, the undying love all rolled nicely in beautiful filigree words. Well, well, very well written. Gretchen
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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Sorry, John, but I'm out of sixes. This was one of those poetic stories that rivaled Cat on a Hot Tin Roof. It had the seduction, the brooding backstop, the undying love all rolled nicely in beautiful filigree words. Well, well, very well written. Gretchen
Comment Written 26-May-2023
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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Thank you, Gretchen! Just the honorable mention of the six is plenty for me along with your encouraging words.
Comment from Richard Montfort Cary
John,
Wow! What a Post! An engaging story. A whopper of a tale. Good rhymes and structure, just couplets moving along. If there is a metaphor in this poem, be warned! :>) Edgar would be cheering in the background.
Richard
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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John,
Wow! What a Post! An engaging story. A whopper of a tale. Good rhymes and structure, just couplets moving along. If there is a metaphor in this poem, be warned! :>) Edgar would be cheering in the background.
Richard
Comment Written 26-May-2023
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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Thank you, Richard, for the great review and kind words. It's always nice to hear from you.
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So welcome!!!
