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An Emotional Guided Tour12 total reviews
Comment from pome lover
A tour of depression, it appears. Of disappointment and regrets. A downward spiral of feelings. Disillusions, despair and decline.
What would it take to raise your spirits? To lift you up? To challenge you? I hope it presents itself or you find it, yourself. Life should be worth living.
Katharine
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reply by the author on 24-May-2023
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A tour of depression, it appears. Of disappointment and regrets. A downward spiral of feelings. Disillusions, despair and decline.
What would it take to raise your spirits? To lift you up? To challenge you? I hope it presents itself or you find it, yourself. Life should be worth living.
Katharine
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Comment Written 22-May-2023
reply by the author on 24-May-2023
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There was much intent with every bit of the construct of this poem and more relatable to those that have experienced this type of lows. If one has never experienced this themselves, then I hope it conveys insight in to one's loved ones that may feel this way. For those that have experienced it, I hope they know they aren't alone. Above all, I hope it means something to those that read it. It meant a great deal to me to write it. Thank you for your review!
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I am sorry that you are going through this. I didn't mean to make light of it by saying I hope something will lift your spirits. I hope something will. In the mean time, take care of yourself.
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Thank you for being so sweet. I really wasn't trying to worry or stress anyone. My writing tends to be dark. It's what I express the best. Thanks again though!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I enjoyed the thought-provoking nature of this verse, its journey through life's currents of emotion, my favourite stanzas being the third and fourth from the bottom. Your skill with imagery is impressive and the whole verse carries the reader through on a picturesque ride of well expressed feeling and mood. I think the last stanza probably deserves to have a little more impact and end less abruptly but, all in all an excellent post. Well done and good luck! Debbie
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reply by the author on 24-May-2023
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I enjoyed the thought-provoking nature of this verse, its journey through life's currents of emotion, my favourite stanzas being the third and fourth from the bottom. Your skill with imagery is impressive and the whole verse carries the reader through on a picturesque ride of well expressed feeling and mood. I think the last stanza probably deserves to have a little more impact and end less abruptly but, all in all an excellent post. Well done and good luck! Debbie
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Comment Written 22-May-2023
reply by the author on 24-May-2023
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I believe you reviewed it before I made some minor changes to the last stanza. I wasn't happy with it either until I slept on it and then made changes a few hours later. I think I may have resolved your concern with the edits. Please have a look. It now says what I intended. Thank you so much for your review!
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Yes, I think it's definitely an improvement. Well done! PS I end up changing my verse all the time.
