Stargazing
Fiction9 total reviews
Comment from Monica Chaddick
I thought that this was a really well written story. I like how you kept describing various things that the character missed from earth, and comparing those memories to where she is now. The only thing I would suggest is that you go back through and take care of punctuation. I spotted several mistakes in that area, but I still thought overall that the story was worth five stars. Good luck!
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2023
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I thought that this was a really well written story. I like how you kept describing various things that the character missed from earth, and comparing those memories to where she is now. The only thing I would suggest is that you go back through and take care of punctuation. I spotted several mistakes in that area, but I still thought overall that the story was worth five stars. Good luck!
Comment Written 31-May-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2023
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Great review - difficult to imagine how living might change were we to migrate!! zanya
Comment from Andrea Kepple
You really got in the head of the Grandmother who is facing the last part of her life in an alien environment with so many questions about her past and the future of her family. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2023
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You really got in the head of the Grandmother who is facing the last part of her life in an alien environment with so many questions about her past and the future of her family. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 30-May-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2023
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Thanks for reading and a great review zanya
Comment from Cathy M
What a thought-provoking short story. The telling of it is on par with wondering what is happening and what will happen on the planet Earth. Gives us all something to think about.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2023
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What a thought-provoking short story. The telling of it is on par with wondering what is happening and what will happen on the planet Earth. Gives us all something to think about.
Comment Written 30-May-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2023
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Yes its such a big issue for humans! Thanks for sharing zanya
Comment from damommy
Wow! This is a wonderful story and deserving of a six, but I'm out of them. It looks to me like you have winner here. I hope you do.
I like the questions you raised. It seems to me like this lady has been there a while but is still having trouble adapting.
I'd like to see this story continued. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2023
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Wow! This is a wonderful story and deserving of a six, but I'm out of them. It looks to me like you have winner here. I hope you do.
I like the questions you raised. It seems to me like this lady has been there a while but is still having trouble adapting.
I'd like to see this story continued. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-May-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2023
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Great review zanya
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This will someday happen, the world will become uninhabitable, especially when the sun fades as it does have a lifespan. It will take about 8 billion years before this happens and humans will have found another planet to inhabit with its own sun and moon. I enjoyed your inventive write with a lot of truth behind these words Zanya, love Dolly x
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This will someday happen, the world will become uninhabitable, especially when the sun fades as it does have a lifespan. It will take about 8 billion years before this happens and humans will have found another planet to inhabit with its own sun and moon. I enjoyed your inventive write with a lot of truth behind these words Zanya, love Dolly x
Comment Written 21-May-2023
Comment from country ranch writer
They night find compatible living for everyone one day beyond the star's but not in my time time is running out for me I don't plan on living forever.
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They night find compatible living for everyone one day beyond the star's but not in my time time is running out for me I don't plan on living forever.
Comment Written 21-May-2023
Comment from BethShelby
This is an excellent story of how many of us would feel about having to leave this planet and go somewhere elwe in order for life to continue. I'm not intot science fiction but I think you story of what it might b4 like makes sense. I think most of us would find it frightening to be somewhere in spact trying to adapt. Good luck in the contest.
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This is an excellent story of how many of us would feel about having to leave this planet and go somewhere elwe in order for life to continue. I'm not intot science fiction but I think you story of what it might b4 like makes sense. I think most of us would find it frightening to be somewhere in spact trying to adapt. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-May-2023
Comment from Frank Malley
This first-person monologue is long on analysis but short on wow. What has befallen this Granma/Moonma would be full of thrilling details and startling descriptions. Without surprise, this piece reads like a solemn letter home from a relative far away. The thematic basis of a damaged Earth is of course important, but these points are made over and over again in both documentary and op/ed writing. Imaginative details could put more oomph into this package.
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This first-person monologue is long on analysis but short on wow. What has befallen this Granma/Moonma would be full of thrilling details and startling descriptions. Without surprise, this piece reads like a solemn letter home from a relative far away. The thematic basis of a damaged Earth is of course important, but these points are made over and over again in both documentary and op/ed writing. Imaginative details could put more oomph into this package.
Comment Written 21-May-2023
Comment from patcelaw
Sadly, today it seems that many are trying to escape the dysfunction that's going on on planet earth. They tried to escape it by denying that it is happening. Are they try to escape it by throwing money at it. Neither one is the answer I don't think I think that it comes down to the fact that we need to trust God and his wisdom. Patricia.
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Sadly, today it seems that many are trying to escape the dysfunction that's going on on planet earth. They tried to escape it by denying that it is happening. Are they try to escape it by throwing money at it. Neither one is the answer I don't think I think that it comes down to the fact that we need to trust God and his wisdom. Patricia.
Comment Written 21-May-2023
