Honey Bee
A vital environmental friend33 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Congratulations, Debbie, on your win of 1st place.
You did a great job--love the use of alliteration
and the perfect picture. Your notes were informative,
too. Where would we be without bees--in serious
trouble?
Thanks for sharing, Jan
reply by the author on 23-May-2023
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Congratulations, Debbie, on your win of 1st place.
You did a great job--love the use of alliteration
and the perfect picture. Your notes were informative,
too. Where would we be without bees--in serious
trouble?
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Comment Written 22-May-2023
reply by the author on 23-May-2023
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Thank you so much, Jan, for your lovely rating and feedback. Am delighted you enjoyed this. Take care Debbie
Comment from Jamison Brown
Congratulations and kudos, Debbie. A well deserved win.
From the masterful alliteration to the well-chosen artwork, this was a great 5-7-5. I love how you portrayed the honey bee as a farmer, with her crop being sweet (taste) and golden (sight). The word gifts is also well-chosen and adds to the message of charity. Simply an impressive work.
Take care. - Jamison
reply by the author on 22-May-2023
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Congratulations and kudos, Debbie. A well deserved win.
From the masterful alliteration to the well-chosen artwork, this was a great 5-7-5. I love how you portrayed the honey bee as a farmer, with her crop being sweet (taste) and golden (sight). The word gifts is also well-chosen and adds to the message of charity. Simply an impressive work.
Take care. - Jamison
Comment Written 22-May-2023
reply by the author on 22-May-2023
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Thank you so much for your kind review and very thoughtful comments. If I had a reviewer vote left you would have it. Best wishes Debbie
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You are very welcome.
Comment from jaded831
Your poem gave me a good feeling as I read. It reminded us how Mother Nature is awesome. Your notes educated me about bees, and the picture is a perfect match. I truly hope you win with this outstanding poem.
reply by the author on 22-May-2023
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Your poem gave me a good feeling as I read. It reminded us how Mother Nature is awesome. Your notes educated me about bees, and the picture is a perfect match. I truly hope you win with this outstanding poem.
Comment Written 22-May-2023
reply by the author on 22-May-2023
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Thank you so much for your very generous rating and comments! So greatly valued.
Comment from sherrygreywolf
Loved you entry for the 5-7-5 contest. I have recently started learning about bees and enjoyed the author notes, as well.
Your writing meets all the requirements of the contest and the artwork is a nice added touch. Great work.
reply by the author on 22-May-2023
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Loved you entry for the 5-7-5 contest. I have recently started learning about bees and enjoyed the author notes, as well.
Your writing meets all the requirements of the contest and the artwork is a nice added touch. Great work.
Comment Written 22-May-2023
reply by the author on 22-May-2023
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Thank you so much for this! Greatly valued.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This looks like a great 5-7-5. The syllable count is just right. I saw the f, b, and g alliteration. Great photo. This reminds me of a bee collection in an insurance office I saw a day or two ago. Nice write. Good luck in that contest!
reply by the author on 22-May-2023
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This looks like a great 5-7-5. The syllable count is just right. I saw the f, b, and g alliteration. Great photo. This reminds me of a bee collection in an insurance office I saw a day or two ago. Nice write. Good luck in that contest!
Comment Written 21-May-2023
reply by the author on 22-May-2023
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Thank you so much for this! All so greatly valued.
Comment from zanya
A short format poem that reminds us of the importance to our planet of the humble bumble bee, without whom our eco system would be in danger- an interesting portrayal 'first farmer.'
reply by the author on 21-May-2023
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A short format poem that reminds us of the importance to our planet of the humble bumble bee, without whom our eco system would be in danger- an interesting portrayal 'first farmer.'
Comment Written 21-May-2023
reply by the author on 21-May-2023
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Thank you so so much for this generous rating and feedback!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the 5-7-5 Poem writing prompt contest.
I like the presentation and word imagery. Concrete images of the bee easy to visualize.
Good syllables count and connection between lines.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 21-May-2023
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Excellent entry for the 5-7-5 Poem writing prompt contest.
I like the presentation and word imagery. Concrete images of the bee easy to visualize.
Good syllables count and connection between lines.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 21-May-2023
reply by the author on 21-May-2023
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Thank you so much!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image and presentation.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-Effective nature imagery and alliteration.
-I like the first line with the reference to the farmer.
-A very good concluding line, as well.
-A good entry; good luck!
reply by the author on 21-May-2023
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-Nice image and presentation.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-Effective nature imagery and alliteration.
-I like the first line with the reference to the farmer.
-A very good concluding line, as well.
-A good entry; good luck!
Comment Written 21-May-2023
reply by the author on 21-May-2023
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Thank you so much!
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Andrea Kepple
It's always a surprise how much can be communicated in only a few well chosen words. I found myself longing to be in a garden working along side these little farmers busy tending to their tasks.
reply by the author on 21-May-2023
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It's always a surprise how much can be communicated in only a few well chosen words. I found myself longing to be in a garden working along side these little farmers busy tending to their tasks.
Comment Written 21-May-2023
reply by the author on 21-May-2023
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Thank you so much!
Comment from Ginda Simpson
I love your words "nature's first farmer." It gives us a sense of how important bees are and a note of gratitude at the same time. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-May-2023
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I love your words "nature's first farmer." It gives us a sense of how important bees are and a note of gratitude at the same time. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-May-2023
reply by the author on 21-May-2023
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Thank you so much Ginda
