Comment from Brett Matthew West

Excellent

Good comparison of life and a slinky that goes "round and round".

However, not every bump in life becomes smooth.

Counted 20 syllables. Meets that requirement of the contest.

 Comment Written 11-May-2023

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reply by the author on 11-May-2023

You are right, not every bump gets smooth. Hopefully, we learn a healthy way to cope with them. Thank you for reading and reviewing.I appreciate the many stars. Have a blessed day.

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

I can relate to hitting those same bumps but sometimes they don't get smooth and I just get bruised. Lol.
Enjoyed your 20-syllable poem and the fun metaphor of the slinky!
Best wishes in the contest!

 Comment Written 10-May-2023

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reply by the author on 10-May-2023

Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the many stars. Have a blessed day.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

We are sometimes beaten by life and learn to navigate those bumps until we overcome adversity, a poignant write for the contest, I wish you luck, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 09-May-2023

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reply by the author on 10-May-2023

Thank you for reading and reviewing.. I appreciate the many stars. Have a blessed day.

Comment from Douglas Goff

Excellent

Interesting choice of subject matter. I made a slinky reference to my ten year old and he did not know what I was talking about. Our world is dissipating.

Great piece of work.
D

 Comment Written 09-May-2023

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reply by the author on 09-May-2023

Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the many stars. Have a blessed day.

Comment from shelley kaye

Excellent

lol "slinky slinky..."
good 20 syllable poem
though i have to question
the "round and round"
slinkies mostly go up and down -
but that could be just me lol

thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest
shelley :)

 Comment Written 09-May-2023

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reply by the author on 09-May-2023

Thank you for reading and reviewing. My thinking was a person going around the slinky from beginning to end. I appreciate the many stars. Have a blessed day.

Comment from RodG

Good

I can somewhat understand your comparing life to a slinky. Indeed we often feel ourselves going bumpedty-bump down a flight of stairs. Life ain't easy. But can a slinky have any real impact on a surface it touches? What else could you say about the way a slinky travels or the result of its journey?

 Comment Written 09-May-2023

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reply by the author on 09-May-2023

My picture was meeting the same life lessons over and over until you learn the lesson. Thank you for reading and reviewing. Have a blessed day.

Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

Very cleverly done and resonant to the reader, these sentiments are skilfully contained in this very limited verse form and are perfect for children as well as adults. A memorable piece of advice we should all appreciate. Good luck! Debbie

 Comment Written 09-May-2023

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reply by the author on 09-May-2023

Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the many stars. Have a blessed day.

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading. Your wisdom is shining through here. Yes, life seems to go round and round as we grind out the bumps. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 09-May-2023

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reply by the author on 09-May-2023

Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the many stars. Have na blessed day.