Timeless visits
Here, they do not live17 total reviews
Comment from Paul McFarland
That is a really good Haiku. The last line is the key to the whole poem. I think you will do well in the contest. The picture really enhances the poem.
reply by the author on 08-May-2023
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That is a really good Haiku. The last line is the key to the whole poem. I think you will do well in the contest. The picture really enhances the poem.
Comment Written 08-May-2023
reply by the author on 08-May-2023
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Thank you so much!
Comment from Wendy G
Very beautiful and poignant reminder of those who have given their lives, or lost their lives. A thought-provoking photo, and the play on lost and found is very well done. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 08-May-2023
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Very beautiful and poignant reminder of those who have given their lives, or lost their lives. A thought-provoking photo, and the play on lost and found is very well done. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 07-May-2023
reply by the author on 08-May-2023
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Thank you so much!
Comment from LisaMay
The ending, ''where my lost are found'', is a very emotional line for impact. The scene and mood are set earlier with the use of ''whispers'' and ''sun sets''. Separation through death is so sad for those left to grieve.
reply by the author on 09-May-2023
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The ending, ''where my lost are found'', is a very emotional line for impact. The scene and mood are set earlier with the use of ''whispers'' and ''sun sets''. Separation through death is so sad for those left to grieve.
Comment Written 07-May-2023
reply by the author on 09-May-2023
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Thank you so much!
Comment from shelley kaye
this was a good 575 poem
a slight suggestion would be... changing the "while" and "my"... and putting a slight pause at the end of the first line...
A cool breeze whispers ~
sun sets on neighboring stones~
where the lost are found
just a couple thoughts i had as i read...
thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest
shelley :)
reply by the author on 09-May-2023
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this was a good 575 poem
a slight suggestion would be... changing the "while" and "my"... and putting a slight pause at the end of the first line...
A cool breeze whispers ~
sun sets on neighboring stones~
where the lost are found
just a couple thoughts i had as i read...
thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest
shelley :)
Comment Written 07-May-2023
reply by the author on 09-May-2023
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Thank you, Shelley!
Comment from royowen
Yes, a cemetery where those dear ones that have been lost in noble pursuits are buried, it's a place of sadness, but also joy, at what they have left behind in this world, beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 09-May-2023
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Yes, a cemetery where those dear ones that have been lost in noble pursuits are buried, it's a place of sadness, but also joy, at what they have left behind in this world, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 07-May-2023
reply by the author on 09-May-2023
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Thank you, Roy!
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A pleasure
Comment from rspoet
This is an excellent 5-7-5 poem for the contest
with a quiet theme of loss as the sun sets and the breeze blows.
Nice use of alliteration.
Best wishes to you.
Robert
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reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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This is an excellent 5-7-5 poem for the contest
with a quiet theme of loss as the sun sets and the breeze blows.
Nice use of alliteration.
Best wishes to you.
Robert
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Comment Written 07-May-2023
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Thank you so much, Robert. I appreciate your review.
Xo
Jessica
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Are these your lost Grandchildren that are eventually found? A fun post and I enjoyed the playful sentiments here for the contest, I wish you luck, love Dolly x
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reply by the author on 09-May-2023
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Are these your lost Grandchildren that are eventually found? A fun post and I enjoyed the playful sentiments here for the contest, I wish you luck, love Dolly x
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Comment Written 07-May-2023
reply by the author on 09-May-2023
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Thank you, Dolly!
