Timeless visits
Here, they do not live17 total reviews
Comment from mermaids
I can relate to your words. I too, visit many loved ones at their resting places. Love your last line "where my lost are found". It is a comforting line to know we can visit our loved ones and they are not lost.
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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I can relate to your words. I too, visit many loved ones at their resting places. Love your last line "where my lost are found". It is a comforting line to know we can visit our loved ones and they are not lost.
Comment Written 10-May-2023
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Thank you so much. I appreciate your review.
Xo
Jessica
Comment from Charles W. Johnson
Not only an excellent 5-7-5, this poem would fill the more stringent requirements of a traditional haiku. Your last line is poignant and makes this poem stand out.
Best,
Chuck
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Not only an excellent 5-7-5, this poem would fill the more stringent requirements of a traditional haiku. Your last line is poignant and makes this poem stand out.
Best,
Chuck
Comment Written 10-May-2023
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Thank you so much, Chuck. That means a lot.
Xo
Jessica
Comment from GWHARGIS
The harshness of losing so many you love was softened by your beautiful poem. The cool breeze to me represented the feeling of loneliness. Yet they are right where you knew they would be. Great poem. Bittersweet and poignant. Gretchen
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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The harshness of losing so many you love was softened by your beautiful poem. The cool breeze to me represented the feeling of loneliness. Yet they are right where you knew they would be. Great poem. Bittersweet and poignant. Gretchen
Comment Written 10-May-2023
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Thank you so much. I appreciate your words.
Xo
Jessica
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Thanks for sharing the image, notes, and poem, Jessica.
-I am sorry about the losses of your loved ones.
-You wrote a very good poem with effective nature imagery
and a peaceful tone as the "cool breeze whispers."
-A very good concluding line.
-A good entry; good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-May-2023
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-Thanks for sharing the image, notes, and poem, Jessica.
-I am sorry about the losses of your loved ones.
-You wrote a very good poem with effective nature imagery
and a peaceful tone as the "cool breeze whispers."
-A very good concluding line.
-A good entry; good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-May-2023
reply by the author on 10-May-2023
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Thank you so much, Pam!
Xoxo Jess
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You are welcome, Jess.
Comment from Cherish Adams
This is a seriously good 5 - 7 - 5 Jessica. I love the vivid imagery and implications you have shared in this poem. Great job. Cherish
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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This is a seriously good 5 - 7 - 5 Jessica. I love the vivid imagery and implications you have shared in this poem. Great job. Cherish
Comment Written 09-May-2023
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Thank you so much!! I appreciate the stars and review, Cherish.
Xo
Jessica
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job, Jessica, with your 575 though it
was poignant. Your few syllables spoke of many things
that occurred which impacted you forever (also the notes).
The picture was perfect. Your words could be interpreted
two ways in my opinion. Of course, it is the resting place of
your departed loved ones. Also, it could be a reminder from
the POV of God that his lost are found there (hopefully, not
lost forever as He found them).
Thanks for sharing, Jan
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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You did a great job, Jessica, with your 575 though it
was poignant. Your few syllables spoke of many things
that occurred which impacted you forever (also the notes).
The picture was perfect. Your words could be interpreted
two ways in my opinion. Of course, it is the resting place of
your departed loved ones. Also, it could be a reminder from
the POV of God that his lost are found there (hopefully, not
lost forever as He found them).
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Comment Written 09-May-2023
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Thank you so much, Jan. I love that. Xoxoxo
Jess
Comment from June Sargent
Such touching and poignant sentiments summed up in a few short lines. It is sad that so many of our friends and family have been laid to rest in such places. However, they will ever be alive in our hearts.
reply by the author on 09-May-2023
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Such touching and poignant sentiments summed up in a few short lines. It is sad that so many of our friends and family have been laid to rest in such places. However, they will ever be alive in our hearts.
Comment Written 09-May-2023
reply by the author on 09-May-2023
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Thank you so much!
Xo
Jessica
Comment from Ginda Simpson
I love the last line of this poem. It brings an element of intimacy and warmth to what would otherwise be the atmosphere of a cold cemetery. This is really nice.
reply by the author on 09-May-2023
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I love the last line of this poem. It brings an element of intimacy and warmth to what would otherwise be the atmosphere of a cold cemetery. This is really nice.
Comment Written 09-May-2023
reply by the author on 09-May-2023
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Thank you so much, Ginda!
Comment from Mia Twysted
This piece left me with a sadness in my heart. It makes me long for those that are no longer with us, and wish I could hug them one more time.
reply by the author on 08-May-2023
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This piece left me with a sadness in my heart. It makes me long for those that are no longer with us, and wish I could hug them one more time.
Comment Written 08-May-2023
reply by the author on 08-May-2023
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Thank you so much!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent 5/7/5 for the contest. The theme is sad but true. Your poem has a zen feel to it very appropriate for haiku.
I like the presentation too. Concrete images easy to visualize.
Good syllables count and connection between lines.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Excellent 5/7/5 for the contest. The theme is sad but true. Your poem has a zen feel to it very appropriate for haiku.
I like the presentation too. Concrete images easy to visualize.
Good syllables count and connection between lines.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 08-May-2023
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Thank you so much, Gypsy. I appreciate that.
Xo
Jessica
