Challenge Me
Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "He's Here...."I dare you....
16 total reviews
Comment from wintersknights
you did an excellent job with this one. it has that strange glow about it and a bit of fun as well. your rhythm is smooth and the images you invoke are priceless.
good work.
wk
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you did an excellent job with this one. it has that strange glow about it and a bit of fun as well. your rhythm is smooth and the images you invoke are priceless.
good work.
wk
Comment Written 10-Jul-2006
Comment from Lisloh
My goodness you're good at this Shelley.....
You make a challenge appear so easy and your creativity is amazing.
Good call ending with a prayer....:)
Thank you for creating this and sharing.
Take care & be safe
Lisloh
Excellent presentation!
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My goodness you're good at this Shelley.....
You make a challenge appear so easy and your creativity is amazing.
Good call ending with a prayer....:)
Thank you for creating this and sharing.
Take care & be safe
Lisloh
Excellent presentation!
Comment Written 07-Jul-2006
Comment from Jewell McChesney
This is not poetry in my book. But of course it is not MY book. "LOL"
Poetry stirs the emotions, awakens the senses and touches the soul.
It is a short flash fiction story in a colorful rendition of fancy digital work.
When you say that you first "see" the poem before you read it, that says alot about you as a writer.
Imagery is creating a picture without PICTURES.
You create it with the content of your poem, not the colors you choose for your font.
That's my story and I'm stickin' to it.
I'm sorry, I just don't relate to your style at all.
Good luck~
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This is not poetry in my book. But of course it is not MY book. "LOL"
Poetry stirs the emotions, awakens the senses and touches the soul.
It is a short flash fiction story in a colorful rendition of fancy digital work.
When you say that you first "see" the poem before you read it, that says alot about you as a writer.
Imagery is creating a picture without PICTURES.
You create it with the content of your poem, not the colors you choose for your font.
That's my story and I'm stickin' to it.
I'm sorry, I just don't relate to your style at all.
Good luck~
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2006
Comment from starkat
Wonderful imagery as you rise up to the challenge and delve into the dark rotting shadows to encounter the grim reaper. I almost feel it's halloween instead of summer. 'Clad in a black robe with black roses falling all around' is an especially clear dark image. I'll bet you're really good at ghosty stories. Excellent job. Enjoyed the read. Cheers. ;-)
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Wonderful imagery as you rise up to the challenge and delve into the dark rotting shadows to encounter the grim reaper. I almost feel it's halloween instead of summer. 'Clad in a black robe with black roses falling all around' is an especially clear dark image. I'll bet you're really good at ghosty stories. Excellent job. Enjoyed the read. Cheers. ;-)
Comment Written 06-Jul-2006
Comment from Hetty
Hi Shelley,
How wonderful that the grim reaper does not seem to scare you. You have obviously found your spirituality! Excellent rhythm and flow and yes, those nouns have come into play perfectly.
"clad in a black robe
with black roses falling all around " - is just wonderful.
Hetty
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Hi Shelley,
How wonderful that the grim reaper does not seem to scare you. You have obviously found your spirituality! Excellent rhythm and flow and yes, those nouns have come into play perfectly.
"clad in a black robe
with black roses falling all around " - is just wonderful.
Hetty
Comment Written 06-Jul-2006
Comment from Sheri58
You met the challenge!! Wonderful. A little morbid for summer, but death is around us no matter what the season. I actually liked the poem. You did it with a lot of class!
Adjustments/Weaknesses - none that I could see.
Sheri
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You met the challenge!! Wonderful. A little morbid for summer, but death is around us no matter what the season. I actually liked the poem. You did it with a lot of class!
Adjustments/Weaknesses - none that I could see.
Sheri
Comment Written 06-Jul-2006
Comment from VICTIMEYES
excellent writting this is told superbly and interestingly and i just loved it, but didn't like this
of cold sad tears
and happy joyous tears
the sad tears and then the joyous tears maybe you could use fear in the place of one of those it would read more better i think, yup, still good though.
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excellent writting this is told superbly and interestingly and i just loved it, but didn't like this
of cold sad tears
and happy joyous tears
the sad tears and then the joyous tears maybe you could use fear in the place of one of those it would read more better i think, yup, still good though.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2006
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
You have done really very good I enjoyed this poem it is well written and reads very smoothly from line to line and very well presented regards Fuller
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You have done really very good I enjoyed this poem it is well written and reads very smoothly from line to line and very well presented regards Fuller
Comment Written 06-Jul-2006
Comment from CarolinasAngel
ANother great poem, Shelley. A little darker than I'm used to from you, but a nice change. The flow and all is great. I don't see anything to change!
Candy
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ANother great poem, Shelley. A little darker than I'm used to from you, but a nice change. The flow and all is great. I don't see anything to change!
Candy
Comment Written 06-Jul-2006
Comment from KING SLATON
I was still enjoying the walk around the little cottage and now you've got the Reaper chasing me through the woods. Talk about fickle...lol. Nice write.
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I was still enjoying the walk around the little cottage and now you've got the Reaper chasing me through the woods. Talk about fickle...lol. Nice write.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2006
