Seasons of Change
Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "Seasons of the Mind - II"A collection of 30 poems in thirty days
26 total reviews
Comment from karenina
I have come to smile as I log in to FanStory, knowing I am still on the journey of your napowrimo posts and having pondered each of those that have come before. We are not so dissimilar in age. Therefor I feel these words wrap around me like a favorite old sweater. I look in the mirror and am astounded to NOT see the young heart and spirit I somehow forget has also been worn and rounded and formed, reshaped by the years...
But "old" is not a number... It is, at its best, a new place where we find ourselves and seem suddenly to learn to relish every moment that passes...
There have been bitter storms, and trials of will and sorrow... Oh, but hasn't there been so very much to rejoice about?
Living in the moment is suddenly imperative!
(And--God knows--it's what each of us ought to do!)
Such a great poem!
Karenina
reply by the author on 02-May-2023
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I have come to smile as I log in to FanStory, knowing I am still on the journey of your napowrimo posts and having pondered each of those that have come before. We are not so dissimilar in age. Therefor I feel these words wrap around me like a favorite old sweater. I look in the mirror and am astounded to NOT see the young heart and spirit I somehow forget has also been worn and rounded and formed, reshaped by the years...
But "old" is not a number... It is, at its best, a new place where we find ourselves and seem suddenly to learn to relish every moment that passes...
There have been bitter storms, and trials of will and sorrow... Oh, but hasn't there been so very much to rejoice about?
Living in the moment is suddenly imperative!
(And--God knows--it's what each of us ought to do!)
Such a great poem!
Karenina
Comment Written 02-May-2023
reply by the author on 02-May-2023
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Karenina, We learn to cope, that was what we were taught when young. Been seen, not heard; don't get to big for your bretches;
an ounce of prevention; You're not made of sugar, you won't melt;
Don't stir up the mud...so it is amazing we have gotten this far.
Comment from jenintorre
I really enjoyed reading this lovely free verse poem and can so relate to it.
I especially liked 'the blame game' it really sums things up. Best wishes. Jen.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023
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I really enjoyed reading this lovely free verse poem and can so relate to it.
I especially liked 'the blame game' it really sums things up. Best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023
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Thank you Jen!
Comment from jake cosmos aller
powerful and moving poem about growing old.
love the last stanza
So, before my final spring
gives over to winter crippled with strife,
I want to harvest the fruits of this life!
Ever mindful that my inner peace,
inner strength, my inner voice,
remembers to say, "Thank you, Abba/Father,"
for the wisdom that comes to this simple old man.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023
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powerful and moving poem about growing old.
love the last stanza
So, before my final spring
gives over to winter crippled with strife,
I want to harvest the fruits of this life!
Ever mindful that my inner peace,
inner strength, my inner voice,
remembers to say, "Thank you, Abba/Father,"
for the wisdom that comes to this simple old man.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much Jake,
Comment from Gloria ....
Very well done here, J. It was a pleasure reading about all the blessings to be counted in the simple joys found in a life well-lived.
Another fine chapter in your book and many thanks for sharing.
Gloria
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023
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Very well done here, J. It was a pleasure reading about all the blessings to be counted in the simple joys found in a life well-lived.
Another fine chapter in your book and many thanks for sharing.
Gloria
Comment Written 22-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Gloria!
Comment from Wendy G
A wonderful, reflective, and beautiful poem meditating on a life well lived and lessons learned, changing priorities, and so on. The only suggestion is to not repeat "depend" in the second line of the following. Perhaps substitute "are".
"Remaining mindful of how dependent
humans, animals, and plants depend on each other."
I very much enjoyed this though-provoking poem, especially resonating with the fourth stanza.
Wendy
Wendy
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023
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A wonderful, reflective, and beautiful poem meditating on a life well lived and lessons learned, changing priorities, and so on. The only suggestion is to not repeat "depend" in the second line of the following. Perhaps substitute "are".
"Remaining mindful of how dependent
humans, animals, and plants depend on each other."
I very much enjoyed this though-provoking poem, especially resonating with the fourth stanza.
Wendy
Wendy
Comment Written 21-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023
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Wendy, thank you and very good catch with that redundancy I over looked. 🙏🙏
Comment from Evelyn Hopkins
I love your writing!! and the story it creates It's very pretty and draws attention in to the audience. Good luck and I hope you have a good day!! :))
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I love your writing!! and the story it creates It's very pretty and draws attention in to the audience. Good luck and I hope you have a good day!! :))
Comment Written 21-Apr-2023
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi JLR,
I had nothing but a joy and certain comfort reading this wonderfully crafted free verse poem.
It may have been the affiliation I felt... like sitting beside a new found friend, sharing experiences and showing me the way ahead?
Such knowledge can only be gained though by the wisdom and acceptance of father time... and of course the attitude in which one chooses to progress forward in the knowing and wanting of a peaceful-satisfying mindset.
I'm really glad I came upon this beautifully crafted poem... it was and is, a joy to read. Thank you!
With our thoughts we create...
a choice of direction.
Kind regards,
James.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023
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Hi JLR,
I had nothing but a joy and certain comfort reading this wonderfully crafted free verse poem.
It may have been the affiliation I felt... like sitting beside a new found friend, sharing experiences and showing me the way ahead?
Such knowledge can only be gained though by the wisdom and acceptance of father time... and of course the attitude in which one chooses to progress forward in the knowing and wanting of a peaceful-satisfying mindset.
I'm really glad I came upon this beautifully crafted poem... it was and is, a joy to read. Thank you!
With our thoughts we create...
a choice of direction.
Kind regards,
James.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023
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James, your kind words of validation are so personally rewarding! Thank you for sharing your words. This gives me confidence to continue to learn to write.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent poem about the seasons of his life and everything he has learned. Now he is a wise old man reflecting on his life.
The free verse forced flows well.
the structure makes sense, it draws on emotions and it presents strong images.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023
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Excellent poem about the seasons of his life and everything he has learned. Now he is a wise old man reflecting on his life.
The free verse forced flows well.
the structure makes sense, it draws on emotions and it presents strong images.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 21-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023
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My sincere thank you.......🙏
Comment from nomi338
One of the blessing that we old men can enjoy, is the blessings of learning. Learning from our own mistakes and those of others. Learning the importance of forgiveness, and the letting go of minor irritations. Learning how to smile instead of frowning. Learning how smiling can irritate the devil out of the demons that try to bedevil us. Yes, the accumulation of years can teach us much if we are willing to learn.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023
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One of the blessing that we old men can enjoy, is the blessings of learning. Learning from our own mistakes and those of others. Learning the importance of forgiveness, and the letting go of minor irritations. Learning how to smile instead of frowning. Learning how smiling can irritate the devil out of the demons that try to bedevil us. Yes, the accumulation of years can teach us much if we are willing to learn.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023
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Thank you, sir!
Comment from zanya
A reflection in fine verse on life's journey and its many changing seasons and the wisdom and learning that it brings to us along the way -together with a great pic to illustrate
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023
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A reflection in fine verse on life's journey and its many changing seasons and the wisdom and learning that it brings to us along the way -together with a great pic to illustrate
Comment Written 21-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023
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Thanks!
