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The Broken Pact

Rhyming Poem contest

41 total reviews 
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
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Well crafted and engaging language which suits the style I associate with the Viking era but probably many other wars too.
The image is stark and menacing just as war is perceived and enacted.
Each stanza flows perfectly and connects with the one before and after as a story unfolds.
Excellent job.
****** virtual six.
Blessings
Shirley

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 30-Apr-2023
    Thank you so much for the fantastic review and the big six offer, Shirley. The picture actually inspired the piece this time. I don't remember what I was looking for but when I came across this picture I just had to write something to go with it. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars and kind comments. I'm glad you liked the piece. Thank you again.

    =]

    Ron
Comment from AudreyRose
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Totally deserved first place.... just saying! You did an amazing job with the imagery, I feel like you should totally continue this all the way through. An epic poem!

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 25-Apr-2023
    Thank you for the great review, Audrey. If interested I actually have a second part to this. It's a story rather than a poem. It's titled The Escape. I had it entered into another contest over the weekend. It's in my portfolio if you'd like to check it out. Fair warning though, it's a bit more graphic and violent than this one and it's from his wife's point of view. I really appreciate the generous stars and kind comments. I'm glad you liked the piece. Thank you again, Audrey.

    =]

    Ron
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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I hope there is a part two? This was really good. The rhyme, and the story were great. The people back in those times thought nothing of killing children, and taking women. Not a nice time. Well done, I very much enjoyed. :) Sandra

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023
    Thank you so much for the kind review, Sandra. Yes, I'm sure they were pretty nasty happenings going on back then. I'm glad you liked my little tale. Have yourself a wonderful weekend and thank you again.

    =]

    Ron
Comment from Terry Broxson
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Ron, this is a very good poem for this contest. The rhymes and flow make the poem easy to read and fun to read. As I read it out loud, I can feel the rage of the warrior building, and the image in my mind does match the picture. Excellent work. Terry.

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023
    Thank you for the fantastic review, my friend. It's not very often it goes the other way around and a picture inspires the words. I love great artwork and when I came across this one, I had to use it. I really appreciate it, Terry. I'm glad you liked my little tale.

    Ron
Comment from mrsmajor
Exceptional
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This was absolutely beautifully written, Ron, I read it straight through to the end...It was a story well put together, and of course the picture fit perfectly..I sincerely enjoyed reading this..It's truly a winner...Thanks so much for sharing with us...You did good, good, and good, Hugs

Warmly
Victoria

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023
    Hey, Victoria, hello. Thank you so much for the kind review and big sixer. This time the picture actually inspired the piece. I found it in a Google search and just had to come up with something for it. I'm sorry you didn't get to catch it while it was promoted. I dearly appreciate the generous stars, Victoria. I'm glad you liked my little tale. Thank you again.

    =]

    Ron
reply by mrsmajor on 14-Apr-2023
    You're very welcome, Ron, I really enjoyed reading the poem....You did a great job on describing the picture...All the best...Hugs!

    Victoria
Comment from K.I. Betancur
Exceptional
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Glad I'm not the only one who finds inspiration from artwork, and not the other way around!

My jaw is on the floor, incredible work! I almost want to see a "part II," haha.

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023
    A couple people have suggested I come up with something to go along with it. I didn't really have anything in mind when I wrote this but I'll surely give it some thought. Thank you for the great review and big sixer, KIB. I'm glad you liked my little tale of doom. Lol. I really appreciate it, friend.

    Ron.
reply by K.I. Betancur on 14-Apr-2023
    Thanks for writing! I'll be looking out for it!
Comment from sunnilicious
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You work on trust with payment due. You're too kind. You better work changing that. Treaty and War isn't something I understand, but you explained yourself well. Nicely done. Good work :)

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 11-Apr-2023
    Thank you for the great review, Sunni. Yeah, you have to trust some folks sometimes. Lol. I really appreciate the generous stars, S. I'm glad you liked my little tale.

    =]

    Ron
Comment from w.j.debi
Exceptional
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I read this over the weekend but wanted to wait until I had a six to give it. Your storytelling abilities astound me. You create a vivid world with conflict and emotion. The brave warrior is off to seek vengeance and save the woman he loves. I am rooting for him to be successful.

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 10-Apr-2023
    Hey, Debi, hello. Thank you so much for holding out until you had a sixer. You didn't need to do that. I'm deeply humbled. I just love creating stories in rhyme. Plus, I try to stuff as much story into the piece with the fewest words possible. That takes a lot of work but it's worth it in the end. I may have to see where my guy goes from here. Lol. Thank you so much for the kind review and giant sixer, Debi. I'm glad you liked my little tale. Have yourself a wonderful night and thank you again.

    =]

    Ron
Comment from Chrissy710
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Hi Ron Oh yes very smooth and a great story told in a great easily read meter and rhyme . You sure have a way with words and presentation of your work Good luck should do very well

Cheers Chris

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 Comment Written 10-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 10-Apr-2023
    Thank you, Chris. I always love writing about medieval stuff. I appreciate the kind review and good luck wishes. I'm glad you liked the piece.

    =]

    Ron
Comment from ~Dovey
Exceptional
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Hi Ron!

I do love ekphrastic poetry. Your imagination ran wild in a most enthusiastic and eloquent manner. I applaud the tale you've woven so poetically, with perfect rhyme and meter.

Best of luck in the contest!

Kim

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 10-Apr-2023
    Thank you so much for the kind review and big sixer, Kim. When I came across this picture I just had to write something for it. I dearly appreciate the stop in and the good luck wishes, K. I'm glad you liked the piece. Have yourself a fantastic day and thank you again.

    =]

    Ron