Seasons of Change
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Seasons of Nature - VI"A collection of 30 poems in thirty days
15 total reviews
Comment from karenina
First, a tip of the hat to you for your wonderful monorhyme stanzas. (I've always found these difficult to write!)
There is a lightness of your "step" here...a twinkling ripple of a springlike pond that promises there will be blossoms and resurrections anew...
You've masterfully chosen a theme that is universal... Very well done.
Karenina
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2023
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First, a tip of the hat to you for your wonderful monorhyme stanzas. (I've always found these difficult to write!)
There is a lightness of your "step" here...a twinkling ripple of a springlike pond that promises there will be blossoms and resurrections anew...
You've masterfully chosen a theme that is universal... Very well done.
Karenina
Comment Written 30-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2023
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Thank you!
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Your writing was the best possible cure for a cold and stormy day! :)
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very interesting write for your sixth poem in the month of April. Your rhyming is good. The seasons are very well done and I enjoyed listening to it. Patricia.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2023
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This is a very interesting write for your sixth poem in the month of April. Your rhyming is good. The seasons are very well done and I enjoyed listening to it. Patricia.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2023
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Thank you for staying the course on the chapters on seasons Patricia, I appreciate your comments.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your nature poem read well, JLR. I enjoyed reading it.
I liked the monorhyme within each verse. Those verses
were descriptive about the surrounding nature things.
I could imagine them as I read. I liked the second verse
the best. Was there a reason to separate the 4th line from
the other3 in the second verse?
Thanks for sharing, Jan
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2023
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Your nature poem read well, JLR. I enjoyed reading it.
I liked the monorhyme within each verse. Those verses
were descriptive about the surrounding nature things.
I could imagine them as I read. I liked the second verse
the best. Was there a reason to separate the 4th line from
the other3 in the second verse?
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Comment Written 06-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2023
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Jan, thank you for your supportive comments. I am especially grateful to you pointing out the line unintended line break.
Comment from Gloria ....
This is another good one, J. I think the use of mono-rhyme within each stanza is effective in joining a thought and image.
And as alas you make your retreat.
Very good and a pleasure to read and review. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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This is another good one, J. I think the use of mono-rhyme within each stanza is effective in joining a thought and image.
And as alas you make your retreat.
Very good and a pleasure to read and review. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 06-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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I value your continued support.
Comment from Chrissy710
Hi JlR. Another nice seasonal poem re Spring. meter and rhyme spot on
Its nice when the fog lifts and a clear day emerges with the birds singing
Cheers Chris
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Hi JlR. Another nice seasonal poem re Spring. meter and rhyme spot on
Its nice when the fog lifts and a clear day emerges with the birds singing
Cheers Chris
Comment Written 06-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Thanks for the continued support Chris!🙏
Comment from Wendy G
That's a nice suite of mono-rhymed quatrins. Reality sets in with the fourth stanza, after the peace and serenity of the first ones. Wanting to linger in nature with its emerging freshness and beauty is understandable - nice appeal to sense of sound as well as sight.
Well done.
Wendy
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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That's a nice suite of mono-rhymed quatrins. Reality sets in with the fourth stanza, after the peace and serenity of the first ones. Wanting to linger in nature with its emerging freshness and beauty is understandable - nice appeal to sense of sound as well as sight.
Well done.
Wendy
Comment Written 06-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Thanks very much, Wendy. Starting my next series, Love and marriage.
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
I think this is my favorite so far of the nature poems! So many images and sounds to bring forth spring! The third stanza, in particular, is exceptional! "Life leans into the sun in style!" --marvelous!
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023
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I think this is my favorite so far of the nature poems! So many images and sounds to bring forth spring! The third stanza, in particular, is exceptional! "Life leans into the sun in style!" --marvelous!
Comment Written 05-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023
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Verna, thank you so much! Tomorrow I will begin the series of poems about love and marriage. I am glad you enjoyed my nature poems.
Comment from royowen
This is a great effort Jim, the fact that you've committed to this gargantuan task of writing a poem a day for this month is not only a great endeavour, but a worthy embarkation. Well done, blessings Roy
Suggestion: it sounds like a great epistle.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023
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This is a great effort Jim, the fact that you've committed to this gargantuan task of writing a poem a day for this month is not only a great endeavour, but a worthy embarkation. Well done, blessings Roy
Suggestion: it sounds like a great epistle.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023
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Roy, my good friend, I like that so much!
This makes this better. Thank you!
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Bless you
Comment from Jasmine Girl
What a beautiful poem about the precious spring that is still not here yet. But it will come next week. I like how you combine the beautiful of the spring with happy life. It's a season of hope.
Well done.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023
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What a beautiful poem about the precious spring that is still not here yet. But it will come next week. I like how you combine the beautiful of the spring with happy life. It's a season of hope.
Well done.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023
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Thank you very much!
Comment from lyenochka
Loved your mono-rhymed quatrains! They are full of alliteration and consonance, and internal rhymes. My favorite stanza was:
"Meadowlarks warble and whistle
flying around the prickly thistle,
and sound like a penny whistle,
as the frogs croak their dismissal."
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023
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Loved your mono-rhymed quatrains! They are full of alliteration and consonance, and internal rhymes. My favorite stanza was:
"Meadowlarks warble and whistle
flying around the prickly thistle,
and sound like a penny whistle,
as the frogs croak their dismissal."
Comment Written 05-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023
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Your support means very much too me. Thank you.
