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Love and Loss

Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "This Love"
NaPoWriMo April Poetry Contest

13 total reviews 
Comment from Sally Law
Exceptional
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This is a beautiful love letter to your husband, Dan. Everything that is sweet and good about life and love is treasured here. How blessed Is your family because of your loving union.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs

 Comment Written 09-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 09-Apr-2023
    Thank you so much, Sally! As always, your words mean so much to me!
    Thank you.
    <3
    Jessica
reply by Sally Law on 09-Apr-2023
    Most welcome! Happy Easter!
Comment from Regina Elliott
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A very endearing and lovely
poem on your love for your
beloved husband. A strong
marriage filled with cherish
for each other is a gift from
God. May you have a creative
and inspiring weekend.

 Comment Written 07-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 07-Apr-2023
    Thank you so much, Regina.
    <3
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
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Congratulations! On your love and on being a new Mother and new Father. I'm glad I found your poem to review because it flowed well, it was pretty, I love the repeated lines. You created a meaningful work that's happy, uplifting, and one that people can relate to, it aspire to. I know how you feel because I'm blessed with Love too. God Bless! :))

 Comment Written 07-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 07-Apr-2023
    Thank you so much, Alexandra. That truly means the world to me!
    <3
    Jessica
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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Your words were awesome, Jessica. I loved the way
you formatted your beautiful poem for your husband.
Each verse adds one more piece to the whole. When it
was finished, readers had a great sense of you and your
husband's beautiful marriage. The picture paired perfectly
with your words. Those words were straight from your heart.
Thanks for sharing, Jan

 Comment Written 06-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
    Thank you so much, Jan!!
    <3
    Jessica
Comment from Chrissy710
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Hi Jessica
How very nicely written and it is obvious that you are happy and content in a loving marriage
Great rhyme all appropriate and meter reads well also
I liked this very much
Cheers Chris

 Comment Written 06-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
    Thank you so much, Chris!
    <3
    Jessica
Comment from shelley kaye
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such a romantic poem
nice verbiage

one suggestion, if i may, maybe separate it into stanzas instead of just one long one?



This love
My love
Relentlessly rises

Strip down
Take me
Rid me of disguises

Break through
Pull close
And I'll let you achieve

With you
I'm home
Resting in your reprieve

This love
Your love
Faithful and consistent

For me
For us
Steady and persistent

No end
Show up
Effortless is your stride

Your fight
It's you
So worthy of this pride

This love
Our love
It protects and sustains

Your ground
My muse
Test of time it maintains

Our fate
Us two
Now father and mother

You're mine
I'm yours
This love for each other


just a thought for you to kick around ;)

beautiful loving poem
thank you for sharing it


shelley ð?¦?


 Comment Written 05-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023
    Thank you so much, Shelley- excellent suggestion. I appreciate your review and helpful feedback!!<3
Comment from Ginda Simpson
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What a beautiful love poem this is that you have written for your husband, displaying the aspects of what makes a love blessed. You clearly show us how and why it works and that is inspiring to those who read it.

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023
    Thank you so much, that means the world!
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
Exceptional
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Why should this week be any different than any other?? Only you got me a little earlier this time. It has been a busy week....
Hmmm, is there anymore wonderful people that live in your home that will steal my heart?? Lol!!! I am so in love with your husband! Way to just blurt it out Deb
You know I am not shy, and he is so, so, dare I say... HOT!
Maybe it is time to change my dance partner!! (wink wink) Now are you starting to worry about me being a bad example? Lol!!!!
This is awesome... you two make the most adorable couple and I am truly in love with all four of you! Awesome job on this Jess, and in all seriousness, I feel like I have seen him before. But it may be 'cause you carry this hunky husband wherever you go, as I see him in your heart, right there next to your lovely girls!!
It is a pleasure to meet you Dan. I am not really crazy, well kinda, as I am crazy for your wife, girls and now I say the whole family. This was awesome! Great job my sweet friend!

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023
    Hahaha you are so funny, I absolutely love the way you blurted that out! I wouldn't have it any other way! You have made my whole day with this review, and you've made Dan's week! Lol he is beyond flattered, you should've seen his face. He feels like he knows you already, trust me- he said he's ready for that dance when you are!! Haha
    Thank you so much for the stars, review and smile!
    <3<3
    Jess
Comment from Politically Poet
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The font was hard for me to read, The position and set up of the poem was well structured and how deep feelings are and how we act on them was how I interpreted this poem. Nice read

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 Comment Written 05-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023
    Thanks
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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Wow! Jessica this is an amazing write and I wish I had a six for you. It is unique, well rhymed and full of loving words for your beloved husband. The two of you look happy and your poem is sheer joy, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023
    Thank you so much, Dolly! That means a lot. <3