Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

Thank you for sharing this with us. I know how hard this time of year is for you.

Yes,I'm drowning in this Endless
"Sea of My Reality." (space needed after the comma)

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2023

Why? Thanks Barbara. I actually had to take one d from the word Madness and one d from the word sadness.
I've been writing way too fast.
My mind's on fire.
Doctor Ricky

Comment from Brandon Clark

Excellent

Very thought provoking and with a personal subject, takes guts to post.

I only found two minor typos:

I can no longer Sea?
[see]

March Maddness, continued Bloodied Saddness.
[Madness] [Sadness]

Hope that helps and this finds you doing well!
Brandon

 Comment Written 30-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2023

I use metaphors in my writing when I use the word sea for the word see it basically means that I am blind and thanks for the review.
Doctor Ricky

Comment from Mario PIERRE

Excellent

As always, dramatic and tragic words bled on virtual paper. But the pain is so palpable and real, like a red sea of desperation. I believe in the easing of pain by renouncing it, over and over, as you do, Ricky.
As a poem and artistic writing, this piece is magnificent.
Loved it.
One humble suggestion: the first stanza's powerful rhyme (yoke, soap, rope...) could it be continued in the 4th verse by:
No more shall I continue to mope
Mistreated as some uselesss Dope....
Just a humble suggestion.
Great post!!!
Mario

 Comment Written 30-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2023

Your suggestion on my rhyming theme is excellent. Moping is a very important word when it comes to grief.
Thanks Mario.
Today's the day of my son's accident 20 years ago.
Doctor Ricky

reply by Mario PIERRE on 31-Mar-2023

Grieve, my friend, grieve. We never forget those we love. Remember the words of our Lord: Blessed are those who mourn, for they shall be comforted.
Mario