The Aspen Grove Murders
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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2023
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Comment Written 13-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2023
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Thank you so much, my friend! Blessings,
Sal XOs
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Comment from Liz O'Neill
I like this line. It may stir up fears in the reader, or at least a curiosity for it: "fearing the imaginary dangers around him." The several mentions of coffee does not go unnoticed. When I get things swirling around in my head around midnight I had to quickly figure theings out in the moment so I could go back to sleep: "Staring at the clock, he saw it was only midnight, and moaned again." The ending is tempting.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023
I like this line. It may stir up fears in the reader, or at least a curiosity for it: "fearing the imaginary dangers around him." The several mentions of coffee does not go unnoticed. When I get things swirling around in my head around midnight I had to quickly figure theings out in the moment so I could go back to sleep: "Staring at the clock, he saw it was only midnight, and moaned again." The ending is tempting.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much for the lovely review of my book chapter. I?m so glad you?re enjoying it all. Sending love my very best to you and yours, Sally Thank you so much for the lovely review of my book chapter. I?m so glad you?re enjoying it all. Sending along my very best to you and yours, Sally XOs
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Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Sally,
Great chapter! I especially like the first part about FEE at the old cabin. He was only thinking of his safety, nothing else. He's going to have to get a plan in order very quickly. The cabin should be good enough for some heavy duty thinking. If he was smart, he'd just try to escape the area entirely. He's actually painted himself into a corner. I was once a hunter many years ago, and the family had a fairly rough log cabin near Cappel Lake. So, I can picture the scene very well.
There's just one line, really just one word that bothered me...
"The young mother, who'd been robbed of her teenage life, trod softly through the kitchen and prepared a large mug of coffee, remembering it was half cream and half coffee for Simon, and coffee and a dab of cream for herself." ... ("trod" doesn't sound right to me, although I know it is. I suggest,
Treading softly to the kitchen, the young mother, who'd been robbed of her teenage life, prepared large mugs of coffee, remembering it was triple cream for Simon, and just a dab of cream for herself.)
Nicely penned! Looking forward to the next chapter!
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2023
Hi Sally,
Great chapter! I especially like the first part about FEE at the old cabin. He was only thinking of his safety, nothing else. He's going to have to get a plan in order very quickly. The cabin should be good enough for some heavy duty thinking. If he was smart, he'd just try to escape the area entirely. He's actually painted himself into a corner. I was once a hunter many years ago, and the family had a fairly rough log cabin near Cappel Lake. So, I can picture the scene very well.
There's just one line, really just one word that bothered me...
"The young mother, who'd been robbed of her teenage life, trod softly through the kitchen and prepared a large mug of coffee, remembering it was half cream and half coffee for Simon, and coffee and a dab of cream for herself." ... ("trod" doesn't sound right to me, although I know it is. I suggest,
Treading softly to the kitchen, the young mother, who'd been robbed of her teenage life, prepared large mugs of coffee, remembering it was triple cream for Simon, and just a dab of cream for herself.)
Nicely penned! Looking forward to the next chapter!
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 09-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2023
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Dear Kim, Thank you for the lovely review and generous stars! Both mean the world to me. Sending you my best today and Easter Blessings! Sal XOs
Comment from Cindy Warren
They think Simon set the fire, like they were supposed to, but I'm sure Betty Jo and the others can tell them where he was. It couldn't have been him, because he was busy hiding in the bushes outside Betty Jo's place.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2023
They think Simon set the fire, like they were supposed to, but I'm sure Betty Jo and the others can tell them where he was. It couldn't have been him, because he was busy hiding in the bushes outside Betty Jo's place.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2023
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Thank you for the lovely review of my book chapter. It is most appreciated. Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs
Comment from poetwatch
Candace and Simon, getting together, Sally? :) You are not only a writer of detective stories, but a romantic ar heart. :) Now, the sheriff is at the door. What does he want? I don't know. Guess I'll wait on the next one. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
Candace and Simon, getting together, Sally? :) You are not only a writer of detective stories, but a romantic ar heart. :) Now, the sheriff is at the door. What does he want? I don't know. Guess I'll wait on the next one. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Yes, a romance writer too. I have a book of them. Thanks so much for stopping, Jose. Blessings,
Sal :))
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Plenty of romance to go with the drama keeps thsee characters interesting, Sally. A timely finish with the loud knock on the door and Sherrif Gonzales and his troops waiting, but for what?
This story is going well.
Cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
Plenty of romance to go with the drama keeps thsee characters interesting, Sally. A timely finish with the loud knock on the door and Sherrif Gonzales and his troops waiting, but for what?
This story is going well.
Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 06-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Thank you for the wonderful review of my book chapter and for catching up, dear Valda. Blessings to you always, Sally XOs
Comment from Carol Clark2
Another great chapter, well written. I like the new relationship blooming between Candace and Simon. And I'm glad there will soon be an end to Fee's evil. Good dialogue between Candace and Simon. Blessings. Carol
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
Another great chapter, well written. I like the new relationship blooming between Candace and Simon. And I'm glad there will soon be an end to Fee's evil. Good dialogue between Candace and Simon. Blessings. Carol
Comment Written 05-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Dear Carol, Thank you so much for the lovely review of my book chapter. It is so needed and appreciated. Blessings to you all, Sally xoxo?s
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Hugs and happy Easter!
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Simon sounds like he's changing his life from bad to worse. His father, Fee, is a troublemaker from way back. Being he has found new love? just probably that is changing Simon.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
Simon sounds like he's changing his life from bad to worse. His father, Fee, is a troublemaker from way back. Being he has found new love? just probably that is changing Simon.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much, Rosemary! Sal :)) xo
Comment from BethShelby
I'm enjoying your exciting story. You always manage to get the love element into your mystries and crime stories. Simon and Candice deserve something good in their lives for a change. I'm looking forward to more.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
I'm enjoying your exciting story. You always manage to get the love element into your mystries and crime stories. Simon and Candice deserve something good in their lives for a change. I'm looking forward to more.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Beth! Blessings! Sal XOs
Comment from Mary Shifman
Excellent chapter. I do like Simon. Somehow I always forget that these are chapters are cliffhangers and end just when I'm anxious to know what's going to happen next! Oh well, I have something to look forward too.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2023
Excellent chapter. I do like Simon. Somehow I always forget that these are chapters are cliffhangers and end just when I'm anxious to know what's going to happen next! Oh well, I have something to look forward too.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2023
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Thank you for the lovely review of my book chapter. It is most appreciated. The generous stars have truly blessed me.
Sending you my best today as always, dear Mary.
Sal XOs
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You are most welcome.