The Collection
a dribble contest entry18 total reviews
Comment from PoemsOfDD
Oh dear, caught out in the wilderness doing an act of nature - for dog and boy... or maybe the boy was still waiting his turn. A fun entry for the dribble flash fiction. It got a smile out of me :-)
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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Oh dear, caught out in the wilderness doing an act of nature - for dog and boy... or maybe the boy was still waiting his turn. A fun entry for the dribble flash fiction. It got a smile out of me :-)
Comment Written 01-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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So glad you found it funny. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review.
Comment from Soledadpaz
Funny how we equate things with our own experience. Obviously, someone had to collect this poor child's "product" as well, and he thinks the dog's will also be inspected.
Well done,
Sol
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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Funny how we equate things with our own experience. Obviously, someone had to collect this poor child's "product" as well, and he thinks the dog's will also be inspected.
Well done,
Sol
Comment Written 30-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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Thanks, Sol, for taking the time to read and review. I appreciate it.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Hah! I love it!
It's very hard to review flash fiction, but your piece deserves an effort.
Obviously, the boy has swallowed something requiring close examination of his 'stool' in the not too distant past.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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Hah! I love it!
It's very hard to review flash fiction, but your piece deserves an effort.
Obviously, the boy has swallowed something requiring close examination of his 'stool' in the not too distant past.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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Thanks, Wayne, so glad you found it funny.
Comment from w.j.debi
You take an everyday occurrence and make it into a humorous situation. Great job setting up the situation. The poor boy reveals so much about his recent life experience in one statement.
Perfect word count.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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You take an everyday occurrence and make it into a humorous situation. Great job setting up the situation. The poor boy reveals so much about his recent life experience in one statement.
Perfect word count.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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Glad you found it funny. Thanks so much for taking the time to read and review.
Comment from jmdg1954
I guess the little boy did his "business" in the park as well?
That's what I surmised after that question. Am I close because I was a little confused.
Best of luck in the contest.
John
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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I guess the little boy did his "business" in the park as well?
That's what I surmised after that question. Am I close because I was a little confused.
Best of luck in the contest.
John
Comment Written 29-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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The little boy had a recent incident where he swallowed something he shouldn't have. As it wasn't life-threatening, the doctor had the boy's mother 'collect' his waste to make sure the thing passed. The boy, unfamiliar with dog walking etiquette, saw the man collecting the dog's waste and asked his question.
Comment from royowen
An excellent entry in this dribble flash fiction. The things kids say is worth repeating for its sheer quirkiness my friend, this is a very creative and memorable post, good luck, Blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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An excellent entry in this dribble flash fiction. The things kids say is worth repeating for its sheer quirkiness my friend, this is a very creative and memorable post, good luck, Blessings, Roy
Comment Written 29-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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Thanks, Roy, so glad you liked it.
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Most welcome
Comment from LJbutterfly
This short dribble contest entry is creative and hilarious. It start out so innocently with a man walking his dog. I read wondering where this light hearted beginning could go, and then, POW! Your twist at the end was unexpected and made me laugh. Well done. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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This short dribble contest entry is creative and hilarious. It start out so innocently with a man walking his dog. I read wondering where this light hearted beginning could go, and then, POW! Your twist at the end was unexpected and made me laugh. Well done. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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Glad I could make you laugh! I appreciate you taking the time to read and review.
Comment from jessizero
This dribble flash fiction piece was so funny and charming, and yes, it was a little gross. I laughed. Thank you so much for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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This dribble flash fiction piece was so funny and charming, and yes, it was a little gross. I laughed. Thank you so much for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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Lol... I suppose it is a little gross. Glad you found it funny, Jessi.
Comment from BethShelby
This is funny. I guess the kid thought Richard was planning on digging through the poop. I remember when my son swallowed a straight pin and the doctor, said I need to dig though his bowel movements to make sure the pin didn't get stuck somewhere in his system. Not a pleasant task.
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This is funny. I guess the kid thought Richard was planning on digging through the poop. I remember when my son swallowed a straight pin and the doctor, said I need to dig though his bowel movements to make sure the pin didn't get stuck somewhere in his system. Not a pleasant task.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2023
Comment from BethShelby
This is funny. I guess the kid thought Richard was planning on digging through the poop. I remember when my son swallowed a straight pin and the doctor, said I need to dig though his bowel movements to make sure the pin didn't get stuck somewhere in his system. Not a pleasant task.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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This is funny. I guess the kid thought Richard was planning on digging through the poop. I remember when my son swallowed a straight pin and the doctor, said I need to dig though his bowel movements to make sure the pin didn't get stuck somewhere in his system. Not a pleasant task.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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Glad I never had to do that with any of my kids. Thanks, Beth, for taking the time to read and review.
