Electric Dreams
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Comment from kiwisteveh
Your posts are always interesting and this one is no exception. I'm reading your words and desperately trying to interpret the metaphor, but you are keeping any hidden message close to your chest, especially the identity of this talented electrician! he's not Glenn Campbell's Wichita Lineman is he?
In any case, great job at extending the wordplay throughout your poem and also for the amusing, bouncy rhythm which skips along to the end.
'Good fortune AND a pair of pliers!' now there's a wish to send somebody on their way!
Steve
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2023
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Your posts are always interesting and this one is no exception. I'm reading your words and desperately trying to interpret the metaphor, but you are keeping any hidden message close to your chest, especially the identity of this talented electrician! he's not Glenn Campbell's Wichita Lineman is he?
In any case, great job at extending the wordplay throughout your poem and also for the amusing, bouncy rhythm which skips along to the end.
'Good fortune AND a pair of pliers!' now there's a wish to send somebody on their way!
Steve
Comment Written 07-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2023
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Wow witchita lineman was a great idea.
Lol I love that song
Comment from Iza Deleanu
These lines made me laugh:"I know that he can fix the wires he's good at mathematics
I'd tell him that he's missed somehow but that is just semantics
And so I wish him great good fortune and a pair of pliers
I hope he finds his dreams up there along electric wires
". Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2023
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These lines made me laugh:"I know that he can fix the wires he's good at mathematics
I'd tell him that he's missed somehow but that is just semantics
And so I wish him great good fortune and a pair of pliers
I hope he finds his dreams up there along electric wires
". Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2023
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Thank you so much for stopping by to read my poem
Stay safe and cool
Judith
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Comment from BeyondtheShadows
Such an unique use of words to create an electrifying poem! Beautifully structured and I also wonder if there is more meaning. I read it twice and felt that this could also apply to someone who has mental illness. The idea of the "electricity" being cut off in the brain. Perhaps I read too much into things but either way wonderful job!
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2023
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Such an unique use of words to create an electrifying poem! Beautifully structured and I also wonder if there is more meaning. I read it twice and felt that this could also apply to someone who has mental illness. The idea of the "electricity" being cut off in the brain. Perhaps I read too much into things but either way wonderful job!
Comment Written 27-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2023
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Wow. That is a great interpretation and i see where you were coming from. It is though written for a friend who is leaving his current job to for a new position as am electrician.
I cant wait to give him this poem on april 10th, his last day.
Thanks for reading
Judith
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
A fun and amusing poem skilfully expressed in original rhyming words and an enjoyable rhythm. Interesting content/imagery. Thanks for sharing. Best wishes Debbie
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2023
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A fun and amusing poem skilfully expressed in original rhyming words and an enjoyable rhythm. Interesting content/imagery. Thanks for sharing. Best wishes Debbie
Comment Written 27-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2023
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A young guy who i became friends w is leaving his job at the grocery store to work as an electrician. I am going to give him this poem on his last day.
Thanks for reading
Judith
