Certificate to Dance
A short story26 total reviews
Comment from country ranch writer
De he should have listened to momma about that shirt! May maybe it
into more than dance lessons in due time with the pretty lady that once knew his wife and make his momma happy. Gotta Italian mommas !
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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De he should have listened to momma about that shirt! May maybe it
into more than dance lessons in due time with the pretty lady that once knew his wife and make his momma happy. Gotta Italian mommas !
Comment Written 21-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Nothing like an Italian mama! I had one.
Thanks for reading.
John
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Hugs and smiles
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A sweet natured, warm write and we must always dress for the occasion, right? He he he, this is a heartfelt write and we never know who we will meet when we spread our wings and go out into the world and grab life, a fine write John, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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A sweet natured, warm write and we must always dress for the occasion, right? He he he, this is a heartfelt write and we never know who we will meet when we spread our wings and go out into the world and grab life, a fine write John, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 21-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Thank you, Dolly.
I appreciate you reading and commenting with me.
John
Comment from BethShelby
This is a neat story. I love it. It sounds like he just met the perfect Italian girl, but his mother was right about the shirt. She doesn't like it.
one spag that certificate your wrinkling (you're wrinkling)
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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This is a neat story. I love it. It sounds like he just met the perfect Italian girl, but his mother was right about the shirt. She doesn't like it.
one spag that certificate your wrinkling (you're wrinkling)
Comment Written 21-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Thank you for the correction and for reading my post.
John
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Nice work, and the ending was spot on. Momma knew best all along.
How do you feel about the Bronx Bombers chances this year. I follow the Phillies and they seem to be as a year ago. Lots of HRs and more K's.
It will come down to manage the staff and the pen.
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reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Nice work, and the ending was spot on. Momma knew best all along.
How do you feel about the Bronx Bombers chances this year. I follow the Phillies and they seem to be as a year ago. Lots of HRs and more K's.
It will come down to manage the staff and the pen.
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Comment Written 21-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Mama?s know best! Thanks for reading.
As for the Yankees, who knows. We need Donaldson to step up his offensive game, one or two kids to step into the team and our pitching has to remain strong? and as few injuries as possible. Then maybe we?ll be second best again? hahaha
Comment from Sally Law
Oh John, this is precious! I just loved everything about this. Mama sounds like my mama as she taught us the importance of a first impression. It was carried through to the end of the story with the dance instructor's suggestion. Romance and dance look very promising.
Sending you my best today as always, and blessings to you and yours.
Sal :))
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Oh John, this is precious! I just loved everything about this. Mama sounds like my mama as she taught us the importance of a first impression. It was carried through to the end of the story with the dance instructor's suggestion. Romance and dance look very promising.
Sending you my best today as always, and blessings to you and yours.
Sal :))
Comment Written 21-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Wow. Thank you, Sally for this great review and for all those stars!
I really appreciate it.
John
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You are so welcome! I enjoyed your story so much.
Sal :))
Comment from Julie Lau
This is a sweet story. skilfully told: just one tiny thing; a 'to' about halfway through should be 'too'. Easily done. I think would easily get published in one of those weekly mags that has a mixture of articles, letters, cute photos, puzzles and... reader's short stories. Enjoy your writing, Julie L
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reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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This is a sweet story. skilfully told: just one tiny thing; a 'to' about halfway through should be 'too'. Easily done. I think would easily get published in one of those weekly mags that has a mixture of articles, letters, cute photos, puzzles and... reader's short stories. Enjoy your writing, Julie L
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Comment Written 21-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Hmph, one minor correction rates a four in your mind and that it could be published. Very confusing.
Anyway, I thank you for reading and sharing that you feel it could be published.
John
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No, it wasn't the typo... I felt that the dialogue was a bit too formal, and it didn't light any fires in me. But those family mags love those sweet little stories. Really, I didn't think a 4 was such a bad thing. But I got a 4 when the others were 5's and6's. We're all individuals with individual preferences. Ciao and bella fortuna (or something), Julie L
