Comment from Julie G1

Excellent

So well written. The writer here conveys an evocative word picture of platitudes. The choice of language and imagery of grief was apt and effective. There is a concise use of the poetic format. Hope to read more of this author.

 Comment Written 20-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023

Why thanks Julie for stopping by.
You did pick one of my more intensive and larger works and I'm so glad you did!
Doctor Ricky 1024

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

Thank you for sharing.

Yes as all the Stars now are? (comma needed after 'Yes,')

And, as for my Only Son Jay?
It's, "Just a Matter of Time?. (not sure why the quotation marks and don't need a question mark and a period. Along with the question mark, it seems to me you have many random question marks in these poems.)

God those Tears? (comma after 'God')

No.Amens? (omit period)

God but why? (comma after 'God' in three different places)


"Punctured Realty". (period should be inside the quotation marks)

 Comment Written 20-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023

This took about 5 minutes to clean up.
Sometimes I don't get a chance to do that after it's written.
It is actually looked over pretty good before it sent out.
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024