Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

You did a great job with your contest entry, Debi.
I enjoyed reading it. Your rhyming was great. I liked
the dialogue of those little demons. I understood
everything you wrote. I really liked the way you
formatted the lines.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023

Hi Jan,
Thank you for the detailed comments about the writing and formatting. I appreciate you stopping by and for the well wishes.
Debi

Comment from Pam Lonsdale

Excellent

Wow, and I thought I was possessed with writing! So, after you write these pesty words down, do you wake up the next morning and scratch your head in wonderment at what you've written?

A fun rhyming poem that tells it like it is:-)

Good luck in the contest.

Pam

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023

Hi Pam,
I am happy you liked this silly poem.
I am just happy to get the thoughts out. Sometimes they become something, sometimes they were just pesky.
I appreciate you stopping by to read and review.
Debi

Comment from Jamison Brown

Excellent

All too real, WJD.

Nice, unforced rhymes with added urgency provided by the artwork. Really liked the creative line indentations. Well done. Best wishes in the contest. - Jamison

P S I loved it, but it reminded me how tired I am... 😊

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023

Hi Jamison Brown,
Thank you for commiserating. I appreciate the encouraging comments about the writing.
I hope you got some sleep. LOL
Debi

Comment from Mrs. KT

Excellent

Hello, Debi!
I love the intensity and earnestness of your plight.
We have all been there at some time or another in our journey!
I appreciate your characterization of swirling thoughts being little demons! So true!

Thank you for sharing!
Best Wishes!
diane

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023

Hi diane,
Thank you for your kind words. I'm glad you understand the dilemma. Happy writing.
Debi

Comment from jmdg1954

Excellent

Debi,
I wish I had a six star left in my back pack to award you for this poem.

I felt it, word for word. It happens to all of us time for time!

Great entry. Best of luck in the contest.

John

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023

Hi John,
Thank you for commiserating. I appreciate the virtual six as well as the good luck wishes. I appreciate you stopping by to read and review.
Debi

Comment from Alan Tryens

Excellent

I can relate to your poem. So many times I'll be almost asleep and have something I've been working on come into my head. "Wait that's a great line I just thought of and will make what I'm writing even better. Should I get up and write it down? No I really want to go to sleep. I'll remember in the morning." Then in the morning I'm like "what was that I was thinking about last night". Old age brings on forgetfulness.

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023

Hi Alan Tryens,
LOL. I can relate. I've done that same thing, thinking I'll remember it in the morning but I don't. I did it even in my twenties so I'm thinking it's just those little demons getting even by disappearing and moving on to someone else. Thank you for commiserating.
Debi

Comment from Spitfire

Excellent

I love it because I have the same problem. I keep pen and paper on my night table.
'They spin, and shake, and churn, and seethe.' So true. Great use of personification.

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023

Hi Shari,
Thank you for commiserating with me. I appreciate the encouraging comments about the writing and the advice to keep pen and paper handy. Those little devils!
Debi

Comment from poetwatch

Exceptional

It appears that with the darkness of the night, your muse is taking flight, and in the course of play it says, "Wake up and write what I say." Well, W.J. Debi, I know how that feels. This is a very good entry for the Rhyming Poetry Contest. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023

Hi poetwatch,
Thank you so much for commiserating and for your encouraging review. I so appreciate the six stars from someone who understands how if feels.
Debi

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Ha ha ha, this is a fun post and those demons are now all written down and can no longer torment you! I love you rhymes, metre and the sentiment is humorous and I think many with identify with your words here, a very entertaining write, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023

Hi Dolly,
Thank you for the comments detailing the things you liked about the writing. It is helpful to know what works. Glad you enjoyed reading it.
Debi

Comment from Ginda Simpson

Exceptional

Oh my gosh, what a clever poem. Your words simply skip and leap with a sense of fun, written with perfect rhyme and timing. It's good that the words don't leave you alone. Your writing is absolutely excellent and it gets my vote. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023

Hi Ginda Simpson,
Thank you for the kind comments. I appreciate the encouragement and best wishes. You have brightened my world with them as well as the six stars.
Have a wonderful day.
Debi