Heart Crafted Poems - 2023
Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "Daylight Savings Time?"Musing of an old man
41 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent poem about Rhyming Poetry Contest. I agree with you. It's better to enjoy life in the present...in the moment.
The rhymes and meter are not forced and they flow well.
the structure makes sense, it draws on emotions and it presents strong images.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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Excellent poem about Rhyming Poetry Contest. I agree with you. It's better to enjoy life in the present...in the moment.
The rhymes and meter are not forced and they flow well.
the structure makes sense, it draws on emotions and it presents strong images.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 10-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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Thank you young lady!
Comment from Spitfire
Your four stanzas capture the danger of this stupid time change. I like that you started each one with 'Don't laugh' (but I did). I especially connected with the four lines about falling which is my biggest fear! You're so right about it could mark your final day.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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Your four stanzas capture the danger of this stupid time change. I like that you started each one with 'Don't laugh' (but I did). I especially connected with the four lines about falling which is my biggest fear! You're so right about it could mark your final day.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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I smile back with Joy, thank you! 🙏
Comment from Kaiku
nice rhyme. story reminds me of a college day walking through the food line and at the end was an older gal collecting money. I expressed that the day was forever and her quick response was, it`s not long enough. That was close to 50 years ago.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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nice rhyme. story reminds me of a college day walking through the food line and at the end was an older gal collecting money. I expressed that the day was forever and her quick response was, it`s not long enough. That was close to 50 years ago.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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Great comments, I could just see it🙏
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😂😎
Comment from John Ciarmello
Falling back in time vs. springing ahead. I enjoy the way you think, and this poem was my validation. I wish time were straightforward. This is a great entry for this contest! I'm unsure where the results stand, But I wish you much success, JLR. Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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Falling back in time vs. springing ahead. I enjoy the way you think, and this poem was my validation. I wish time were straightforward. This is a great entry for this contest! I'm unsure where the results stand, But I wish you much success, JLR. Best, JohnC
Comment Written 10-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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John, thanks for the good wishes!
Comment from Jesse James Doty
I agree the older we get the more we hate daylight savings time where we spring forward and lose an hour of sleep. This humorous piece speaks loud and clear about the lack of time we experience as we grow old and gray.
Thanks for telling it like it is!
Jesse
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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I agree the older we get the more we hate daylight savings time where we spring forward and lose an hour of sleep. This humorous piece speaks loud and clear about the lack of time we experience as we grow old and gray.
Thanks for telling it like it is!
Jesse
Comment Written 10-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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Smiling back Jesse!
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What does this mean? Smiling back.
You answer each review with this phrase, smiling back...what does it mean?
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Jesse, I appreciate you ki d words of support and I am smiling back at you Hope this doesn't offend...
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Now I understand! Thanks for filling me in. No offense taken.
Jesse
Comment from Sally Law
This messes with me every time! I woke up this morning realized it was coming and sighed again! I must travel on Sunday too. Oh my! A delightfully penned rhyming poem on this subject. Sending you my best today as always.
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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This messes with me every time! I woke up this morning realized it was coming and sighed again! I must travel on Sunday too. Oh my! A delightfully penned rhyming poem on this subject. Sending you my best today as always.
Sal XOs
Comment Written 10-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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Thanks Sal, I hope that the highest and best in all things are your constant compassion...🙏
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Jim,
This poem uses rhyme and repetition well to bring out your wit on the topic of changing time and how it effects us.
I would think it would be the opposite of what you state. You would Spring ahead to your death date and Fall behind to your youth when time didn't mean so much.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Good luck in the contest.
Joan
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2023
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Hi Jim,
This poem uses rhyme and repetition well to bring out your wit on the topic of changing time and how it effects us.
I would think it would be the opposite of what you state. You would Spring ahead to your death date and Fall behind to your youth when time didn't mean so much.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Good luck in the contest.
Joan
Comment Written 10-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2023
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Thanks you for your fine review and comments, Joan!
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No problem, Jim.
Joan
Comment from Wendy G
Lol. Yes daylight savings can be confusing and unsettling. We will finish with our summertime daylight savings soon. Your poem was a fun read - and it resonates with all of us. The rhyme is excellent, and the metre smooth. Excellent presentation as well. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2023
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Lol. Yes daylight savings can be confusing and unsettling. We will finish with our summertime daylight savings soon. Your poem was a fun read - and it resonates with all of us. The rhyme is excellent, and the metre smooth. Excellent presentation as well. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 10-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2023
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Smiling back with great humilty for your supportive comments!
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good entry into the Rhyming Poem contest. The text is a good size.
The message is clearly stated and easy to understand. I hate the changing of the times. Just keep one time. You have a good presentation. The visual fits perfectly. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2023
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This is a good entry into the Rhyming Poem contest. The text is a good size.
The message is clearly stated and easy to understand. I hate the changing of the times. Just keep one time. You have a good presentation. The visual fits perfectly. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2023
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Thank you for your validation, Sandra. May your weekend be filled with the highest and best of all opportunities
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You are welcome. Best wishes for you too!
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Hello, JLR,
I like your rhymes and inner rhyme and your disdain (?)for daylight savings time.
I guess it's nice in summer when it doesn't get dark until 9:pm. Setting back clocks is a different story.
Nice poem and photo.
Good luck.
Cindy
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2023
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Hello, JLR,
I like your rhymes and inner rhyme and your disdain (?)for daylight savings time.
I guess it's nice in summer when it doesn't get dark until 9:pm. Setting back clocks is a different story.
Nice poem and photo.
Good luck.
Cindy
Comment Written 09-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2023
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Thank you for your review and comments Cindy.
