Pay Day
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Pay Day, pt14"One fine spring day at school
6 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
This is getting really intense! I am glad that Chloe is moved to get everyone praying. Perhaps all their prayers will stop what Anthony and TJ are planning. I really liked how you included the different Bible translations and even a paraphrasing by one of the students.
Recently, Portland school students had a conference and many turned to the Lord and resolved to start Jesus Clubs at their high schools.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2023
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This is getting really intense! I am glad that Chloe is moved to get everyone praying. Perhaps all their prayers will stop what Anthony and TJ are planning. I really liked how you included the different Bible translations and even a paraphrasing by one of the students.
Recently, Portland school students had a conference and many turned to the Lord and resolved to start Jesus Clubs at their high schools.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2023
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Yay! I hadn't heard about the Portland movement. That's awesome!
Thank you for your very kind review.
Comment from Wendy G
Very well written chapter, but finishing with a note of high tension. The fact that no-body looks twice at them or questions them about their backpacks is alarming - and negligent. Such widespread and free availability of guns horrifies me, as well as the ease with which one can access information about making bombs. Looking forward (with trepidation) to the next chapter.
Wendy
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2023
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Very well written chapter, but finishing with a note of high tension. The fact that no-body looks twice at them or questions them about their backpacks is alarming - and negligent. Such widespread and free availability of guns horrifies me, as well as the ease with which one can access information about making bombs. Looking forward (with trepidation) to the next chapter.
Wendy
Comment Written 07-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2023
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Thank you.
If Americans would just come to their senses and get over the word 'control' when it comes to guns and their availability.
Comment from Lea Tonin1
Oh wow how sinister is that! Some bad stuffs going to go down right quick! I was transported right along with your story I was there fro the first word to the last Word that is a very good read! I am looking forward to your next submission just to see what happens so normally when I pick up something to read, if it doesn't hit me right off the hop, then I tend to put it down and go on to something else. This is not the case with your writing to me the mark of a great writer. I look forward to the next round. I could find no issues with grammar spelling sentence structure or punctuation, great work! So good luck and we'll see you again!
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2023
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Oh wow how sinister is that! Some bad stuffs going to go down right quick! I was transported right along with your story I was there fro the first word to the last Word that is a very good read! I am looking forward to your next submission just to see what happens so normally when I pick up something to read, if it doesn't hit me right off the hop, then I tend to put it down and go on to something else. This is not the case with your writing to me the mark of a great writer. I look forward to the next round. I could find no issues with grammar spelling sentence structure or punctuation, great work! So good luck and we'll see you again!
Comment Written 07-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2023
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Thank you for your very kind review.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Anthony and TJ are about to ruin the rest of their lives for 15 minutes of fame. They think they can be "somebodies" and get in a little revenge. The prayer club is trying their best to turn the world around. I hope prayers work. This country really needs to quit giving publicity to serial killers. Their names are broadcasted and if they are really lucky their picture is also.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2023
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Anthony and TJ are about to ruin the rest of their lives for 15 minutes of fame. They think they can be "somebodies" and get in a little revenge. The prayer club is trying their best to turn the world around. I hope prayers work. This country really needs to quit giving publicity to serial killers. Their names are broadcasted and if they are really lucky their picture is also.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2023
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Who T.J. really wants to kill is his father. But he lacks the courage. Killing innocents is his cowardly alternative.
Thank you for the very nice review.
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
This finishes on a very dramatic note and draws attention to the problems relating to gun laws also the tendency to violence generally. Despite efforts to sustain traditional values there seems to be a crisis in the West as a whole!
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2023
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This finishes on a very dramatic note and draws attention to the problems relating to gun laws also the tendency to violence generally. Despite efforts to sustain traditional values there seems to be a crisis in the West as a whole!
Comment Written 07-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2023
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Yes, you are right.
The National Rifle Association has purchased Congressmen and Senators who protect and promote gun ownership by those who should not possess them.
Thank you for the review.
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Best wishes!
Comment from royowen
What a good idea, pray without ceasing. One needs to keep going in prayer, and your penning what is going on in our church at the moment, or at least making its first faltering steps toward, these are the last days in reality, beautifully written Wayne, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2023
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What a good idea, pray without ceasing. One needs to keep going in prayer, and your penning what is going on in our church at the moment, or at least making its first faltering steps toward, these are the last days in reality, beautifully written Wayne, blessings Roy
Comment Written 07-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2023
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Thank you for your very nice review.
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Most welcome
