Comment from Sumaira.24

Exceptional

I love every word of this poem. It really touched something inside of me and was a positive message as a grown adult even I needed reminding of after reading something negative today. Thanks so much for writing this.

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2023

thank you so very much. Your kind, encouraging words mean a lot.
and the 6 is MOST appreciated!

reply by the author on 02-Mar-2023

thank you so very much. Your kind, encouraging words mean a lot.
and the 6 is MOST appreciated!
And welcome to Fan Story!

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

Excellent grandmotherly advice. Suitable for children in its tone, and in its theme, showing the value of imagination, and the value of close relationships - It's very good and I wishe you success.
Wendy

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2023

thanks, Wendy! much appreciated!

Comment from Rosemary Everson1

Exceptional

What a wonderful poem. Your advice is so greatly spoken in this poem. It talks about animals that climb, run up a tree, walk in front of a mirror and stick their head out of a window.

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2023

thank you so much for your kind words and for the lovely 6! Both are much appreciated.

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

This is a lovely rhymed poem for children. I can almost see myself saying these things to my own grandchildren. I do hope that you have the very best in all of your writing on the website. God bless and have a good day. Patricia.

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2023

thank you, Patricia! Your comments are much appreciated!

Comment from Kaiku

Excellent

As I read the first couple of stanzas, I was happy and carefree n a way. I love dogs and am partial to cats and your words were spot on, then you changed the tune to `When I was... To me that changed the tone and further down it gets philosophical that all of a sudden takes the whimsical out of the poem. I am thinking fun illustration early on then I lost the desire to illustrate. I have given you a subjective review but I am rating it on being objective. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2023

and you are absolutely right. I re-read it this morning and if I could I would take out all but the first two verses and rewrite the whole thing. ugh

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

I loved the advice here, the theme of freedom to choose in your words is a wonderful message to children who sometimes get anxious. All creatures are challenged in life and we all have to battle at sometime. I enjoyed your sentiment, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2023

thanks Dolly. I appreciate your comments.

Comment from Brandon Clark

Excellent

Very nice poem and spot on with the message! This read easily and smoothly! I have only one suggestion:

"And [wind] 'round her legs when it's time to be fed."
"And [wend] 'round her legs when it's time to be fed."

I got tripped up and read wind as in 'the wind blows' but made sense after I reread it. So I just though you might try wend instead.

I know it's pretty insignificant but since this is for a contest I just had to let you know so you can win it!

Well done and good luck in the contest,
Brandon

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2023

good idea. Thanks, I appreciate it.

Comment from Ricky1024

Excellent

"My Wish For You" was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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Based of a child and a wish.
A wish as to what creature could you be?
Good luck with your contest entry and have a blessed day.
Doctor Ricky

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2023

thanks, Doc. much appreciated.