The Experience Worn
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Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Your image is loaded with something sinister and yet your verse is light, colloquial and almost comforting until the final "bombshell!"
Deliberately (I think) a little obscure, the language (almost a little T S Eliott - style ) plasters over the horrors that we know exist but refuse and/or are too frightened to confront head-on. By using such an indifferent tone highlighting, as you say, the excuse for freedom we're still able to enjoy, you skilfully and dramatically accentuate the dreadful reality that exists. Almost a "scatter bomb" approach of humanity's self-deception! Thank you for this well crafted and thought-provoking verse. Best wishes Debbie
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2023
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Your image is loaded with something sinister and yet your verse is light, colloquial and almost comforting until the final "bombshell!"
Deliberately (I think) a little obscure, the language (almost a little T S Eliott - style ) plasters over the horrors that we know exist but refuse and/or are too frightened to confront head-on. By using such an indifferent tone highlighting, as you say, the excuse for freedom we're still able to enjoy, you skilfully and dramatically accentuate the dreadful reality that exists. Almost a "scatter bomb" approach of humanity's self-deception! Thank you for this well crafted and thought-provoking verse. Best wishes Debbie
Comment Written 25-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2023
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Hey Debbie,
Loved your take on my poem.
Thank you.
Hey listen, sorry for the late reply. On this one, from my cell, the review box went down like the whole page. So, I?m just answering as is!
Lol Thank you,
Doug
Comment from patcelaw
I found this to be a very interesting poem. I suppose we still are free, but for how long will we be free? I just do not know. Iwish you the best with your writing. Patricia
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023
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I found this to be a very interesting poem. I suppose we still are free, but for how long will we be free? I just do not know. Iwish you the best with your writing. Patricia
Comment Written 01-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Patricia.
Comment from Aussie
Photo? Hiroshima, Nagasaki? So many millions died because Enola Gay dropped a A Bomb. Just because they could. Japs hit American base and so, tit for tat. Never solved anything - anger leads to hate. K xx
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023
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Photo? Hiroshima, Nagasaki? So many millions died because Enola Gay dropped a A Bomb. Just because they could. Japs hit American base and so, tit for tat. Never solved anything - anger leads to hate. K xx
Comment Written 01-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023
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Yes, the photo is either Hiroshima or Nagasaki.
And thank you.
Comment from kahpot
Another wonderful and intriguing read, I read your work several times so I can catch all, we do have the problem of being walked upon and pushed around, but we can find little bits of freedom, very well written****kahpot
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023
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Another wonderful and intriguing read, I read your work several times so I can catch all, we do have the problem of being walked upon and pushed around, but we can find little bits of freedom, very well written****kahpot
Comment Written 01-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023
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Thank you most sincerely.
Doug
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are extremely thought provoking! The poem was
engaging, descriptive and creative. Thank you for the author's notes - they bring comfort as to way things are going! The poem flows and connects well. The artwork goes well with the theme and words of this poem.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023
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The author's words are extremely thought provoking! The poem was
engaging, descriptive and creative. Thank you for the author's notes - they bring comfort as to way things are going! The poem flows and connects well. The artwork goes well with the theme and words of this poem.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023
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Thank you.
Comment from estory
I like the vague, scattered language of this, it creates a great abstract sense of experience, of tension. There's all these vague references to misunderstandings and abuse, even the atomic bomb. Everything seems to be hanging by a thread here, yet the language is also colloquial and familiar, putting us at ease with the familiarity at the same time. It is at once disarming and alarming. estory
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2023
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I like the vague, scattered language of this, it creates a great abstract sense of experience, of tension. There's all these vague references to misunderstandings and abuse, even the atomic bomb. Everything seems to be hanging by a thread here, yet the language is also colloquial and familiar, putting us at ease with the familiarity at the same time. It is at once disarming and alarming. estory
Comment Written 01-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2023
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My goodness, exactly as I intended, or rather hoped for.
I'm ecstatic it came across so to you.
Thank you,
Doug
Comment from nomi338
You stroll along, living your best life. For you life is somewhat of a breeze. "No worries mate." Contemplating where you will go next, what you will do. Then suddenly, from the sky, hell fire itself descends down upon you and it is all over! Death and destruction has just decided to pay you a visit, and you were not prepared to accept any company today.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2023
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You stroll along, living your best life. For you life is somewhat of a breeze. "No worries mate." Contemplating where you will go next, what you will do. Then suddenly, from the sky, hell fire itself descends down upon you and it is all over! Death and destruction has just decided to pay you a visit, and you were not prepared to accept any company today.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2023
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Absolutely correct.
Thank you yet once again my friend.
Nice to hear from you.
Doug
Comment from karenina
We live in the nuclear ghetto... No way, no how are we going to put the weapons down...that other guy is bound to be nuclear packing. So ... I guess we'll swagger until we glow in the dark. Maybe then... Just maybe then we'll lift our chins and find our voice!
Karenina
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023
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We live in the nuclear ghetto... No way, no how are we going to put the weapons down...that other guy is bound to be nuclear packing. So ... I guess we'll swagger until we glow in the dark. Maybe then... Just maybe then we'll lift our chins and find our voice!
Karenina
Comment Written 01-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023
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Thank you, dear.
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Welcome!
Comment from CrystieCookie999
I liked the conversational style of this poem, and the loose tone and format. This part has a bit of hard humor:
And,
woman,
please don't
wear...
'dem shoes.
'Specially
when
you walkin'
over me.
Good post.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023
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I liked the conversational style of this poem, and the loose tone and format. This part has a bit of hard humor:
And,
woman,
please don't
wear...
'dem shoes.
'Specially
when
you walkin'
over me.
Good post.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much.
Comment from jake cosmos aller
like this poem very much. I like the use of slang, and the breezy flow, the natural language, and underlying message. I like these lines the best
Walking a walk
that leaves men
a little...
ill
at ease.
Please.
Dreams come,
but baby,
you jus' can't
push...so hard.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2023
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like this poem very much. I like the use of slang, and the breezy flow, the natural language, and underlying message. I like these lines the best
Walking a walk
that leaves men
a little...
ill
at ease.
Please.
Dreams come,
but baby,
you jus' can't
push...so hard.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2023
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Hello Jake,
Wonderful to hear from you again.
I do enjoy our repartee.
Doug
