A Childhood Scare
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Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Jay,
Even if it doesn't s for the better, it is hard to move from one house to another. I think your father was smart to move away from a flood plain.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
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Hi Jay,
Even if it doesn't s for the better, it is hard to move from one house to another. I think your father was smart to move away from a flood plain.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
Comment from amahra
Wow, how blessed you all were to escape that natural disaster. Your memory is really great, as you were five. I can't remember anything at five. May blessings continue.
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Wow, how blessed you all were to escape that natural disaster. Your memory is really great, as you were five. I can't remember anything at five. May blessings continue.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
Comment from Raul1
I think that you have well written your poem and it is full of drama. I have enjoyed reading your poetry. Excellent work! No mistakes found in your poem. Nice job! Thank you for sharing!
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I think that you have well written your poem and it is full of drama. I have enjoyed reading your poetry. Excellent work! No mistakes found in your poem. Nice job! Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
Comment from harmony13
I found the author's words conveyed a memory that the author never forgot. The words tell a story with a solution! I was sadden by last line and thought about leaving my first home and how sad it was. Great Poem!
Hi Jay, I hope you have a wonderful day!....Maria
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I found the author's words conveyed a memory that the author never forgot. The words tell a story with a solution! I was sadden by last line and thought about leaving my first home and how sad it was. Great Poem!
Hi Jay, I hope you have a wonderful day!....Maria
Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
Comment from lyenochka
I'm sorry that you had that frightful experience but it seemed to have frightened your parents more to incite them to move. We had flooding two years ago in our little culver so I have an inking of what it must have been like.
Leaving my first home left me dowm. (down)
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I'm sorry that you had that frightful experience but it seemed to have frightened your parents more to incite them to move. We had flooding two years ago in our little culver so I have an inking of what it must have been like.
Leaving my first home left me dowm. (down)
Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this memory from the past. I can see where it would have been very scary. I think we all have childhood memories that scared us. I enjoyed reading your poem.
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Thank you for sharing this memory from the past. I can see where it would have been very scary. I think we all have childhood memories that scared us. I enjoyed reading your poem.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
Comment from Ulla
Oh , Jay, I can well imagine how scared you must have been. Even as an be adult I would have been pretty scary stuff. I so enjoy reading your poems, and this is no exception. Ulla:)))
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Oh , Jay, I can well imagine how scared you must have been. Even as an be adult I would have been pretty scary stuff. I so enjoy reading your poems, and this is no exception. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent poem about your childhood and a flood.
The rhymes and meter are not forced and they flow well.
the structure makes sense, it draws on emotions and it presents strong images.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
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Excellent poem about your childhood and a flood.
The rhymes and meter are not forced and they flow well.
the structure makes sense, it draws on emotions and it presents strong images.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
It's scary for a grown-up, so I can imagine what it would be like for a young lad of 5. Those times are happening more often now. Your father obviously thought about his family, to uproot you all. We don't think of what parents go through, only what we as children do. This was an excellent poem, Jay, bringing back a horrific memory, must have been hard. Well done! :) Sandra xx
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It's scary for a grown-up, so I can imagine what it would be like for a young lad of 5. Those times are happening more often now. Your father obviously thought about his family, to uproot you all. We don't think of what parents go through, only what we as children do. This was an excellent poem, Jay, bringing back a horrific memory, must have been hard. Well done! :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
Comment from country ranch writer
Havingtimove from you hine when young us really sad fit it was all you ever new and the bam you have to move cause it us to dangerous to live there because if the rains abdfllids wanting to come in. But in the long run it was meant to be cause it could have been worse than it turned out to be. We place take a but of getting used to but eventually that sad feeling will go away.We can never predict what mother nature has up her sleeve.lesson learned by your dad that counts here for you all. Safety comes first.
We'd.-Feb, -22-2023.
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Havingtimove from you hine when young us really sad fit it was all you ever new and the bam you have to move cause it us to dangerous to live there because if the rains abdfllids wanting to come in. But in the long run it was meant to be cause it could have been worse than it turned out to be. We place take a but of getting used to but eventually that sad feeling will go away.We can never predict what mother nature has up her sleeve.lesson learned by your dad that counts here for you all. Safety comes first.
We'd.-Feb, -22-2023.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
