A Childhood Scare
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Comment from Aussie
Last word should be 'down'. Yes, you were lucky to get out of your home with water rushing in. We have had our share of two floods over Christmas - 20,000 homes went under, now many are homeless. K xx
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Last word should be 'down'. Yes, you were lucky to get out of your home with water rushing in. We have had our share of two floods over Christmas - 20,000 homes went under, now many are homeless. K xx
Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
Comment from INtity
The beginning started out really good but the fast few lines need to be edited. There is a mis-spelling and it doesn't flow like the rest of the poem. It has potential to be a great poem but needs to be edited.
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The beginning started out really good but the fast few lines need to be edited. There is a mis-spelling and it doesn't flow like the rest of the poem. It has potential to be a great poem but needs to be edited.
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Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
Comment from Faith Williams
There's nothing like watching the water rise with no chance of escape. Though sometimes it's best to stay put. Thanks so much for sharing your memory in verse.
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There's nothing like watching the water rise with no chance of escape. Though sometimes it's best to stay put. Thanks so much for sharing your memory in verse.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
Comment from jake cosmos aller
Nicely penned poem about family history and natural disaster. Sadly these sort of natural disasters are becoming more common and more deadly with many people affected.
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Nicely penned poem about family history and natural disaster. Sadly these sort of natural disasters are becoming more common and more deadly with many people affected.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
Comment from Brandon Clark
Those memories are unfortunately the ones we remember easily. I lived in Alaska when I was very young and the earthquakes still rattle my dreams occasionally, nothing like PTSD, just the memory is there and it meanders into my dream from time to time. And I clearly remember, despite being so young, the shaking, my dad running, his arms out banging from side to side down the hallway in his undies(at least we can laugh about it now) and running me outside.
Thanks for sharing a personal memory like this and I hope you are doing well,
Brandon
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Those memories are unfortunately the ones we remember easily. I lived in Alaska when I was very young and the earthquakes still rattle my dreams occasionally, nothing like PTSD, just the memory is there and it meanders into my dream from time to time. And I clearly remember, despite being so young, the shaking, my dad running, his arms out banging from side to side down the hallway in his undies(at least we can laugh about it now) and running me outside.
Thanks for sharing a personal memory like this and I hope you are doing well,
Brandon
Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
Comment from zanya
A piece of personal history beautifully conveyed here in these stanzas and the fear experienced by the poet as a young child-told with candour and fondness
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A piece of personal history beautifully conveyed here in these stanzas and the fear experienced by the poet as a young child-told with candour and fondness
Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
Comment from LJbutterfly
It is relaxing to sit back and go down memory lane. However, there are times we remember frightening events. Flooding would frighten any child. Your father made a wise decision, even if as a child, you didn't understand. Thank you for sharing, in rhyme, this past memory.
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It is relaxing to sit back and go down memory lane. However, there are times we remember frightening events. Flooding would frighten any child. Your father made a wise decision, even if as a child, you didn't understand. Thank you for sharing, in rhyme, this past memory.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
Comment from jenintorre
I really enjoyed reading about your childhood days in yet another well written poem. I really liked the line 'I was really one scared kid'. A very atmospheric write. Thanks for sharing. Jen.
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I really enjoyed reading about your childhood days in yet another well written poem. I really liked the line 'I was really one scared kid'. A very atmospheric write. Thanks for sharing. Jen.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
Comment from karenina
It is true, not every memory is a happy one. Looking back you recall the loss as a little boy...and see with a wise man's eyes the decision that had to be made!
Karenina
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It is true, not every memory is a happy one. Looking back you recall the loss as a little boy...and see with a wise man's eyes the decision that had to be made!
Karenina
Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
Comment from June Sargent
That must have been a frightening experience for a young boy. I'm glad you all were safe and had the chance to move. But leaving your old home can be sad. Life's journey is marked by all kinds of emotional challenges.
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That must have been a frightening experience for a young boy. I'm glad you all were safe and had the chance to move. But leaving your old home can be sad. Life's journey is marked by all kinds of emotional challenges.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
