A Childhood Scare
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Comment from jmdg1954
Mother Nature has a tendency to put a scare into us every so often. For a we little lad, that can be very scary seeing water rise, nearly entering your home, currents running by.
Glad you lived to tell the story.
John
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Mother Nature has a tendency to put a scare into us every so often. For a we little lad, that can be very scary seeing water rise, nearly entering your home, currents running by.
Glad you lived to tell the story.
John
Comment Written 23-Feb-2023
Comment from Mintybee
This poem gives a clear description of the childhood event. The meter is steady, as is the rhyme scheme. It covers all the upsets of the event: the flood, being cut off from transportation, a lack of swimming endurance, and eventual loss of childhood home. It packs a lot of narrative into a small space. Well done.
Mintybee
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This poem gives a clear description of the childhood event. The meter is steady, as is the rhyme scheme. It covers all the upsets of the event: the flood, being cut off from transportation, a lack of swimming endurance, and eventual loss of childhood home. It packs a lot of narrative into a small space. Well done.
Mintybee
Comment Written 23-Feb-2023
Comment from tempeste
Ciao poet,
Off late in my country due to heavy erratic rainfalls rivers have invaded towns and swallowed houses and lives.
We are nothing compared to Mother Nature s might hand. She rules.
A frightful experience you are lucky your family and you lived to tell the tale.
Thank you for sharing such a dramatic event in your life!
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Ciao poet,
Off late in my country due to heavy erratic rainfalls rivers have invaded towns and swallowed houses and lives.
We are nothing compared to Mother Nature s might hand. She rules.
A frightful experience you are lucky your family and you lived to tell the tale.
Thank you for sharing such a dramatic event in your life!
Comment Written 23-Feb-2023
Comment from Janet Foor
That is a scary experience for anyone but especially scary for a child.
Memories like this one you describe, stays with us forever.
Thank you for sharing.
Blessings
Janet
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That is a scary experience for anyone but especially scary for a child.
Memories like this one you describe, stays with us forever.
Thank you for sharing.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 23-Feb-2023
Comment from victor 66
The small town that I grew up in, in Minnesota, luckily we had very few floods. But we do get a lot of snow. Sometimes whole towns were shut down and we were unable to leave because the roads wete blocked. We didn't move but maybe we should have. You get tired of shoveling snow day after day. Best wishes.
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The small town that I grew up in, in Minnesota, luckily we had very few floods. But we do get a lot of snow. Sometimes whole towns were shut down and we were unable to leave because the roads wete blocked. We didn't move but maybe we should have. You get tired of shoveling snow day after day. Best wishes.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2023
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello, JayBird,
I so appreciate your memories told in poetic format.
And I can visualize this situation and your childhood fears.
A fine poetic offering.
Thank you for sharing!
diane
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Hello, JayBird,
I so appreciate your memories told in poetic format.
And I can visualize this situation and your childhood fears.
A fine poetic offering.
Thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 23-Feb-2023
Comment from Heather Knight
We all have moments like that in our childhood that we never forget, I guess.
Fortunately, you moved house to avoid a repetition of the flood.
Thanks for sharing your rhymes.
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We all have moments like that in our childhood that we never forget, I guess.
Fortunately, you moved house to avoid a repetition of the flood.
Thanks for sharing your rhymes.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2023
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
Thank you Jaybird for sharing a harrowing experience from your childhood. The text is a great size. The message is clearly stated and easy to understand. The last word on the last line of your poem needs a "n" rather than a "m".
Thanks for continuing to share your love of poetry with us.
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Thank you Jaybird for sharing a harrowing experience from your childhood. The text is a great size. The message is clearly stated and easy to understand. The last word on the last line of your poem needs a "n" rather than a "m".
Thanks for continuing to share your love of poetry with us.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2023
Comment from Kaiku
Take a look at your last word of the poem. I think it is misspelled unless you spell town the same way. You are the rhyme king for sure. Thanks for sharing a bit of your youth.
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Take a look at your last word of the poem. I think it is misspelled unless you spell town the same way. You are the rhyme king for sure. Thanks for sharing a bit of your youth.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2023
Comment from DeboraDyess
Good morning, Jay ~
I'm SO terrified of water. This sent chills up my spine. I cannot even imagine what you went through, waiting to see if the rain stopped or the creek continued to rise.
You retold the story well, painting a picture of the yard and the far-away escape vehicle. I'm glad your dad sold the farm and got you to a safe place!
Blessings on this fine day,
Deb
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Good morning, Jay ~
I'm SO terrified of water. This sent chills up my spine. I cannot even imagine what you went through, waiting to see if the rain stopped or the creek continued to rise.
You retold the story well, painting a picture of the yard and the far-away escape vehicle. I'm glad your dad sold the farm and got you to a safe place!
Blessings on this fine day,
Deb
Comment Written 23-Feb-2023
