A Childhood Scare
Four stanzas-abcb55 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, A Childhood Scare, has the proper formatting and reminds the readers of such flooding which challenges most people to negotiate the waters or run away.
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This poem, A Childhood Scare, has the proper formatting and reminds the readers of such flooding which challenges most people to negotiate the waters or run away.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2023
Comment from Ricky1024
A Flooded Childhood experience, rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with one Grammar Issue in the end
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My Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly
Doctor Ricky
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A Flooded Childhood experience, rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with one Grammar Issue in the end
...
My Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly
Doctor Ricky
Comment Written 25-Feb-2023
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Nice story. Nicely told. Good work.
left me dowm. - oops (down?)
I bet the root cellar filled.
Made me recall the Johnny Cash song: 'How High's the water, Momma?'
Best wishes.
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Nice story. Nicely told. Good work.
left me dowm. - oops (down?)
I bet the root cellar filled.
Made me recall the Johnny Cash song: 'How High's the water, Momma?'
Best wishes.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2023
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
This seems like a wise move. Nothing is worse than flooding! Our flat was totally flooded in India and we spent a week on the roof. The rhythm here is very lively which sustains a sense of flowing water!
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This seems like a wise move. Nothing is worse than flooding! Our flat was totally flooded in India and we spent a week on the roof. The rhythm here is very lively which sustains a sense of flowing water!
Comment Written 24-Feb-2023
Comment from estory
Your poem captures the feeling of helplessness we all feel when caught up in these natural forces, these storms that threaten our homes and lives away. They can shake us into an appreciation for the life we have, the blessings we have. estory
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Your poem captures the feeling of helplessness we all feel when caught up in these natural forces, these storms that threaten our homes and lives away. They can shake us into an appreciation for the life we have, the blessings we have. estory
Comment Written 24-Feb-2023
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Thanks for sharing the note and poem, jaybird.
-I can imagine this was a very scary situation,
especially at a really young age.
-I can't imagine seeing the water rise
and reaching to your porch.
-I'm glad your dad was able to find
another farm that made you feel
"more calm and peaceful."
-Have a good day and upcoming weekend.
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-Thanks for sharing the note and poem, jaybird.
-I can imagine this was a very scary situation,
especially at a really young age.
-I can't imagine seeing the water rise
and reaching to your porch.
-I'm glad your dad was able to find
another farm that made you feel
"more calm and peaceful."
-Have a good day and upcoming weekend.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2023
Comment from mermaids
You have a vivid use of words in which the reader can feel you as a five year old, frightened of the down pouring rain. I also like your last verse where moving to a new farm had an impact on you. Excellent biographical poem.
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You have a vivid use of words in which the reader can feel you as a five year old, frightened of the down pouring rain. I also like your last verse where moving to a new farm had an impact on you. Excellent biographical poem.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2023
Comment from Paul McFarland
As a youngster, this obviously mad a big impression on you. I think everybody can think back on at least one time in their young life that that is unforgettable.
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As a youngster, this obviously mad a big impression on you. I think everybody can think back on at least one time in their young life that that is unforgettable.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2023
Comment from ESOSTINE
The poem is a detailed descriptive narrative of a childhood experience, a scary one in deed. Good your family was able to respond appropriately. Thanks for sharing your world. Consider editing the typo error in the last word of the last line. Well done, dear Jay.
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The poem is a detailed descriptive narrative of a childhood experience, a scary one in deed. Good your family was able to respond appropriately. Thanks for sharing your world. Consider editing the typo error in the last word of the last line. Well done, dear Jay.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2023
Comment from jacquelyn popp
Very well written and I enjoyed reading your poem. I think that down is misspelled in your last stanza. You have an m instead of an n. Your poem gives a clear description of the event from your childhood. Well done. The meter and rhyme scheme is steady and flows well in your poem. Great job with telling your memories in a poetic format. Nicely done. Thank you for sharing.
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Very well written and I enjoyed reading your poem. I think that down is misspelled in your last stanza. You have an m instead of an n. Your poem gives a clear description of the event from your childhood. Well done. The meter and rhyme scheme is steady and flows well in your poem. Great job with telling your memories in a poetic format. Nicely done. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2023
