We got to do better
Inspiration from brother while riding through Chiraq.28 total reviews
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello, Charity,
I read your well-crafted poem last evening, and I have just now been able to return to it.
Honest.
Brutal in places.
But the message is sound and clear.
And if I may, I have to do better as well...
Thank you for sharing!
diane
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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Hello, Charity,
I read your well-crafted poem last evening, and I have just now been able to return to it.
Honest.
Brutal in places.
But the message is sound and clear.
And if I may, I have to do better as well...
Thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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Thanks for the honest review.
Comment from Ulla
Thanks a lot for sharing this wake up call. You're addressing a very controversial subject in this wonderfully written poem. But it is a subject that has to be addressed now and not in some vague distant future. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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Thanks a lot for sharing this wake up call. You're addressing a very controversial subject in this wonderfully written poem. But it is a subject that has to be addressed now and not in some vague distant future. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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Yes it needed to be address. My brother inspired me to write this as we roll around in the hood of chicago.
Comment from Thesis
I find this work both sad and uplifting. History has been cruel to people of color, forcing distrust, fear, and submission. You highlight these things and show where some have given up and have also preyed on their own.
The uplifting side is the message to take charge and the be the force of change, to stop the violence, and to cultivate the young so that they are no longer victimized.
It's a powerful piece.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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I find this work both sad and uplifting. History has been cruel to people of color, forcing distrust, fear, and submission. You highlight these things and show where some have given up and have also preyed on their own.
The uplifting side is the message to take charge and the be the force of change, to stop the violence, and to cultivate the young so that they are no longer victimized.
It's a powerful piece.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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Thanks for the six stars and excellent review.
Comment from Aussie
Rough and ready story told. Our indigenous folk are growing and when whitey let's us, we are doing well. A black world without a dream leads to chaos. Misunderstood, labelled, whitey judges us to his so-called-standards. Stolen generation from Africa your mob. We were just taken. Good to see you writing. Bin' a while sweetpea. K xx
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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Rough and ready story told. Our indigenous folk are growing and when whitey let's us, we are doing well. A black world without a dream leads to chaos. Misunderstood, labelled, whitey judges us to his so-called-standards. Stolen generation from Africa your mob. We were just taken. Good to see you writing. Bin' a while sweetpea. K xx
Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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Good to hear from you. Stay strong and healthy. You are so strong and you been through so much.
Comment from ESOSTINE
This is a real call for a total paradigm shift among especially the black communities. It was a well written piece of advice straight from the heart. I could identify with the message of the poem. Thanks so much for sharing your wisdom.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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This is a real call for a total paradigm shift among especially the black communities. It was a well written piece of advice straight from the heart. I could identify with the message of the poem. Thanks so much for sharing your wisdom.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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Thank you for the six stars. You are most welcome.
Comment from jake cosmos aller
very powerful and moving message my soul sister. Keep preaching the good word, sister. I am not sure if I mentioned this before, but I do have a poetry blog and would love to feature you as guest poet. If interested, send me five of your favorite poems including any links or audio clips and I promote it on my web page https://theworldaccordingtocosmos.com
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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very powerful and moving message my soul sister. Keep preaching the good word, sister. I am not sure if I mentioned this before, but I do have a poetry blog and would love to feature you as guest poet. If interested, send me five of your favorite poems including any links or audio clips and I promote it on my web page https://theworldaccordingtocosmos.com
Comment Written 21-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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Thank you so much. Long time. I been crazy busy.
Comment from mermaids
You have powerful words here that teach the reader. I like your line about the Bible, so many of us do not find the truth in it and change our ways. Your beat and rhythm are strong and add to the strength of your theme. "Road to redemption the Messiah already paved" is another marvelous full of truth.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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You have powerful words here that teach the reader. I like your line about the Bible, so many of us do not find the truth in it and change our ways. Your beat and rhythm are strong and add to the strength of your theme. "Road to redemption the Messiah already paved" is another marvelous full of truth.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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I appreciate your detailed review. Thank you.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this with us. I've not read your poem for a while. I enjoyed reading this and you touched on a hard subject. I noticed of the rhyme seemed forced. You might want to check that.
Ray Charles to the truth so we continue to live a lie together . (omit space before the period)
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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Thank you for sharing this with us. I've not read your poem for a while. I enjoyed reading this and you touched on a hard subject. I noticed of the rhyme seemed forced. You might want to check that.
Ray Charles to the truth so we continue to live a lie together . (omit space before the period)
Comment Written 21-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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Thank you.
Comment from karenina
Hey, Charity. It's been a while! I see you have not lost your edge, nor would I ever expect you to. This is an equal opportunity rant~~slamming the broad-brush assumptions made about both Caucasians and Blacks...
Angry? Yes -- but angry about the stereotypical characterizations made by a skewed media and a political system with an agenda.
You're so right. We can all do better. Not everyone is a "Cracka" nor a "Rapper" promoting "guns, drugs, and sluts."
Real voices with hard truths promote real dialogue.
You keep telling it as you feel it. Hope you're still doing those poetry slams!
Almost time to send me a new YouTube link?
Karenina
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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Hey, Charity. It's been a while! I see you have not lost your edge, nor would I ever expect you to. This is an equal opportunity rant~~slamming the broad-brush assumptions made about both Caucasians and Blacks...
Angry? Yes -- but angry about the stereotypical characterizations made by a skewed media and a political system with an agenda.
You're so right. We can all do better. Not everyone is a "Cracka" nor a "Rapper" promoting "guns, drugs, and sluts."
Real voices with hard truths promote real dialogue.
You keep telling it as you feel it. Hope you're still doing those poetry slams!
Almost time to send me a new YouTube link?
Karenina
Comment Written 21-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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I'll never lost my edge my friend. I been so busy with work and poetry slams. Also now I did some poetry battles. I best a all time poet legend. I have to send you some links soon. Also looking around at publishing compaines for my book. How have you been? Always good hearing from you.
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I'm hanging in there! Looking forward to your links! Keep doing what you do!
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Of all the things I have read and shared with you, and it has been a while since I have received anything of your, this one is spot on. Well done, Charity.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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Of all the things I have read and shared with you, and it has been a while since I have received anything of your, this one is spot on. Well done, Charity.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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Thanks for the six my friend. Long time. Good to hear from you.
