Quiet Lawyer
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Comment from Pam Lonsdale
So many times in life we suffer consequences of not speaking up when we should have - or expecting someone else to magically know how we feel. It's happened a few times to me over the years.
This was a sad Valentine's Day story, Barbara:-( But I'm pretty sure things will work out.
A good chapter, Barbara.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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So many times in life we suffer consequences of not speaking up when we should have - or expecting someone else to magically know how we feel. It's happened a few times to me over the years.
This was a sad Valentine's Day story, Barbara:-( But I'm pretty sure things will work out.
A good chapter, Barbara.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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Thank you for the support. I'm curious if either of these stubborn people are going to give in.
Comment from judiverse
Ali and Cord certainly know how to complicate things. Given her nature, Ali certainly seems better suited to life in Texas and maybe handling domestic cases just as she did for the women Pat had abused. She'll be more satisfied with that than corporate law. Maybe she feels she owes it to her family. I suppose Cord will have to fly to New York to make his case. I know they'll work things out. judi
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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Ali and Cord certainly know how to complicate things. Given her nature, Ali certainly seems better suited to life in Texas and maybe handling domestic cases just as she did for the women Pat had abused. She'll be more satisfied with that than corporate law. Maybe she feels she owes it to her family. I suppose Cord will have to fly to New York to make his case. I know they'll work things out. judi
Comment Written 14-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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Thank you for the support. I'm curious if either of these stubborn people are going to give in.
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You're welcome. I know you'll talk some sense into them. Ali would be much happier in Texas. judi
Comment from lancellot
Can Cord and Ali's relationship be saved? Well, up until a day ago it was just fine, such as it is. Now that all the side quests are done for Ali, the story has to go back to a romance novel. But... the romance, for all appearances was a done deal. So, a break (drama/conflict) had to happen, so the resolution (man chases woman at train station or airport scene where they declare their love) could happen. Then they kiss a live happily ever after.
Here's the issue to consider during the final draft. You don't want your characters to be smart on Monday, then dumb on Tuesday, then smart on Wednesday, then...
It's the same as being brave and bold facing Roger, then little girl weak facing Alan. Scared to be in NY, but will face a fire, kidnapper, rapist and so on. Can't go back to NY but did instantly before.
The thing is, this problem isn't new. Ali was always from NY. From day one. Also, they don't have much of a relationship. It's been less than two months, and they've only kissed. And been on three or four dates.
I would look into these 'real and honest' issues in a romance novel with, smart, professional adults in their thirties. Are they acting like that here?
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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Can Cord and Ali's relationship be saved? Well, up until a day ago it was just fine, such as it is. Now that all the side quests are done for Ali, the story has to go back to a romance novel. But... the romance, for all appearances was a done deal. So, a break (drama/conflict) had to happen, so the resolution (man chases woman at train station or airport scene where they declare their love) could happen. Then they kiss a live happily ever after.
Here's the issue to consider during the final draft. You don't want your characters to be smart on Monday, then dumb on Tuesday, then smart on Wednesday, then...
It's the same as being brave and bold facing Roger, then little girl weak facing Alan. Scared to be in NY, but will face a fire, kidnapper, rapist and so on. Can't go back to NY but did instantly before.
The thing is, this problem isn't new. Ali was always from NY. From day one. Also, they don't have much of a relationship. It's been less than two months, and they've only kissed. And been on three or four dates.
I would look into these 'real and honest' issues in a romance novel with, smart, professional adults in their thirties. Are they acting like that here?
Comment Written 14-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Hi Barb, you've put Wednesday the 19th but that is this Sunday!
This was awful! Why don't they just tell each other how they feel instead of telling themselves what the other feels which is all wrong. I'm so pleased I'm not at that stage of my life. Phew, it must be such hard work. Well, it's all in Alie's hands now, and she hasn't got long to do it. Well done, this was an excellent lead up to the last chapter. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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Hi Barb, you've put Wednesday the 19th but that is this Sunday!
This was awful! Why don't they just tell each other how they feel instead of telling themselves what the other feels which is all wrong. I'm so pleased I'm not at that stage of my life. Phew, it must be such hard work. Well, it's all in Alie's hands now, and she hasn't got long to do it. Well done, this was an excellent lead up to the last chapter. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 14-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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Thank you for the support. I'm curious if either of these stubborn people are going to give in.
Comment from nomi338
I know this situation all too well. I am happy and content with my marriage that has lasted for more than 40 plus years. However, if I had found the courage to tell my very first real love how I felt, barring something unforeseen, I would have probably been married to her for an even longer time. We men often get in our own way, because we do not know how to say what we feel, and how to ask for what we really and truly want.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2023
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I know this situation all too well. I am happy and content with my marriage that has lasted for more than 40 plus years. However, if I had found the courage to tell my very first real love how I felt, barring something unforeseen, I would have probably been married to her for an even longer time. We men often get in our own way, because we do not know how to say what we feel, and how to ask for what we really and truly want.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2023
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Thank you for sharing. I am wondering with these two stubborn people who is going to make the first move. We'll find out Sunday, if either of them.
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Hurry up Sunday.
Comment from jmdg1954
Very good chapter, Barbara.
You were able to stem the "love tide" a bit almost to western stand-off. Let's see who gives in first, if anyone. They are both being stubborn wanting the other to soften and give in.
Looking forward to the next post. Curious minds want to know.
Cheers to a happy ending.
John
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2023
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Very good chapter, Barbara.
You were able to stem the "love tide" a bit almost to western stand-off. Let's see who gives in first, if anyone. They are both being stubborn wanting the other to soften and give in.
Looking forward to the next post. Curious minds want to know.
Cheers to a happy ending.
John
Comment Written 14-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2023
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We'll find out Sunday who gives in, if either of them. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent chapter, Barbara. It's a sad story, so many people fight because they don't see eye to eye.
Thank you for keeping the chapter short. I have a hard time reading long chapters.
The story grabbed my interest. The dialogue is believable. And the characters seem real. I would you recommend it.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2023
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Excellent chapter, Barbara. It's a sad story, so many people fight because they don't see eye to eye.
Thank you for keeping the chapter short. I have a hard time reading long chapters.
The story grabbed my interest. The dialogue is believable. And the characters seem real. I would you recommend it.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 14-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2023
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Thank you for your kind support.
Comment from Sankey
A lovely but sad read. I hope things work out as I think they will seeing we are so close to the end. Just one little spag(")You Ortiz men
Men don't really understand women a lot of the time, ha. Hope you have something new, after this?
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2023
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A lovely but sad read. I hope things work out as I think they will seeing we are so close to the end. Just one little spag(")You Ortiz men
Men don't really understand women a lot of the time, ha. Hope you have something new, after this?
Comment Written 14-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2023
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I am curious who, if either of them, are going to give in first. I can't wait to find out. I have added that missing quotation mark.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
Standing on its own merits this chapter served as a well-developed and well-rounded story. However, I think there was a slight lack of continuity between Cord wondering in the previous chapter what was bothering Ali, and the time it took for that to be brought up in detail in this chapter. I hope you'll be able to tighten this up during revision. kay
Within in minutes, > Within minutes,
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2023
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Standing on its own merits this chapter served as a well-developed and well-rounded story. However, I think there was a slight lack of continuity between Cord wondering in the previous chapter what was bothering Ali, and the time it took for that to be brought up in detail in this chapter. I hope you'll be able to tighten this up during revision. kay
Within in minutes, > Within minutes,
Comment Written 14-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2023
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It's all one chapter. I just divided it for FanStory because my fans like shorter posts. It won't be separated in the novel. Thank you for the kind review. I made the correction. Thank you for the catch.
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I always read A+B as one chapter, I just figure Cord wouldn't have been able to keep quiet about it for as long as he did - just a thought
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They were too busy with the judge.
Comment from Shirley McLain
What a sad situation. Two hard headed people that think they are right. It happens so many times in our world. You did a great job, and I hope you put them back together again. Take care and Happy Valentins Day. Shirley
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2023
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What a sad situation. Two hard headed people that think they are right. It happens so many times in our world. You did a great job, and I hope you put them back together again. Take care and Happy Valentins Day. Shirley
Comment Written 14-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2023
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I am wondering who if either of them are going to give in. HMM, We'll see Sunday. Thank you for the support.
