The Farewell
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "The Farewell"Last conversations with dad
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Comment from Teri7
I think you did a really good job with this first script you have penned. I don't write script so I am not much help on finding things to add or take away. I look forward to the next part. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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I think you did a really good job with this first script you have penned. I don't write script so I am not much help on finding things to add or take away. I look forward to the next part. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 14-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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You and me both. Thanks for reading and the nice review
Comment from lyenochka
Good opening script! You wrote in a lot of tension here because of the situation that Peggy and her father are in. The dialogue is convincing and there is much not said that is even more evident. Best wishes in the contest!!
FUDGECICLES TOASTING YOU AND THE FAMILY. (question mark)
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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Good opening script! You wrote in a lot of tension here because of the situation that Peggy and her father are in. The dialogue is convincing and there is much not said that is even more evident. Best wishes in the contest!!
FUDGECICLES TOASTING YOU AND THE FAMILY. (question mark)
Comment Written 14-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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Thank you. I?ll get that ? In there.
Comment from jmdg1954
I never wrote a script, it's something I want to try one day. I'm envisioning this in story form... nine kids, nine personalities, nine upbringings, nine variations to everything. What I'm trying to ask, will there be tensions, inter-twining of stories, hatred, animosity between siblings the father has to deal with.
It can't all be a bouquet of roses coming from all nine?
Just my thoughts.
Looking forward to the next post.
John
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2023
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I never wrote a script, it's something I want to try one day. I'm envisioning this in story form... nine kids, nine personalities, nine upbringings, nine variations to everything. What I'm trying to ask, will there be tensions, inter-twining of stories, hatred, animosity between siblings the father has to deal with.
It can't all be a bouquet of roses coming from all nine?
Just my thoughts.
Looking forward to the next post.
John
Comment Written 14-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2023
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That?s a great question. There are a couple of surprises. Thank you for the fine review.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a good script, unless all the scenes are children telling their dad how much they love him. No family has 9 wonderful children, and nine wonderful children will not make an interesting play. There needs to be tension, apologies, some secrets, and some talk of his career. That's life.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2023
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This is a good script, unless all the scenes are children telling their dad how much they love him. No family has 9 wonderful children, and nine wonderful children will not make an interesting play. There needs to be tension, apologies, some secrets, and some talk of his career. That's life.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2023
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You are correct. The eldest was like a mom to the rest of us so she sets the stage, however, there will be a few surprises. Thank you for the fine review.
