Waves Fear no One
A day at the beach29 total reviews
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I can see why this piece won. It's certainly the best one that I read by a long way. It messes with the preconceptions of the reader which is always a good thing.
Excellent work
GMG
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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Hi there,
I can see why this piece won. It's certainly the best one that I read by a long way. It messes with the preconceptions of the reader which is always a good thing.
Excellent work
GMG
Comment Written 15-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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Thank you, GMG. I appreciate your kind words.
John
Comment from lyenochka
Oh my goodness! I would have had a heart attack as the mom had I known my daughter was almost drowned ! But this feisty and courageous little Gracie thought it was the most fun ever! Great storytelling and congratulations on the win!!!
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2023
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Oh my goodness! I would have had a heart attack as the mom had I known my daughter was almost drowned ! But this feisty and courageous little Gracie thought it was the most fun ever! Great storytelling and congratulations on the win!!!
Comment Written 14-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2023
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Thank you, Helen. I appreciate your reading my post and the congrats!
You?re the best!
John
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
CONGRATULATIONS, John, on your first place win.
What a cutie Aria is. I enjoyed reading your story
You put readers right in the middle of the scene
with your well thought out descriptive words. It
sounded just like a young child who experienced
what would frighten adults tremendously while
she was game for more.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2023
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CONGRATULATIONS, John, on your first place win.
What a cutie Aria is. I enjoyed reading your story
You put readers right in the middle of the scene
with your well thought out descriptive words. It
sounded just like a young child who experienced
what would frighten adults tremendously while
she was game for more.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Comment Written 14-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2023
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Jan, thank you for reading and sharing.
Also, thanks for the congrats. I must?ve read, reread, edited 100 times.
I appreciate you always reading my work.
John
Comment from Eternal Muse
Oh, this was so cute and adorable. I love reading about the ocean, and wrote a lot about it in my own works.
Your imagery and attention to detail are stunning. Loved you you described the waves and "their thunderous clap pounding the shore". You paint a picture for a reader with your words and I feel like I've been at that beach myself.
A scary story reading about Gracie pulled into the current. I breathed the sigh of relief reading about her escape.
A lovely story, I enjoyed it very much, thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2023
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Oh, this was so cute and adorable. I love reading about the ocean, and wrote a lot about it in my own works.
Your imagery and attention to detail are stunning. Loved you you described the waves and "their thunderous clap pounding the shore". You paint a picture for a reader with your words and I feel like I've been at that beach myself.
A scary story reading about Gracie pulled into the current. I breathed the sigh of relief reading about her escape.
A lovely story, I enjoyed it very much, thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much for reading and providing your feedback. I do appreciate your time.
John
Comment from Mia Twysted
I like how when it was all over she didn't shy away from theater like some kids would be scared that such a thing would happen again. This means she is an adventurer.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2023
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I like how when it was all over she didn't shy away from theater like some kids would be scared that such a thing would happen again. This means she is an adventurer.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2023
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Thank you. Mia. I appreciate your reading my post.
Comment from LisaMay
You've captured the danger of the sea's power here, and a young girl's playful innocence. She could've been drowned! Your descriptive story is full of energy and I enjoyed reading it, but I am anxious about Gracie being unsupervised. I hope she is swimming between the flags with lifesavers present.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2023
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You've captured the danger of the sea's power here, and a young girl's playful innocence. She could've been drowned! Your descriptive story is full of energy and I enjoyed reading it, but I am anxious about Gracie being unsupervised. I hope she is swimming between the flags with lifesavers present.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2023
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Thank you, Lisa. I appreciate your stopping by to read.
Comment from jacquelyn popp
This was a cut story. It was very well written and your words flowed smoothly. That is a really sweet picture of your granddaughter. Your descriptive words in your story created really good imagery. I could picture myself at the beach, enjoying myself. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2023
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This was a cut story. It was very well written and your words flowed smoothly. That is a really sweet picture of your granddaughter. Your descriptive words in your story created really good imagery. I could picture myself at the beach, enjoying myself. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2023
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Thank you, Jacquelyn for taking the time to read this post.
Comment from LJbutterfly
This story is dramatic and realistic. I had a similar experience when I was ten years old, except I realized the danger I had been in. Gracie may have been younger, because she was ready to go back in the water with her mother.
Note: "She grabbed her hand pulling her to the water." This sentence has three pronouns. You might want to make the sentence clearer by substituting one of the pronouns with Gracie's name so we can tell who pulled who.
Great story. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2023
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This story is dramatic and realistic. I had a similar experience when I was ten years old, except I realized the danger I had been in. Gracie may have been younger, because she was ready to go back in the water with her mother.
Note: "She grabbed her hand pulling her to the water." This sentence has three pronouns. You might want to make the sentence clearer by substituting one of the pronouns with Gracie's name so we can tell who pulled who.
Great story. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2023
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Thank you so much for pointing that out. You?re absolutely correct. I thought it didn?t read well.
I appreciate it very much.
Comment from Mark Kuglin
Cute story...A very enjoyable read.
Your ending was well hidden. You didn't telegraph your destination along the way.
Your story could have led to a tragic and more expected ending. Instead, it concluded on an upbeat note. A happy child, blissfully unaware of what had just occurred.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2023
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Cute story...A very enjoyable read.
Your ending was well hidden. You didn't telegraph your destination along the way.
Your story could have led to a tragic and more expected ending. Instead, it concluded on an upbeat note. A happy child, blissfully unaware of what had just occurred.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2023
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Thank you, Mark. I appreciate you stopping to read my post.
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My pleasure
Comment from royowen
There's no figuring children is there? As long as the child respects the sea, otherwise one can get into trouble most profound. I love this though for capturing that incredible optimism and joy of life in a child, beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2023
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There's no figuring children is there? As long as the child respects the sea, otherwise one can get into trouble most profound. I love this though for capturing that incredible optimism and joy of life in a child, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 13-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2023
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Thank you, Roy for those pleasant words in your review. I appreciate it very much.
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Well done
