A Fight Broke Out
a poem12 total reviews
Comment from ESOSTINE
Quite a funny piece, Bill yet scary of a fight to have lasted till dawn with pants down while the dance and music played on. Certainly I wouldn't want to be there. Hahahaha! Beautifully rhymed.
Thanks for sharing. Lol.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Quite a funny piece, Bill yet scary of a fight to have lasted till dawn with pants down while the dance and music played on. Certainly I wouldn't want to be there. Hahahaha! Beautifully rhymed.
Thanks for sharing. Lol.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Thank you, Esostine
Comment from judiverse
Excellent AABB rhyme. A dance is a bad time for a fight to break out. It seems that if two people go at it, others get involved in the fight and it turns into a real brawl. There should be consequences for those involved in fighting. Excellent rhyme. judi
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Excellent AABB rhyme. A dance is a bad time for a fight to break out. It seems that if two people go at it, others get involved in the fight and it turns into a real brawl. There should be consequences for those involved in fighting. Excellent rhyme. judi
Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Thank you, Judi
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You're welcome. judi
Comment from Ulla
Oh dear, that must have been an a heck of a long fight. But I'm glad it ended peacefully when the music came to an end. At least nobody was hurt. Not much anywa, Lol. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Oh dear, that must have been an a heck of a long fight. But I'm glad it ended peacefully when the music came to an end. At least nobody was hurt. Not much anywa, Lol. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Dances, right?
Comment from nomi338
Sounds like a hot time in the old town. I know this is just a fun poem, but I somehow see this playing out in some form from your time as a fun loving tow fisted, fight starting Jarhead. Please tell me I am wrong, and make me believe it..
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Sounds like a hot time in the old town. I know this is just a fun poem, but I somehow see this playing out in some form from your time as a fun loving tow fisted, fight starting Jarhead. Please tell me I am wrong, and make me believe it..
Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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We used to "pants" guys all the time. That's funny!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Great rhymes and this is some wild party Bill, glad your honour was defended but your embarrassment will have lasted all night, a fun post, but I decline the invite, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Great rhymes and this is some wild party Bill, glad your honour was defended but your embarrassment will have lasted all night, a fun post, but I decline the invite, love Dolly x
Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Thanks, Dolly. Dances are brutal.
Comment from Sugarray77
Your humor is always fun, BUT, the font is soooo hard to read. I would mention it might be helpful to darken it. I enjoyed this rambunctious verse, Bill. :)
Melissa
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Your humor is always fun, BUT, the font is soooo hard to read. I would mention it might be helpful to darken it. I enjoyed this rambunctious verse, Bill. :)
Melissa
Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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I fixed the font. : )
Comment from BethShelby
This is pretty funny. Especially the part about all those popped bubbles. You poem is well rhymed and flows nicely. You art choice shows a lot of movement and chaos. I"m glad you were able to defend you honor. LOL
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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This is pretty funny. Especially the part about all those popped bubbles. You poem is well rhymed and flows nicely. You art choice shows a lot of movement and chaos. I"m glad you were able to defend you honor. LOL
Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Dances are so life and death!
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
I thought to start with your narrator was a man, heavily involved in the fight, and pants were trousers. Then, with the arrival of the last line, I revised everything, and saw frilly salls on a female form, and the narrator watching men fight over her / for her. I will never know when I was right, but it was a fun experience. kay
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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I thought to start with your narrator was a man, heavily involved in the fight, and pants were trousers. Then, with the arrival of the last line, I revised everything, and saw frilly salls on a female form, and the narrator watching men fight over her / for her. I will never know when I was right, but it was a fun experience. kay
Comment Written 05-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Thanks, Katherine
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Thanks, Katherine
Comment from Jasmine Girl
Wow. That's some messy fight. These bubbles must have pastel colored paint in them. I don't know exactly why your honor were defended. But it's good that it did.
Well done.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Wow. That's some messy fight. These bubbles must have pastel colored paint in them. I don't know exactly why your honor were defended. But it's good that it did.
Well done.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Thank you, Lisa
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Thank you, Lisa
Comment from lyenochka
Well, I'm glad that the narrator's honor was defended but it seems to have come at a great cost and could have been avoided if the narrator hadn't been sporting his sagging pants fashion.
I think this would be easier to read if the font were darker or the background green were lighter.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Well, I'm glad that the narrator's honor was defended but it seems to have come at a great cost and could have been avoided if the narrator hadn't been sporting his sagging pants fashion.
I think this would be easier to read if the font were darker or the background green were lighter.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Thanks, Helen
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Thanks, Helen
