haiku (a dark winter's night)
A Zen Haiku for the club challenge 5-6-515 total reviews
Comment from pome lover
well, sir.
I'm not sure what to make of this Zen Haiku poem.
I'm going to take a stab at it and guess that the "dark, winter's night" means that no one comes to wish because it's too cold and it is night, and if "we" are personalizing the well, it misses those who have come, before, to make wishes. And I guess, "it" is empty of wishes -- maybe also water. That sounds too obvious, but those are my thoughts.
Now, maybe you can tell me how far off I was. :)
Katharine
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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well, sir.
I'm not sure what to make of this Zen Haiku poem.
I'm going to take a stab at it and guess that the "dark, winter's night" means that no one comes to wish because it's too cold and it is night, and if "we" are personalizing the well, it misses those who have come, before, to make wishes. And I guess, "it" is empty of wishes -- maybe also water. That sounds too obvious, but those are my thoughts.
Now, maybe you can tell me how far off I was. :)
Katharine
Comment Written 04-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Hello Katharine, I think/know what I was trying to say is that the lonely have given up wishing, and feel even lonelier when the winter and the dark set in, the well of wishes is empty, don't wish-do, I think it is amazing how people read so many different things in what they read, I know I do as I am a bit different, what a wonderful review, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
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well! I much prefer your meaning! and, aren't we all a bit different? :)
Thank you for enlightening me. I have re-read it and see what you mean.
Lovely. Thank you.
Katharine
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PS, I just read where you called it "self improvement" poetry.
I don't see the need for any.
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When I first started here, I could barely spell, grammar was a foreign word, as I read your and many others work-listen to all the help and encouragement, I believe I have improved, some people are poets, writers, my work is a combination of everyone's encouragement
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Werll, it's most enjoyable! and it is your own.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Trying to be funny for something so short as a haiku, why is the wishing well lonely? Did someone visit and take from its depth its booty? Good luck.
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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Trying to be funny for something so short as a haiku, why is the wishing well lonely? Did someone visit and take from its depth its booty? Good luck.
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Comment Written 04-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Or we could try-the lonely are pure out of wishes, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Brandon Clark
Great Job! The overall presentation was very pleasing and the well chosen words fit perfect for the task. Really cool and mysteriously stark! Thanks for posting!!
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Great Job! The overall presentation was very pleasing and the well chosen words fit perfect for the task. Really cool and mysteriously stark! Thanks for posting!!
Comment Written 04-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Thank you so very much, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Nicki Nance
This is an intriguing haiku. It kind of gives a sinking feeling and the suggestion that the lonely people are too afraid to wish. Even the wishing well wasn't wishing.
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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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This is an intriguing haiku. It kind of gives a sinking feeling and the suggestion that the lonely people are too afraid to wish. Even the wishing well wasn't wishing.
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Comment Written 04-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Thank you so very much, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from lyenochka
Super job with your haiku! The fact that it is an "empty wishing well" shows us that there are no wishes left. The darkness of the night echoes in the loneliness.
a dark winters night (winter's)
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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Super job with your haiku! The fact that it is an "empty wishing well" shows us that there are no wishes left. The darkness of the night echoes in the loneliness.
a dark winters night (winter's)
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Comment Written 04-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Thank you so very much, only one mistake this time, I'm getting better, as always very much appreciate****kahpot
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You're always getting better, Kahpot!!
