haiku (osprey sits above)
A haiku (site contest entry)20 total reviews
Comment from John Ciarmello
I enjoyed this piece, kahpot! Your words are as majestic as the beautiful photo that accompanies them. It all fits so perfectly! I loved everything about this one! Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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I enjoyed this piece, kahpot! Your words are as majestic as the beautiful photo that accompanies them. It all fits so perfectly! I loved everything about this one! Best, JohnC
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image and presentation, kahpot.
-I didn't know osprey were also called sea eagles.
-You wrote a good haiku with effective
nature and seasonal imagery.
-You create a good word picture
of the osprey observing from its perch.
-A very good satori line.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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-Nice image and presentation, kahpot.
-I didn't know osprey were also called sea eagles.
-You wrote a good haiku with effective
nature and seasonal imagery.
-You create a good word picture
of the osprey observing from its perch.
-A very good satori line.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
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You are welcome.
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very good haiku for the contest. I wish you the best in the contest. May you continue to stay warm in this winter climate and the spring comes I hope that you will enjoy the warmer weather. Your image here is so good to the words that are being said.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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This is a very good haiku for the contest. I wish you the best in the contest. May you continue to stay warm in this winter climate and the spring comes I hope that you will enjoy the warmer weather. Your image here is so good to the words that are being said.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You made me smile as this bird makes a choice at his local canteen and those poor fishes are at risk, this is a fine Haiku for the contest and could be a winner, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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You made me smile as this bird makes a choice at his local canteen and those poor fishes are at risk, this is a fine Haiku for the contest and could be a winner, love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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Thank you Dolly, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from lyenochka
I loved "glancing over the menu" ! What a humorous view of the osprey's view over the waters. I have been canoeing on a lake when an osprey dove right next to us and boy, do they make a big splash to get their prey!
Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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I loved "glancing over the menu" ! What a humorous view of the osprey's view over the waters. I have been canoeing on a lake when an osprey dove right next to us and boy, do they make a big splash to get their prey!
Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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Thank you, some do though normally their talons are very precise and just seem to pluck them from near the surface, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from pome lover
cute idea and picture, however, to me, it would sound better if you said "checking out", instead of glancing over, because he's looking over the precipace of something, and it sounds like it means "perched above, glancing over the edge of..., instead of glancing, or looking over the menu.
Is that clear as mud??? :)
what about: osprey, perched above, checking out the menu~ dangerous waters. And by the way, why dangerous waters? what about, dinner below, or something.
I'm sorry. Your poem sounds lovely, it just seemed a bit confusing to me.
Katharine
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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cute idea and picture, however, to me, it would sound better if you said "checking out", instead of glancing over, because he's looking over the precipace of something, and it sounds like it means "perched above, glancing over the edge of..., instead of glancing, or looking over the menu.
Is that clear as mud??? :)
what about: osprey, perched above, checking out the menu~ dangerous waters. And by the way, why dangerous waters? what about, dinner below, or something.
I'm sorry. Your poem sounds lovely, it just seemed a bit confusing to me.
Katharine
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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This is why I love writing on this site, I get help and encouragement that inspires, I see where you are going though my thoughts were
the osprey is a sea eagle (water is their menu) and if I were a fish I would be in danger, I love this review and comments, so much for me to consume, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
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oh. water is the menu. okay.
You are so kind in your comments! Bless your heart. Thank you for that.
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You are so helpful in yours much to think about and learn, many thanks
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most welcome!
Comment from country ranch writer
This is the third time I have done this it didn't register this is February 2/1/2023.
This is a great set and presentation for this short poem.
I love Eagles they mate for life and are very devoted parents.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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This is the third time I have done this it didn't register this is February 2/1/2023.
This is a great set and presentation for this short poem.
I love Eagles they mate for life and are very devoted parents.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Hello my freind, 2-1-2023, in my neck of the woods it is 2-2-2023, as we put our day before the month, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
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It is February first here at least till midnight.
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February second here-until midnight
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Comment from jacquelyn popp
Great poem, and I especilly liked the art work with it. It gave more imagery, and meaning to your poem. Well done. I especially thought that your words flowed together well. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Great poem, and I especilly liked the art work with it. It gave more imagery, and meaning to your poem. Well done. I especially thought that your words flowed together well. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Thank you so very much, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your contest entry read well, Kahpot. The picture was great.
Your words painted a picture for readers. The satori was a great
choice. Your second line has only 6 syllables and needs seven,
though the rules state 'normally' seventeen syllables.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Your contest entry read well, Kahpot. The picture was great.
Your words painted a picture for readers. The satori was a great
choice. Your second line has only 6 syllables and needs seven,
though the rules state 'normally' seventeen syllables.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
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Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Thank you Jan, I still get confused between contest and form rules, as always very much appreciate****kahpot
Comment from Dr. Nad
You have chosen a beautiful pic to describe a way of life that God has ordained for one of His majestic creation. Loved your description of his perusing the menu.
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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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You have chosen a beautiful pic to describe a way of life that God has ordained for one of His majestic creation. Loved your description of his perusing the menu.
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Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
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You are most welcome.
