A Fear of the Pitch
Batting is not always easy28 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. Having raised boys, been there, done that. LOL I enjoyed reading, and good luck with the contest.
I can do this.With this pitch I won't be scared anymore! (a space is needed after the period)
I too can be a baseball player. (comma is needed after 'I', some would say a comma is also needed after 'too', it's up to you)
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. Having raised boys, been there, done that. LOL I enjoyed reading, and good luck with the contest.
I can do this.With this pitch I won't be scared anymore! (a space is needed after the period)
I too can be a baseball player. (comma is needed after 'I', some would say a comma is also needed after 'too', it's up to you)
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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Thank you for those corrections. I appreciate it and appreciate your reading my posts.
John
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I have tried this game and the bat isn't big enough to hit the ball, ha ha ha, I missed more times than I hit! I think I was more scared of the ball hurtling toward me, than the bat. I loved the photo as this little guy seems to know what he is doing. It must have been great fun coaching these little kiddies, I enjoyed a snippet of your sport here, we call it rounders, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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I have tried this game and the bat isn't big enough to hit the ball, ha ha ha, I missed more times than I hit! I think I was more scared of the ball hurtling toward me, than the bat. I loved the photo as this little guy seems to know what he is doing. It must have been great fun coaching these little kiddies, I enjoyed a snippet of your sport here, we call it rounders, love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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Thank you, Dolly, for reading my post and sharing some memories.
The bat wasn?t big enough? that?s funny.
Cheers. John
Comment from jacquelyn popp
This was a great flash story. I remember playing baseball as a child, and I loved it. This brought back some good memories for me. I really enjoyed reading your story. It was cute and enjoyable. Well done. This was fun for me to read, because it did bring back those memories. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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This was a great flash story. I remember playing baseball as a child, and I loved it. This brought back some good memories for me. I really enjoyed reading your story. It was cute and enjoyable. Well done. This was fun for me to read, because it did bring back those memories. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Thank you so much for reading. I?m glad it conjured up some good memories.
Always appreciated.
John
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a good story that kids would like if it went on to tell how the fear was conquered. Kid's want their problems solved. One error: batter(')s box. If you want to write for children Highlights Magazine has lots of interesting info for writers. Even have camps to teach how to improve your writing. Then you could try it out here to see how it works out.
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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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This is a good story that kids would like if it went on to tell how the fear was conquered. Kid's want their problems solved. One error: batter(')s box. If you want to write for children Highlights Magazine has lots of interesting info for writers. Even have camps to teach how to improve your writing. Then you could try it out here to see how it works out.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Interesting review. Thank you. I appreciate your time and feedback,
John
Comment from TDLRasmar
Nice flash story. I used to love playing baseball. If you want to be a good hitter, you can have no fear of the ball. As a batter you have to believe that you can either get out of the way or attack the ball and deflect it in a different direction. You piece brings back memories.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Nice flash story. I used to love playing baseball. If you want to be a good hitter, you can have no fear of the ball. As a batter you have to believe that you can either get out of the way or attack the ball and deflect it in a different direction. You piece brings back memories.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Thank you for reading and commenting. I appreciate the feedback.
John
Comment from jessizero
I remember those days! I wasn't a sports fan, and I was always picked last in physical education. I remember being afraid of the ball. Thanks for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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I remember those days! I wasn't a sports fan, and I was always picked last in physical education. I remember being afraid of the ball. Thanks for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Thank you, Jessi, for reading ad sharing with me. I appreciate your time.
John
Comment from eliz100
I enjoyed reading your short piece. I think you did a good job presenting the young boy's fears. I have never played baseball or softball, Being in the batters' box, is a solitary moment and all eyes are on you. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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I enjoyed reading your short piece. I think you did a good job presenting the young boy's fears. I have never played baseball or softball, Being in the batters' box, is a solitary moment and all eyes are on you. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much. Elizabeth. I appreciate your words of encouragement.
John
Comment from Annmuma
This is such a cute picture and wonder post to go with it. My husband coached a team of 8 to 9 year olds and it was a wonder every day. The kids were and more than one of them did exactly as your character - watched the ball go by. Great post. Good luck in the contest. ann
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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This is such a cute picture and wonder post to go with it. My husband coached a team of 8 to 9 year olds and it was a wonder every day. The kids were and more than one of them did exactly as your character - watched the ball go by. Great post. Good luck in the contest. ann
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Thank you, Ann. I appreciate you sharing with me.
John
Comment from Jim Wile
Fun story, John. Brings back memories of my time in little league. The only time I was afraid to bat was when I was 8-years-old, and it was my third time up against the same pitcher who hit me in the chest my first two times up. I don't know if this kid had it out for me, or he was just wild, but I asked the coach if someone could pinch hit for me.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Fun story, John. Brings back memories of my time in little league. The only time I was afraid to bat was when I was 8-years-old, and it was my third time up against the same pitcher who hit me in the chest my first two times up. I don't know if this kid had it out for me, or he was just wild, but I asked the coach if someone could pinch hit for me.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Marvelous story, Jim. At that age, I couldn?t blame you for wanting a pinch hitter.
Thanks for reading. John
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image for your story and notes are appreciated.
-You wrote a good story as the boy things about batting,
and that he won't be scared of the pitch.
-You capture his inner feelings well.
-He's well prepared and reminds himself of that.
-He digs his foot in and is ready for the pitch.
-A good ending; it just isn't as easy as it would appear.
-One small thing:
Staring at the pitcher I swallow [comma after pitcher]
-A good entry; good luck!
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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-Nice image for your story and notes are appreciated.
-You wrote a good story as the boy things about batting,
and that he won't be scared of the pitch.
-You capture his inner feelings well.
-He's well prepared and reminds himself of that.
-He digs his foot in and is ready for the pitch.
-A good ending; it just isn't as easy as it would appear.
-One small thing:
Staring at the pitcher I swallow [comma after pitcher]
-A good entry; good luck!
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Than you, Pam, for reading my flash story and commenting on it. Also, thanks for the comma correction! I went and made the change.
Cheers. John
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You are very welcome, John. I enjoyed your story.
