Sight Unseen
Perception by another sense.8 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
A beautiful and thoughtful poem, expressing tenderness and love from each in their own way. Being blind does not prevent her from knowing his love, nor does it prevent him from seeing her beauty within. Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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A beautiful and thoughtful poem, expressing tenderness and love from each in their own way. Being blind does not prevent her from knowing his love, nor does it prevent him from seeing her beauty within. Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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Thank you for this time and gracious comments. To see with understanding is a gift.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is a very perceptive poem. Some people only see with what we call an eye. Other, more astute, ones use other senses in their perception of the world, or gifts we don't even dare call a sense (inner eye, intuition etc). kay
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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This is a very perceptive poem. Some people only see with what we call an eye. Other, more astute, ones use other senses in their perception of the world, or gifts we don't even dare call a sense (inner eye, intuition etc). kay
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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There are those who perceive their universe in ways incomprehensible to some others. To really see is a gift too often unattended. Thank you for your interest and insight. Your gracious affirmation is appreciated.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Our other senses are indeed heightened when one of them is removed but in this case each individual sees different things in another person, this is the joy of diversity. I enjoyed your gentle delicate words here, touch is one of those senses that we miss when we are alone, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Our other senses are indeed heightened when one of them is removed but in this case each individual sees different things in another person, this is the joy of diversity. I enjoyed your gentle delicate words here, touch is one of those senses that we miss when we are alone, love Dolly x
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Lady Dolly'sPoems: Thanks for stopping by. Your comments and stellar affirmation are deeply appreciated.
Comment from Mintybee
This poem works well for the Unseen Beauty topic. It seems to be from the perspective of a blind person, who is perceptive to the beautiful things about the person they love. The longing is real, the images are vivid, and it was touching.
Mintybee
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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This poem works well for the Unseen Beauty topic. It seems to be from the perspective of a blind person, who is perceptive to the beautiful things about the person they love. The longing is real, the images are vivid, and it was touching.
Mintybee
Comment Written 31-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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LadyMintybee: The premise is precisely such! Thank you for your gracious comments and stellar affirmation.
Comment from prettybluebirds
Your poem is creative and should do well in the contest. The words have a lovely flow that makes the poem a delight to read. I wish you worlds of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Your poem is creative and should do well in the contest. The words have a lovely flow that makes the poem a delight to read. I wish you worlds of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Lady prettybluebirds: Yes, they are indeed. Thank you for your gracious comments and stellar affirmation.
Comment from Ida T. Johnson
This is lovely! Your title is so very appropriate for your message. I like that you have no image, but a "blank" background; white type on black would also have worked. Very effective to present this as a conversation, which evokes more intense feelings. I "see" a vision-impaired mother with her sighted female child. My favorite lines: "Am I so brilliant you see me so clearly". Lately, I've been wondered why most of the poems I've read have very little punctuation; yours has none: was this intentional?
This is NOT a criticism, just wondering since I'm a novice poet trying to find my way. Beautifully written, good luck!
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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This is lovely! Your title is so very appropriate for your message. I like that you have no image, but a "blank" background; white type on black would also have worked. Very effective to present this as a conversation, which evokes more intense feelings. I "see" a vision-impaired mother with her sighted female child. My favorite lines: "Am I so brilliant you see me so clearly". Lately, I've been wondered why most of the poems I've read have very little punctuation; yours has none: was this intentional?
This is NOT a criticism, just wondering since I'm a novice poet trying to find my way. Beautifully written, good luck!
Comment Written 31-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Lady Ida T. Johnson: I am NOT a poet by any measure. However, here, I eschewed punctuation as the topic and the words I chose made it more of a flash fiction post with the lack of rhyme and the unusual spacing of the words in incomplete sentences. Poetry is flexible in form and format, so I may well be pushing a limit here. Thank you for your kind words and attention to this flight of fantasy.
Comment from jacquelyn popp
You did a great job with this poem. I enjoyed reading it. The words of your poem flowed together well. I thought the last stanza was written nicely. The part that where you said, you have that wonderful touch. This was a wonderful poem that you wrote. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023
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You did a great job with this poem. I enjoyed reading it. The words of your poem flowed together well. I thought the last stanza was written nicely. The part that where you said, you have that wonderful touch. This was a wonderful poem that you wrote. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023
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I appreciate your time to read and comment on this bit of fantasy. Your kind words and stellar affirmation are deeply appreciated.
Comment from kahpot
This is very well said and written, even if people are not blind, they need to really see a person for a relationship to work, an excellent entry for this prompt, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023
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This is very well said and written, even if people are not blind, they need to really see a person for a relationship to work, an excellent entry for this prompt, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 31-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023
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I appreciate your wish to read and comment on this bit of fantasy, and thank you so much for your effort.
