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Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Mia,
I like your poem on vengeance and hurt; I have felt this way before.
I do think it's a great poem, but I found that empathy, forgiveness and compassion work best.
Great rhymes.
Good luck in the contest.
Blessings,
Cindy
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023
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Mia,
I like your poem on vengeance and hurt; I have felt this way before.
I do think it's a great poem, but I found that empathy, forgiveness and compassion work best.
Great rhymes.
Good luck in the contest.
Blessings,
Cindy
Comment Written 31-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023
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Thank you so much for the stars. I am honored.
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You?re welcome
Comment from Liz O'Neill
I've learned something about myself. My favorite genre is revenge movies. But I do not think of revenge for any of my abusers. I realize they were acting out what they needed to for me or them or both of us in this lifetime. But I vicariously root for the victim getting revenge.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023
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I've learned something about myself. My favorite genre is revenge movies. But I do not think of revenge for any of my abusers. I realize they were acting out what they needed to for me or them or both of us in this lifetime. But I vicariously root for the victim getting revenge.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023
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Me too. I love to see the victim get them some.
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LOL Moohaha
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
There is something a bit threatening and scary in this right and those who have vengeance in their hearts often end up unhappy.
One suggestion for this line:
(Alone) and cold, I became hostile
Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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There is something a bit threatening and scary in this right and those who have vengeance in their hearts often end up unhappy.
One suggestion for this line:
(Alone) and cold, I became hostile
Love Dolly x
Comment Written 24-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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That is very true. Vengeance can take you to dark unhappy places.
Comment from royowen
You've certainly put this in a different style rhyming poetry, but that's OK, it didn't specitfy, so I think it's fine, thematically good. A really interesting format, well don, good luck, blessings Roy
Typo (along) and cold. Alone? 2: one by one(,) single(,) file.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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You've certainly put this in a different style rhyming poetry, but that's OK, it didn't specitfy, so I think it's fine, thematically good. A really interesting format, well don, good luck, blessings Roy
Typo (along) and cold. Alone? 2: one by one(,) single(,) file.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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Glad you enjoyed it. thank you for pointing out the errors.
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Most welcome
Comment from susand3022
You're always such fun to read... lolol I did have revenge one time... it was so sweet! (evil laugh inserted here)
First word, second stanza... Along and cold? or Alone and cold...?
This was fun... look out hubby! lol
Susan :)
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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You're always such fun to read... lolol I did have revenge one time... it was so sweet! (evil laugh inserted here)
First word, second stanza... Along and cold? or Alone and cold...?
This was fun... look out hubby! lol
Susan :)
Comment Written 24-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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My fingers have a mind of their own lol and my brain inserts what I know it should be. This is why other eyes agree so needed. Thanks. And just so you know we had a wee bit of snow over the night.
Comment from Rachel Jamerson1
I can't say I relate to this poem, however it very plainly voices a desire for vengeance. I hope it is fictional for I would hate to know someone actually experienced this. Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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I can't say I relate to this poem, however it very plainly voices a desire for vengeance. I hope it is fictional for I would hate to know someone actually experienced this. Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 24-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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Thank you for taking the time to review.
Comment from kahpot
Vengeance can be good if done correctly, "along and cold..." should this be (alone and cold...)? I liked the intent and flow of your poem, an excellent read****kahpot
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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Vengeance can be good if done correctly, "along and cold..." should this be (alone and cold...)? I liked the intent and flow of your poem, an excellent read****kahpot
Comment Written 24-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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Thank you for pointing out the error.
Comment from Kaiku
I will make a couple suggestions.
Rhyming scheme makes great sense and done well. I would eliminate in the 3rd stanza, first line, the words `for me` and let the flow remain a little more smooth by just saying, `Death will be decided at my trial`
Last stanza first line I would suggest `single-file`
And possibly the `a` is not needed in the line ending with `bad aftertaste`
Just a couple of thoughts.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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I will make a couple suggestions.
Rhyming scheme makes great sense and done well. I would eliminate in the 3rd stanza, first line, the words `for me` and let the flow remain a little more smooth by just saying, `Death will be decided at my trial`
Last stanza first line I would suggest `single-file`
And possibly the `a` is not needed in the line ending with `bad aftertaste`
Just a couple of thoughts.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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I like some of your suggestions. Thank you so much for your input.
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you bet
