Comment from Jay Squires

Excellent

Well, it appears Abby is leading a Cinderella life, despite the injustices that were done to her, causing her to lose her job. She got to be home with her growing family and once they were in school and she wanted to test her wings again in business, who but her former mentor, Leroy, would be there to get her another management position. It seemed like she got the best of both worlds: family and career. And once her failing self-confidence is bolstered again, she will be ready to soar. Something's got to come up soon that will test her and/or E.J. souls and inject conflict into their lives.

At least that's one reader's opinion. This is well-crafted, as usual, Jim.

Jay

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023

Quite right, Jay, as usual. And it will involve golf too.

reply by Jay Squires on 25-Jan-2023

Jim, I need to say that what I wrote above was not really criticism. It was just a subtle feeling I had.

reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023

I understood that. Your subtle feelings are right on the money.

Comment from Carol Hillebrenner

Excellent

This chapter sees life working out for Abby with her old boss and for E.J. since he's found someone to care for. Something needs to happen to grab the readers' attention before the chapter ends.

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2023

Comment from royowen

Excellent

I'm a sucker for stories with good outcomes and potentially happy endings, I would rather read the fairy tale princess and endings, there is enough trauma and bad news out there, beautifully written. Blessings Roy

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2023

I'm with you, Roy. I much preferred the movie version of "The Natural" over the book of the same name by Bernard Malamud. It's an American book about a baseball player, so you may not be aware of it, but the film version had a happy ending, while the book had a depressing ending. The movie was much better than the book, which is usually not the case.

reply by royowen on 24-Jan-2023

Yep, that?s the way I look at it,

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

I can't wait to see how Abby does going back to work. I do understand. I stayed home with my children until they got into full day school. Only I went back to teaching, totally different than going back into a man's world. You have me hooked.

The next morning, I called Leroy back and accepted the position. (The following morning)

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2023

Barbara, this remark (I can't wait to see how Abby does going back to work) caused me to go back and add a chapter to the story, which will come out tomorrow. I think it will be a better story for it. Thank you!

Comment from Kaiku

Excellent

Again, a smooth running tale that reads well and maintains the flow of its characters. I must go back a chapter or two as I believe some time has passed that I need to get caught up on. Has the invention been discussed yet?

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2023

Not yet, but very soon. Coming in about 3 more days.

Thanks for the good review!

Comment from jmdg1954

Excellent

Taking on management responsibilities can be intimidating to some. There is no sure fire way of being a manager, so much depends on personality.

Abby will have to navigate through her emotions and on the actual job performance.

Good post. I'm curious to see what's in store.

Keep up the good work.
John

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2023

You are certainly right. My first experience with management did not go particularly well, but I eventually learned.

Thanks for the good review, John.

Comment from Tom Horonzy

Excellent

You have a way of leaving the reader with anticipation for turning the next page. Well done, once again, friend. Tom H ...............................................................

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2023

Thanks, Tom. You'll find out how Abby does two chapters from now.

Tomorrow's chapter will reintroduce us to a character from way back at the beginning of the story.