Comment from amahra

Excellent

I hope I'm right, but it seems this beginning chapter could be an insight into your mother's mindset toward life. Her characteristics and the way you were raised could be the results of her rough early life. Anyway, good beginning chapter.

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023

Thanks Amahra. I noted you have corrected perception of where I'm going. I appreciate you delving into this. The next chapter will the hardest one to write, but I want to get past it, because the story turns into a hopeful one from so much sadness.

Comment from lancellot

Excellent

Not criticizing you. But I'm not sure I would call this non-fiction. There are things you or your sister couldn't possibly know for sure. At best, I would label this a memoir, to allow for some artistic license.

notes:

When Vicky Blair turned twenty

- who is Vicky Blair? Too long to introduce her proper name.

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023

Very good point, I need to change. And thanks that you were the one to see trap I made for myself over sticking with memoir and its meaning. I will likely need to start calling a narrative non-fiction, although parts or a memoir. You have such a skill set to pick up on those important nuances.

Comment from prettybluebirds

Excellent

Would be (a) lie. You left out the conjunction in that sentence. Other than that, your story is interesting and informative. I enjoyed reading it very much. I look forward to more of the story.

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 Comment Written 20-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023

Thanks so much. I'm not my own best editor.