Dog Days of Summer
A hard life.10 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This story, Dog Days of Summer, had me going until the last sentence. I never ever made the connection between the flat world and the story's title.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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This story, Dog Days of Summer, had me going until the last sentence. I never ever made the connection between the flat world and the story's title.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Dogs back is flat Thanks for the review!
Comment from lyenochka
This was so cleverly done!! I got the clues but I wasn't quite sure if the Snout was a human, pig, or whatever but it was clearly a dog with the barking and the tail. Hope this wins!
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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This was so cleverly done!! I got the clues but I wasn't quite sure if the Snout was a human, pig, or whatever but it was clearly a dog with the barking and the tail. Hope this wins!
Comment Written 04-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Got spanked, but it was a fun write up!
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Yvonne would have loved to share the prize with you. As there were only two entries - wish both of you could have won!
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good entry to the contest Flat. The text is a great size. That is important for long entries. It makes the reading easier. The plot is well developed and not rushed. The two characters are also well-developed and interesting. I didn't know they were fleas until I read the AN. This would be a great story for kids. It has quirky names and locations. The visual is perfect for the story and a kid's story book. Good luck in the contest. It was a good read.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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This is a good entry to the contest Flat. The text is a great size. That is important for long entries. It makes the reading easier. The plot is well developed and not rushed. The two characters are also well-developed and interesting. I didn't know they were fleas until I read the AN. This would be a great story for kids. It has quirky names and locations. The visual is perfect for the story and a kid's story book. Good luck in the contest. It was a good read.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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Thank you. I think I was getting slammed in the contest, but the joy was in the writing. Hope all is going well for you!
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Regardless, your entry is great. You are welcome.
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It was fun!
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That for sure is important too.
Comment from Loren .
This was a delightful read. Not that I would ever care for fleas, these two personalities had me hooked. I especially liked Nattie, annoying at times, but fun to banter with. Loren
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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This was a delightful read. Not that I would ever care for fleas, these two personalities had me hooked. I especially liked Nattie, annoying at times, but fun to banter with. Loren
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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Thank you for the great review, Loren! Yes, I pictured them as the Bunkers.
Comment from MissMerri
I thought this was very clever and well written. I enjoyed the vocabulary used and the imaginative and fun story. It made me smile. I think this will do well in the contest. Good luck.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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I thought this was very clever and well written. I enjoyed the vocabulary used and the imaginative and fun story. It made me smile. I think this will do well in the contest. Good luck.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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Thank you! Its doing great. In second place...but there is only two entries...so it's also in last place! Ha! Too much fun . . .
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This was an extremely entertaining story, with many twists and turns. It appears that the world is full of many dangers for a flea, not all linked to the fact that the world is flat. kay
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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This was an extremely entertaining story, with many twists and turns. It appears that the world is full of many dangers for a flea, not all linked to the fact that the world is flat. kay
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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Ha! It was a fun one.
Comment from Ricky1024
"Fod Days of Summer"was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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Good luck with your contest entry.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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"Fod Days of Summer"was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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Good luck with your contest entry.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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Its going down in flames, but the joy was in the writing! Hope you ar doing well my firend and holding up strong!
Comment from Barbara Peabody Pouliot
Wow, you are an amazing writer. No I did not see it coming. Have you thought about writing children's books. Thank you for sharing your talent and imagination.
Good Luck. Write on
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2023
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Wow, you are an amazing writer. No I did not see it coming. Have you thought about writing children's books. Thank you for sharing your talent and imagination.
Good Luck. Write on
Comment Written 23-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2023
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Well, thank you, my dear. This was another fun write!
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YW
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YW
Comment from prettybluebirds
Okay, I get all of this except the trees. What are the trees supposed to represent? It is a clever and well-written piece with a terrific ending. I wish you the best in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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Okay, I get all of this except the trees. What are the trees supposed to represent? It is a clever and well-written piece with a terrific ending. I wish you the best in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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The dog hair. I was thinking to their tiny bodies they would be like trees. No? Thanks for the review, my friend.
Comment from papa55mike
I guess fleas have to run for their lives, too, from an erupting volcano. An interesting storyline from a tiny POV. Please check your paragraph break at this line: It had a tendency to
shake and move. What a wonderfully written piece.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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I guess fleas have to run for their lives, too, from an erupting volcano. An interesting storyline from a tiny POV. Please check your paragraph break at this line: It had a tendency to
shake and move. What a wonderfully written piece.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 17-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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Thanks for the heads up on the paragraph break. I appreciate you and your review!
