shadows of the moon
Lune-like 2-4-2 (moonlight)7 total reviews
Comment from tempeste
Ciao Marco,
I love the dark and light contrast and I do like the poem ...but...
When we are out in the dark, shadows have often a frightening/ threatening effect on us, so I think had you chosen a sinister adjective the reader would have had a stronger reaction when reading your poem
...earthly seems sedate and calm to me.
eg; eerie, fearful, haunting, scary creepy, spooky
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2023
Ciao Marco,
I love the dark and light contrast and I do like the poem ...but...
When we are out in the dark, shadows have often a frightening/ threatening effect on us, so I think had you chosen a sinister adjective the reader would have had a stronger reaction when reading your poem
...earthly seems sedate and calm to me.
eg; eerie, fearful, haunting, scary creepy, spooky
Comment Written 14-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2023
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Thanks for your kind comments. I chose the less sinister night vision for this poem. So maybe a stronger reaction to my post would have been different had I chosen your path.
Mark
Comment from Laurie Holding
You have my vote on this one! Simple, full-sentence structure (which is rare in this format!) and incredible accompanying artwork all add up to a winner in my book. Great work, and I wish you luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2023
You have my vote on this one! Simple, full-sentence structure (which is rare in this format!) and incredible accompanying artwork all add up to a winner in my book. Great work, and I wish you luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2023
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Thanks Laurie for your vote of confidence and support for this short one. Artwork is most typically from FanArt. Cleo?s illustrations often accompany my posts.
Comment from Cherish Adams
I love the light from the full moon. Thank you for creating this 2 - 4 - 2 and sharing it with us. It flows well and meets the syllable and line requirements. Good job. Good luck.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2023
I love the light from the full moon. Thank you for creating this 2 - 4 - 2 and sharing it with us. It flows well and meets the syllable and line requirements. Good job. Good luck.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2023
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Thank you Cherish for your kind words. I have often used FanArtist Cleo illustrations to pair with my poems.
Comment from Mary Shifman
I really like this lovely poem and the artwork you've chosen is perfect to go with it. I love moonlit nights and bare trees. There's something so romantic (in the poetic sense) about it. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2023
I really like this lovely poem and the artwork you've chosen is perfect to go with it. I love moonlit nights and bare trees. There's something so romantic (in the poetic sense) about it. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2023
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Mary,
Thanks for your review for my entry. I am pleased that my imagery worked for you.
I take no credit for the accompanying artwork but many times I have used FanArtist Cleo to pair with my poems. I try always to use FanArt for my illustrations.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Frank Malley
It's difficult to create something striking or original with 8 syllables. "Moonlight/Creates earthly/ shadows" does what is asked for, but it seems commonplace. Like 'Erase/what you've written/ today' - it fits the specs, it opens a door to considerations, but it still seems a 'so-what' suggestion. 'Moonlight/blue, black, gray, white/ cold, night' I like better, but there are better lines possible. What is startling about moonlight? What is beautiful? What is frightening? Can such things be expresses in 8 syllables? Can the form use punctuation? Some people love rules more than meaning. Not me.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
It's difficult to create something striking or original with 8 syllables. "Moonlight/Creates earthly/ shadows" does what is asked for, but it seems commonplace. Like 'Erase/what you've written/ today' - it fits the specs, it opens a door to considerations, but it still seems a 'so-what' suggestion. 'Moonlight/blue, black, gray, white/ cold, night' I like better, but there are better lines possible. What is startling about moonlight? What is beautiful? What is frightening? Can such things be expresses in 8 syllables? Can the form use punctuation? Some people love rules more than meaning. Not me.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
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Thanks for that response Frank. Your insight is most interesting.
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All the best. Frank
Comment from Mario PIERRE
Poem about nature and creation re always beautiful and emanates a sense of peace and freshness. Your poem falls in that category.
Nicely written!!
Good luck!!
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
Poem about nature and creation re always beautiful and emanates a sense of peace and freshness. Your poem falls in that category.
Nicely written!!
Good luck!!
Comment Written 10-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
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Thank you for those kind remarks for this contest entry.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Those moonlight eerie shadows of the night can bewitch and also be romantic, I enjoyed your few words creating shadows in the dark here, much fun, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
Those moonlight eerie shadows of the night can bewitch and also be romantic, I enjoyed your few words creating shadows in the dark here, much fun, love Dolly x
Comment Written 10-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
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I like your idea of bewitching and the romanticism. Run with the same in your longer poems!