Heart Crafted Poems - 2023
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Early Eagle"Musing of an old man
25 total reviews
Comment from Karyn2
I think this style of poetry is incredibly clever and you created something so wonderful. The rhymes were so strong and each line descriptive and capturing an element of these powerful birds of prey. The last line in the first stanza tripped me up momentarily "yearning to sight her sought find". After a few rereads it made complete sense. I'm probably not use to seeing "sight and sought" used so near each other. I wondered if instead of "sight" maybe "spot" or "glimpse" might be less confusing or maybe it's clever to allow people pause and ponder! Just and idea.
Clever writing.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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I think this style of poetry is incredibly clever and you created something so wonderful. The rhymes were so strong and each line descriptive and capturing an element of these powerful birds of prey. The last line in the first stanza tripped me up momentarily "yearning to sight her sought find". After a few rereads it made complete sense. I'm probably not use to seeing "sight and sought" used so near each other. I wondered if instead of "sight" maybe "spot" or "glimpse" might be less confusing or maybe it's clever to allow people pause and ponder! Just and idea.
Clever writing.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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Karyn, great response! Yes spot of glimpse are strong words, but uniqueness of the eagle is the strength of there visual acuity - so my use of sight is a secret weapon of there strength to hunt the find from so far up in the sky ?Thanks for your great suggestions.
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are engaging, descriptive and creative. For me, nature
play such an important role in writing poetry. I especially liked the last
line of this poem. As it states, that hunting is the Eagle's natural right!
The artwork is awesome! Happy New Year!.....Maria
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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The author's words are engaging, descriptive and creative. For me, nature
play such an important role in writing poetry. I especially liked the last
line of this poem. As it states, that hunting is the Eagle's natural right!
The artwork is awesome! Happy New Year!.....Maria
Comment Written 08-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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Maria, thank you for your wonderful validation.
Comment from GWHARGIS
Every time I have attempted an acrostic, it has sounded like a laundry list. Yours was a picturesque poem. The eagle was alive in your work. You presented this magnificent bird just as it should have been. Gretchen
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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Every time I have attempted an acrostic, it has sounded like a laundry list. Yours was a picturesque poem. The eagle was alive in your work. You presented this magnificent bird just as it should have been. Gretchen
Comment Written 08-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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Gretchen, thank you for your wonderful validation of my poem.
Comment from royowen
A complex form, brought together beautifully my friend Jim. Sweetly written with a complex rhyme scheme, and an acrostic to finish a delightful post all round, I was thinking of the two under par, when you mentioned eagle, well done great post, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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A complex form, brought together beautifully my friend Jim. Sweetly written with a complex rhyme scheme, and an acrostic to finish a delightful post all round, I was thinking of the two under par, when you mentioned eagle, well done great post, blessings Roy
Comment Written 08-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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Boy would I love that type of eagle! Thanks Roy!
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Yep, it would be good
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
The picture of the regal eagle was awesome, JLR. Your words
were descriptive and true to form. You told a great story of
nature in action. The rhymes were great, too, some choices
were well thought out rather than using just a mediocre rhyme.
I could see everything as I read.
Thanks for participating, Jan
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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The picture of the regal eagle was awesome, JLR. Your words
were descriptive and true to form. You told a great story of
nature in action. The rhymes were great, too, some choices
were well thought out rather than using just a mediocre rhyme.
I could see everything as I read.
Thanks for participating, Jan
Comment Written 08-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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Thank you, Jan have a splendid week!
Comment from mermaids
You have a smooth poetic form that gives the reader a feel for the eagle. "Little force is used in her flights" is a marvelous line that shows the natural ability of the eagle and I like how this eagle is female. Your acrostic form adds to the strength of your words.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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You have a smooth poetic form that gives the reader a feel for the eagle. "Little force is used in her flights" is a marvelous line that shows the natural ability of the eagle and I like how this eagle is female. Your acrostic form adds to the strength of your words.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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Thank you mermaids!
Comment from Kaiku
Always appreciate the creative prose of FS writers. There are so many formats/styles to express creative talent. I tend to believe I engage in the review process to learn these methods. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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Always appreciate the creative prose of FS writers. There are so many formats/styles to express creative talent. I tend to believe I engage in the review process to learn these methods. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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kaiku, thank you so much!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Eagles are such positive Majesty birds, full of energy and loyalty to their partners and the parent the young together. Unfortunately hares need to be aware of their routine and avoid capture. I enjoyed your interesting acrostic, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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Eagles are such positive Majesty birds, full of energy and loyalty to their partners and the parent the young together. Unfortunately hares need to be aware of their routine and avoid capture. I enjoyed your interesting acrostic, love Dolly x
Comment Written 08-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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My thanks, Dolly!
Comment from amahra
I liked the poem, but when I saw the eagle with its head down, it made it seem the bird was sad because of how horribly the country is being run. Great job!
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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I liked the poem, but when I saw the eagle with its head down, it made it seem the bird was sad because of how horribly the country is being run. Great job!
Comment Written 08-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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Amahra, thank you for your words.
Comment from Jasmine Girl
This a fine entry to the Potlatch club challenge. It flows smoothly and the rhyming sounds natural. I like Acrostic poems and with a little more challenge is even better.
Well done and I will post one. (rhyming :)
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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This a fine entry to the Potlatch club challenge. It flows smoothly and the rhyming sounds natural. I like Acrostic poems and with a little more challenge is even better.
Well done and I will post one. (rhyming :)
Comment Written 08-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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Thanks looking forward to reading yours.
