Folded Flag
a six word poem24 total reviews
Comment from RodG
Melissa, you capture the essence of this sad moment when a dead soldier's wife is presented with a flag by an officer. May I suggest replacing "New" with "Folded"? That one word could convey more meaning to the reader if the poem stood alone without the photo. Rod
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2023
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Melissa, you capture the essence of this sad moment when a dead soldier's wife is presented with a flag by an officer. May I suggest replacing "New" with "Folded"? That one word could convey more meaning to the reader if the poem stood alone without the photo. Rod
Comment Written 05-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2023
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Great idea Rod. I will edit right now!!
M
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I was so eager to go and edit it that I forgot to say thank you... so sorry, your suggestion was perfect.. thanks again!!
Melissa
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You are very welcome.
Comment from BermyBye50
Sugarray77,
This is a solemn yet poignant entry in the 6 word Poetry contest. You've captured in these six words the duplicity of deep pain as expressed on the wife's face and the real tragedy represented in the receipt of a new flag to the widow of a loved one who died in service to his country.
All the best in the contest,
Eugene
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2023
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Sugarray77,
This is a solemn yet poignant entry in the 6 word Poetry contest. You've captured in these six words the duplicity of deep pain as expressed on the wife's face and the real tragedy represented in the receipt of a new flag to the widow of a loved one who died in service to his country.
All the best in the contest,
Eugene
Comment Written 05-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2023
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Thank you very much,Eugene!!
Melissa
Comment from susand3022
Nobody wants that flag, Melissa. I do need a new flag. Mine looks kind of like the one that went through the Civil War, it's all tattered at the edges, all torn from the winds.
Time for a new flag... but not one of those.
Very sad, I can't help but feel for this woman in the picture.
Susan :)
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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2023
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Nobody wants that flag, Melissa. I do need a new flag. Mine looks kind of like the one that went through the Civil War, it's all tattered at the edges, all torn from the winds.
Time for a new flag... but not one of those.
Very sad, I can't help but feel for this woman in the picture.
Susan :)
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Comment Written 05-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2023
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Thank you Susan. Yes, it's very sad... maybe too sad for posting on FS, but it resonated with me.
Melissa
Comment from Eternal Muse
That's a great poem. Your six words spell volumes - the grief and agony of all war widows and the pain of loss.
Excellent imagery and visuals and terrific artistic presentation.
Good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2023
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That's a great poem. Your six words spell volumes - the grief and agony of all war widows and the pain of loss.
Excellent imagery and visuals and terrific artistic presentation.
Good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 05-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2023
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Thank you so much. Yes, it's very sad... maybe too sad for posting on FS, but it resonated with me.
Melissa
