Falling Apart
A little sci-fi, maybe3 total reviews
Comment from poetwatch
Hey, Lulube, I used to know that feeling, sometimes when I awake nothing was right, for everything was off. I tried to balance myself and it wouldn't work. Then, I would light one up and my head would be on straight. :) Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2023
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Hey, Lulube, I used to know that feeling, sometimes when I awake nothing was right, for everything was off. I tried to balance myself and it wouldn't work. Then, I would light one up and my head would be on straight. :) Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2023
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lol you do what you have to do. I'm glad you got it the last person said it made no sense. But it does and doesn't. lol
lulube
Comment from Ricky1024
This was well written rich in theme and Imagery.
It also read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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I ran into that kind of day yesterday with my friend D.D.
Yes, at the Hard Rock Hotel Casino in Atlantic City, NJ.
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She wanted to get some supplies for the room and tea bags for me.
But the Spanish cleaning lady whom didn't seem to understand English.
Started and then kept throwing the stuff in her face!
Because she kept on going back out and getting in her face!
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Yes, to get more things.
And, when it started to get really bad.
I had to surprise in and stand at the door way in my underwear and argue!
And, now with her friend whom leans but spoke oerfect English.
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She's trying to explain to me the way house cleaning works.
(Which I already knew(
By disrespecting me too!
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It escalated to the point that D.D. had to go to the hospital and get examined!
Four times assaulted!
And, now she's on medication for her face is swollen in several places.
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And now we're looking at a lawsuit.
They threw us a lousy $100 on our room account.
So, we could just use our room number and order food but that's not going to do
More later.
Doctor Ricky1024
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2023
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This was well written rich in theme and Imagery.
It also read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
...
I ran into that kind of day yesterday with my friend D.D.
Yes, at the Hard Rock Hotel Casino in Atlantic City, NJ.
...
She wanted to get some supplies for the room and tea bags for me.
But the Spanish cleaning lady whom didn't seem to understand English.
Started and then kept throwing the stuff in her face!
Because she kept on going back out and getting in her face!
...
Yes, to get more things.
And, when it started to get really bad.
I had to surprise in and stand at the door way in my underwear and argue!
And, now with her friend whom leans but spoke oerfect English.
...
She's trying to explain to me the way house cleaning works.
(Which I already knew(
By disrespecting me too!
...
It escalated to the point that D.D. had to go to the hospital and get examined!
Four times assaulted!
And, now she's on medication for her face is swollen in several places.
...
And now we're looking at a lawsuit.
They threw us a lousy $100 on our room account.
So, we could just use our room number and order food but that's not going to do
More later.
Doctor Ricky1024
Comment Written 05-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2023
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OMG welcome 2023. Tread gently. Isn't there medical expenses? I'd go to Head of hotel and show them the charges and add another 500 to 1000 for pain and suffering, plus the room charges to be settled right then and there or see them in court and the price goes to 10,000 plus court fees. well something along that line. 100 is an insult. good luck with this!!
lulube
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Thanks awaiting contact again from security Edsel
Doctor Ricky
Comment from Mario PIERRE
The writing is convincingly good, I got a feeling that the character portrayed here experienced a sort of 'malaise' inside them, which in turn made them think that everything else is spinning about???
Couldn't make sense of the whole poem
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2023
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The writing is convincingly good, I got a feeling that the character portrayed here experienced a sort of 'malaise' inside them, which in turn made them think that everything else is spinning about???
Couldn't make sense of the whole poem
Comment Written 05-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2023
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Thxs for your honesty and review. Sorry I didn't get to you.
lulube
