Haiku(despite icy chill)
Seasonal haiku40 total reviews
Comment from Mary Shifman
Living in Maine, I've alway felt sorry the birds that arrive too early and find there is still snow on the ground. I know they find a way to survive but still, it can't be easy. Beautiful poem. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2023
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Living in Maine, I've alway felt sorry the birds that arrive too early and find there is still snow on the ground. I know they find a way to survive but still, it can't be easy. Beautiful poem. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2023
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Thanks for reviewing zanya
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You are welcome.
Comment from Sally Law
Loving this winter haiku. Perfectly illustrated in short verse poetry. I felt the chill after the week we've had!
Sending you my best today as always and my best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sally :))
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2023
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Loving this winter haiku. Perfectly illustrated in short verse poetry. I felt the chill after the week we've had!
Sending you my best today as always and my best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sally :))
Comment Written 29-Dec-2022
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Thanks for reviewing and sharing zanya
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image and presentation.
-A well written haiku with effective
nature and seasonal imagery.
-We can feel the "icy chill" and
hear the robin trill, and see it
"on bare branches."
-A very good satori line.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2023
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-Nice image and presentation.
-A well written haiku with effective
nature and seasonal imagery.
-We can feel the "icy chill" and
hear the robin trill, and see it
"on bare branches."
-A very good satori line.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2022
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Great review zanya
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You are welcome.
Comment from Celyn
This happens in my garden at the moment so it is very appropriate - well done. The poem has the required number of syllables per line for the Haiku contest and reads well. I like the internal rhyming of chill and trills and the idea of a robin's song being a melody for winter.
Good luck with it
Celyn
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2023
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This happens in my garden at the moment so it is very appropriate - well done. The poem has the required number of syllables per line for the Haiku contest and reads well. I like the internal rhyming of chill and trills and the idea of a robin's song being a melody for winter.
Good luck with it
Celyn
Comment Written 29-Dec-2022
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Thanks for reviewing and sharing zanya
Comment from Cherish Adams
So few words yet completely understandable. And spot on. The words you chose describe beautifully - icy chill - bare branches. Thank you for sharing. Great job.
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So few words yet completely understandable. And spot on. The words you chose describe beautifully - icy chill - bare branches. Thank you for sharing. Great job.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2022
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Great review zanya
Comment from harmony13
The first two lines flow and connect well. The last line says it all. I found
this poem uplifting as it brings in how the bird does well even "despite icy
chill" as the author states! The artwork is perfect and goes well with
these words.
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The first two lines flow and connect well. The last line says it all. I found
this poem uplifting as it brings in how the bird does well even "despite icy
chill" as the author states! The artwork is perfect and goes well with
these words.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2022
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Great review zanya
Comment from Douglas Goff
Interesting prompt not allowing rhymes. Someone needs to kick this robin square in the arse and get it moving south. It's almost January for crying out loud!
Cute Haiku. Most enjoyable!
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Interesting prompt not allowing rhymes. Someone needs to kick this robin square in the arse and get it moving south. It's almost January for crying out loud!
Cute Haiku. Most enjoyable!
Comment Written 29-Dec-2022
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Great reveiw zanya
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Great Haiku!
Comment from Nicki Nance
What a lovely accounting of a winter's day. I like sensory experience of the journey from icy and barren descriptors to the robin's melody. I suspect that if we mindfully focused on the sounds of the season, the barren, icy experience would diminish.
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What a lovely accounting of a winter's day. I like sensory experience of the journey from icy and barren descriptors to the robin's melody. I suspect that if we mindfully focused on the sounds of the season, the barren, icy experience would diminish.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2022
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Superb review zanya
Comment from RodG
This is a true haiku in that your poem paints a scene in Nature using the classic mode. It is easy for this reader to FEEL the chill and HEAR the robin sing. I especially like the subtle use of rhyme and alliteration. Lovely! Rod
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This is a true haiku in that your poem paints a scene in Nature using the classic mode. It is easy for this reader to FEEL the chill and HEAR the robin sing. I especially like the subtle use of rhyme and alliteration. Lovely! Rod
Comment Written 29-Dec-2022
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Superb review zanya
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
An elegant Haiku well illustrated. The robin in UK is the bird of Winter and its red breast is a cheerful sign in frozen weather. If you hear this bird, you feel Spring cannot be far away!
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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2023
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An elegant Haiku well illustrated. The robin in UK is the bird of Winter and its red breast is a cheerful sign in frozen weather. If you hear this bird, you feel Spring cannot be far away!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2022
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Great review zanya
