Abigail
A Little life that Almost Was47 total reviews
Comment from Boogienights
This poem was heartbreaking and yet at the same time hopeful. I believe that we will see the ones we love again, and perhaps live another life with them someday. Thank you for this beautiful poem.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2022
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This poem was heartbreaking and yet at the same time hopeful. I believe that we will see the ones we love again, and perhaps live another life with them someday. Thank you for this beautiful poem.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2022
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Thank you for reading, your kind comments, and all the stars!
I am a firm believer in the afterlife, and a family reunion. I agree with you, I also believe we live many lives.
irish
Comment from Ricky1024
Beautiful but so, so, sad
A Father's loss for his small daughter.
This was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Standard Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Thanks for sharing and have a blessed Christmas.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2022
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Beautiful but so, so, sad
A Father's loss for his small daughter.
This was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Standard Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Thanks for sharing and have a blessed Christmas.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 20-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2022
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Thank you Ricky, for reading, your in-depth comments, and all the stars!
Merry Christmas!
irish
Comment from Charles W. Johnson
Very touching. I beautiful tribute to your father and his love for your sister and I expect for you too. I enjoyed how this poem was structured with its short spaced lines. The rhyming is solid. It's both wonderful poetry and storytelling.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2022
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Very touching. I beautiful tribute to your father and his love for your sister and I expect for you too. I enjoyed how this poem was structured with its short spaced lines. The rhyming is solid. It's both wonderful poetry and storytelling.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2022
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Thank you, Charles, for reading, your comments, and all the stars!
irish
Comment from humpwhistle
You sure know how tug the hearts strings, irish. I wonder if you can make your guitar weep, too?
I think the heavenly reunion is the most powerful of the seeds of faith. Clouds and pearly gates can't compare to our need to be reunited.
The dream is lovely. But, do me a favor, don't pursue it too soon.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2022
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You sure know how tug the hearts strings, irish. I wonder if you can make your guitar weep, too?
I think the heavenly reunion is the most powerful of the seeds of faith. Clouds and pearly gates can't compare to our need to be reunited.
The dream is lovely. But, do me a favor, don't pursue it too soon.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 20-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2022
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Wow, thank you, Lee, for reading, your deep understanding, and the galaxy of stars! My guitar usta weep, but now just groans. I am a firm believer in the afterlife, and the reunion of family.
And yes, Ill stick around so I can read more of your great stories!
irish
Comment from Ben Colder
As sad as it is, it is still part of living. I lost a son, then his mother within three months of each other. Crying? I am not sure I have ever stopped crying on the inside. Your poem speaks very loudly--my blessing to you.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2022
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As sad as it is, it is still part of living. I lost a son, then his mother within three months of each other. Crying? I am not sure I have ever stopped crying on the inside. Your poem speaks very loudly--my blessing to you.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2022
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Hi, Ben, I can see you have been there too, a wound that will never heal. Thank you for reading, and all the stars.
irish
Comment from Douglas Goff
This is hauntingly beautiful. I would consider dropping the capitals. One times makes a read
More smooth flowing and potent. I think that would work here. Just my two cent suggestion.
Regardless, love this piece of work and am giving it a six. Nice work Master Poet.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2022
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This is hauntingly beautiful. I would consider dropping the capitals. One times makes a read
More smooth flowing and potent. I think that would work here. Just my two cent suggestion.
Regardless, love this piece of work and am giving it a six. Nice work Master Poet.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2022
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I am humbled. Thank you for reading, your great suggestions, and the galaxy of stars!
irish
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At times. Not one times. Gresham need editing fr
My review LOL
Comment from Karyn2
Oh gosh the tears in my eyes and the sting in my heart goes out to you. What a beautiful but truely sorrowful poem of Abigail angel. It sounds like your family has known heartache and loss and I'm sorry you've endured that. The picture is so stunning, combined with this poem what a tribute. You have a gift to capture this moment in such a heartfelt way.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2022
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Oh gosh the tears in my eyes and the sting in my heart goes out to you. What a beautiful but truely sorrowful poem of Abigail angel. It sounds like your family has known heartache and loss and I'm sorry you've endured that. The picture is so stunning, combined with this poem what a tribute. You have a gift to capture this moment in such a heartfelt way.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2022
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Wow, I am humbled. Thank you Karen, for reading, your heartfelt comments, and the galaxy of stars!
irish
Comment from Raul1
The sentences flow with clarity. This is a very creative and wonderful poem. I have enjoyed reading your poem. Excellent work! No mistakes found in your poetry. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2022
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The sentences flow with clarity. This is a very creative and wonderful poem. I have enjoyed reading your poem. Excellent work! No mistakes found in your poetry. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 20-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2022
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Hi, Raul, thank you for reading, your great comments, and all the stars!
irish
Comment from Alaskastory
"Abigail" is a beautifully told story. It is sure to bring a tear when reading of such tender feelings of the dad. The image of the child paints a most attractive picture. Well done!
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2022
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"Abigail" is a beautifully told story. It is sure to bring a tear when reading of such tender feelings of the dad. The image of the child paints a most attractive picture. Well done!
Comment Written 20-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2022
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Wow, I am humbled. Thank you fur reading, your kind comments, and that galaxy of stars! I am a firm believer in the afterlife, and a family reunion.
irish
Comment from Jay Squires
Oh, my Goodness! There is so much of the father here in this splendidly constructed poem, that reminds me of Zachary, the character in my play, NYCDoHD Spells Jobs (who lives so much within himself that he fails to grasp all of reality). And yet ... the Reality comes out in all its suddenness when your narrator's father looks down into his daughter's casket ... and again when his wife dies of a stroke.
Speaking of which ... please correct the spelling in your notes. It is too important to allow for misunderstanding. "The second time was when my Mom does suddenly".
I will be reading this poem again and again trying to figure out how so much emotion can be released from so few simple words.
Which begs a question: Where the heck have you been?
Jay
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Oh, my Goodness! There is so much of the father here in this splendidly constructed poem, that reminds me of Zachary, the character in my play, NYCDoHD Spells Jobs (who lives so much within himself that he fails to grasp all of reality). And yet ... the Reality comes out in all its suddenness when your narrator's father looks down into his daughter's casket ... and again when his wife dies of a stroke.
Speaking of which ... please correct the spelling in your notes. It is too important to allow for misunderstanding. "The second time was when my Mom does suddenly".
I will be reading this poem again and again trying to figure out how so much emotion can be released from so few simple words.
Which begs a question: Where the heck have you been?
Jay
Comment Written 20-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Wow, thank you, Jay, for reading, your in-depth review, all the stars, and that great correction suggestion! Fixed it. Don't post much, have some in my portfolio if you're interested. irish
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Well, I follow you and the reason I asked is that over the last year or so I haven't had your name pop up on my reading list.
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I have more time now to write, working on three stories I hope to post soon.
Please stay tuned!
irish
